Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and directly answer the question first (e.g. Yes/No and frequency). Use correct grammar (I’m an adult / I have responsibilities) and avoid filler words. Then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / so). Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I still like buying shoes, but I buy them much less often now. Because I have adult responsibilities such as paying bills and supporting my child, I usually shop for shoes only a few times a year. For that reason, I focus on practical purchases rather than frequent shopping.

Sugestão: Start with a clear direct answer, then describe one specific occasion briefly with correct tense and vocabulary. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. ‘eyebrows online’). Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas, and keep to 1–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. For example, once I needed a pair of dress shoes for an important event but didn’t have time to visit the mall, so I ordered a pair from a reliable online retailer. The shoes arrived on time and fit well, so I’ve used online shopping again since then.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear frequency and a simple estimate if possible (e.g. amount or range). Explain reasoning with one supporting detail using linking words like because or so. Fix tense and modal errors and avoid trailing off.

Exemplo: I usually spend only a modest amount on shoes, about $50–$80 per pair, and I buy shoes roughly twice a year. I do this because I need to balance my expenses and avoid compromising my monthly budget.

Sugestão: Give a direct preference statement first, then provide a specific reason with clearer grammar and fewer fillers. Use linking words such as because or since. Mention an example of the workplace activity to make it more specific and natural.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because my job requires a lot of walking and quick movements. For example, I’m on my feet all day and need supportive shoes that let me move quickly without discomfort.

× Actually, when I was younger, I really loved to buy a lot of shoes, but now that I'm already grown-ups and had a lot of responsibilities that put on my shoulder like paying bills, savings, go, uh, sending my child to school, I think it's more practical that I just.

✓ Actually, when I was younger, I really loved buying a lot of shoes, but now that I'm grown up and have a lot of responsibilities that fall on my shoulders, like paying bills, saving money, and sending my child to school, I think it's more practical to buy less.

Errors: incorrect use of 'grown-ups' (should be adjective 'grown up'), tense inconsistency ('had' should be 'have'), awkward verb forms ('put on my shoulder' -> 'fall on my shoulders'), and list items not parallel. Suggestion: use present tense 'have' to describe current responsibilities, use gerund 'buying' after 'loved', make list parallel and use correct phrases ('saving money'), and end with a clear verb phrase 'to buy less'.

× Absolutely yes. I had an event that I have to buy a shoes online I don't have I didn't have a time to go to the mall that time. So what I did is just eyebrows online and found this online website that's selling shoes. So what I need is a just.

✓ Absolutely. I had an event and had to buy shoes online because I didn't have time to go to the mall. So I searched online and found a website selling shoes, and that solved my need.

Errors: tense confusion ('had an event that I have to' should be past 'had to'), article misuse ('a shoes' -> 'shoes'), redundant negative forms ('I don't have I didn't have a time'); incorrect verb 'eyebrows' likely meant 'browsed' or 'searched'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events, remove unnecessary articles, use 'searched' or 'browsed' for online looking, and complete the final clause coherently.

× Just enough that will not compromise my monthly budget. Sometimes I just bought twice a year 'cause I think I am working off balancing my expenses versus my needs if I really need the.

✓ Just enough so that it does not compromise my monthly budget. Sometimes I only buy twice a year because I try to balance my expenses and my needs and only purchase when I really need to.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('will' vs past 'bought'); incorrect verb form 'bought' should be present 'buy' for habitual action; awkward phrase 'working off balancing'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions ('I only buy'), use 'so that it does not' for purpose clauses, and use 'balance my expenses and needs' for clarity.

× In my kind of work, uh, environment, I have to buy a comfortable shoes. I prefer those, uh, shoes that will give me a lot of options to move around because I always have to be physically, uh, fast and, uh, our, uh, job.

✓ In my kind of work environment, I have to buy comfortable shoes. I prefer shoes that allow me to move easily because I often have to be physically quick in my job.

Errors: article and adjective mismatch ('a comfortable shoes' should be 'comfortable shoes'), unnecessary filler words, awkward phrase 'give me a lot of options to move around' -> 'allow me to move easily', and incorrect 'be physically fast' -> 'be physically quick'. Suggestion: remove fillers, ensure noun-adjective agreement, and use concise verbs like 'allow' and adverbs like 'easily' or 'quickly'.