Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler words (uh, um). Give one brief reason to support your frequency. Use a linking word if adding a detail.

Exemplo: Not really — I'm not a big fan of shopping, so I only buy shoes two or three times a year. I prefer to replace them when they wear out rather than follow fashion trends.

Sugestão: Remove fillers and correct small errors. State a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons (convenience, variety, returns). Use linking words (for example, because, so) and be careful with verb choice.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. I often buy shoes online because it’s very convenient — for example, I can compare styles and prices quickly, and returns are easy if they don’t fit.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clearer, more natural sentence and avoid fillers. If possible, give a brief range or explain the reason for that amount to add depth (quality, brand, type).

Exemplo: On average I spend about €50 per pair, although I might spend more on running shoes and less on casual sneakers.

Sugestão: Good structure and relevance. Improve by removing fillers and tightening language; use a linking phrase for contrast (however, whereas) and a concise topic sentence.

Exemplo: It depends on the situation. For work or the gym I prefer comfortable shoes; however, for parties or dates I choose fashionable shoes to make a good impression.

× Actually, I'm not huge fan of shopping, so I usually buy shoes two or three times a year.

✓ Actually, I'm not a huge fan of shopping, so I usually buy shoes two or three times a year.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'huge fan' is an article error. Use 'a' with singular countable nouns: 'a huge fan'. Suggestion: Add 'a' before 'huge fan' whenever describing being a fan of something.

× Online shopping is so convenient for me, You know, I even don't need to, don't need to go out, just order them at home and raise them and receive them a few days later.

✓ Online shopping is so convenient for me. You know, I don't even need to go out; I can just order them at home and receive them a few days later.

Multiple issues: sentence run-on and incorrect placement of 'even' and auxiliary verbs. 'I even don't need to' is unnatural in English; use 'I don't even need to'. Also 'raise them' is incorrect verb choice. Use modal or auxiliary 'can' for ability/possibility and remove 'raise'. Suggestion: Keep clause order 'I don't even need to...' and use 'I can just order them' and 'receive them'.

× Uh, I usually spend, uh, €50 on my shoes one time.

✓ Uh, I usually spend about €50 on shoes at a time.

Awkward phrasing 'on my shoes one time' and article use. When speaking of per-purchase amount, use 'at a time' and omit 'my' if general; add 'about' for naturalness. Suggestion: Use 'spend about €50 on shoes at a time' or 'spend €50 per pair'.

× But uh, I will choose good looking shoes if I go to a party or have a date.

✓ But, uh, I choose good-looking shoes if I go to a party or have a date.

Using 'will' in conditional here is unnecessary because the speaker describes habitual preference (general present). Use simple present 'choose' for habitual actions. Also 'good looking' should be hyphenated as 'good-looking' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual preferences and hyphenate compound adjectives.