Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'charming for', 'a important', 'luxury shoes'). Use linking words like 'usually' or 'however' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes about twice a year, depending on my budget. For example, if I need to attend an important event, I will buy a more expensive, formal pair to match my outfit.

Sugestão: Make a clear, grammatical topic sentence and give one or two specific reasons. Correct verb forms and word choice: 'it provides me with more information', 'I feel more confident'. Use linking words like 'because' to show cause and 'for example' to illustrate.

Exemplo: Yes, I often buy sneakers online because the websites provide detailed information and customer reviews. For example, reading other buyers' comments helps me judge the fit and quality, so I feel more confident ordering.

Sugestão: Answer directly about typical spending, then explain the reason. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use specific ranges or examples (e.g., 'about $30–$60') and correct grammar ('students who struggle financially').

Exemplo: As a student, I usually spend around $30–$60 on a pair of shoes because I prioritise durability and comfort. I choose affordable brands that last, so I don't have to replace them often.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly and give a specific reason with an example. Avoid unclear words ('venistic') and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and keep sentences concise.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods and need them to last. For instance, I choose cushioned trainers that I can wear to classes and weekend outings without discomfort.

× Yes, I guess no one can resist the charming for buying shoes.

✓ Yes, I guess no one can resist the charm of buying shoes.

The noun 'charm' is the correct form to express an attractive quality; 'charming' is an adjective and does not fit after 'the'. Also use the preposition 'of' after 'charm' to link it to 'buying shoes'. Suggestion: use 'the charm of' when naming an appealing quality.

× I usually purchase shoes twice a year depending on my budget.

✓ I usually purchase shoes twice a year, depending on my budget.

Comma needed for clarity when adding the dependent clause 'depending on my budget'. The sentence's grammar is otherwise correct. Suggestion: add a comma before a short participle clause that modifies the main clause.

× For example, if I have to attend a important event, I will definitely go for a luxury shoes.

✓ For example, if I have to attend an important event, I will definitely go for a pair of luxury shoes.

Use 'an' before a vowel-sound adjective 'important' (article error). Also 'shoes' is plural so we should say 'a pair of luxury shoes' or 'luxury shoes' without 'a'. Suggestion: match article with the following word's sound and use 'pair of' when referring to footwear as a single item.

× Yes I definitely do a lot of shopping for sneakers online because it provide me more informations when I am purchase so the other sales story is more reliable that boosts my confidence shopping shows online.

✓ Yes, I definitely do a lot of shopping for sneakers online because it provides me with more information when I am shopping, and other sellers' reviews are more reliable, which boosts my confidence when buying online.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('it provide' should be 'it provides' or better 'it provides me with'), wrong noun form 'informations' should be uncountable 'information', incorrect verb form 'purchase' should be 'shopping' or 'buying', unclear phrase 'sales story' corrected to 'sellers' reviews', and sentence fragments merged for clarity. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with subjects, use uncountable nouns correctly, and keep parallel verb forms.

× Since I am just a student, I will definitely pursue more durable and comfortable shoes, which is realistic for the students who are struggle for their living.

✓ Since I am just a student, I will definitely choose more durable and comfortable shoes, which is realistic for students who are struggling with their living expenses.

Verb choice: 'pursue' is inappropriate for 'buying shoes' so use 'choose'. Agreement: 'which is realistic for the students' should be 'which is realistic for students' (remove unnecessary article). 'who are struggle' must be 'who are struggling' (present participle). Also clarify 'for their living' to 'with their living expenses'. Suggestion: select verbs that match the action, use correct progressive forms for ongoing states, and drop unnecessary articles.

× So I definitely prefer uh buying shoes in at a reasonable price.

✓ So I definitely prefer buying shoes at a reasonable price.

Remove the extra filler 'uh' and incorrect preposition combination 'in at'. Use only 'at' with 'a reasonable price'. Suggestion: use one preposition and avoid hesitation sounds in written answers.

× While I definitely go for comfortable shoes so I am more venistic and and people so I will definitely go for the shows that can last longer and feel comfortable.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I am more practical, and I choose shoes that will last longer and feel comfortable.

Original contains redundancy ('while...so'), repetition ('and and'), wrong word 'venistic' (not English) and 'shows' instead of 'shoes'. Rewrote to coherent structure: 'prefer... because...' and corrected vocabulary to 'practical' and 'shoes'. Suggestion: avoid contradictory connectors together; choose clear cause words (because) and check vocabulary and spelling.

× It allows me to attend several occasions.

✓ They allow me to attend several occasions.

Subject-verb agreement: the pronoun should refer to 'shoes' (plural), so use 'they allow' instead of 'it allows'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.