Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, reduce repetition, correct grammar (articles, verb forms), and give a brief reason or frequency. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Exemplo: Not really — I rarely buy shoes. I bought my current pair about two years ago because they were still in good condition, so I try to save money by using them until they wear out.

Sugestão: Start with a direct yes/no, correct grammar (plural/singular, tense), avoid filler words, and use one linking word to give a reason. Be specific about platforms or features to strengthen content.

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online — I currently own three pairs purchased from an e-commerce site. I prefer online shopping because it offers more color options and saves me time compared with going to shops.

Sugestão: Give a clear numeric answer and correct currency/word choice, avoid hesitation, and explain briefly how spending depends on purpose. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences and use a linking word to connect reason.

Exemplo: I usually spend about 1,000,000 VND on a pair of shoes. However, I might spend more for formal shoes for weddings or travel because I want them to look smart and last longer.

Sugestão: Good structure and content. Improve by choosing more precise vocabulary (e.g., “suit a formal outfit” instead of “suit for the red coat”), avoid minor grammar errors, and use a linking phrase to contrast choices.

Exemplo: It depends on the occasion. For meetings or formal events I prefer fashionable, formal shoes because they suit a smart outfit, but for daily use I choose comfortable shoes so I can stand and walk for long periods.

× You know the last time I bought a new shoes about two years ago and it, it was working properly.

✓ You know the last time I bought a new pair of shoes was about two years ago and it worked properly.

The noun 'shoes' is plural but the determiner 'a new' requires a singular noun; use 'a new pair of shoes' to match singular determiner with a plural item. Also remove redundant filler words and change 'it was working properly' to simple past 'it worked properly' to match the past time frame.

× So I think it it is it is very waste of money to buy a new one.

✓ So I think it is a very wasteful use of money to buy a new one.

The phrase 'very waste of money' is ungrammatical; use 'a waste of money' or 'a very wasteful use of money'. 'Wasteful' is an adjective modifying 'use'. Also remove repeated fillers 'it it is it is'.

× So I I think the old ones.

✓ So I prefer the old ones.

Original sentence lacks a main verb and is fragmented. Adding 'prefer' completes the sentence and expresses the intended meaning.

× Well always you know, I have 3 pairs of shoes and I bought it in the online platform shopping.

✓ Well, I usually buy shoes online; I have three pairs of shoes that I bought on online shopping platforms.

'Always' was misplaced; 'usually' better fits frequency. Use 'three' instead of numeral in speech contexts. 'Bought it' is incorrect pronoun reference for plural 'pairs' so use 'that I bought'. Use preposition 'on' with 'platforms'. This corrects adverb placement, pronoun reference, and preposition use.

× You know I prefer online shopping because rather than traditional shopping because I can choose my favorite colors and it's help me saving my time.

✓ I prefer online shopping rather than traditional shopping because I can choose my favorite colors and it helps me save time.

Use 'rather than' without repeated 'because'. 'It's help me saving my time' is incorrect: use 'it helps me save time' (subject-verb agreement and correct verb form). 'Save time' is the standard collocation.

× Well, I think I just spent about 1,000,000 Vietnam down for a pair of soup because M my shoes just used for formal conditions suggest a wedding event or some O uh, when I go travel, so I need I I don't spend.

✓ Well, I think I usually spend about 1,000,000 Vietnamese dong for a pair of shoes because my shoes are mainly used for formal occasions such as weddings or when I travel, so I don't spend much otherwise.

Tense and form errors: 'I just spent' suggests a completed action; context asks about usual spending so use 'usually spend'. Currency spelling: 'Vietnamese dong'. 'Pair of soup' is wrong—should be 'pair of shoes'. 'My shoes just used' needs passive 'are mainly used' and 'conditions' should be 'occasions'. 'When I go travel' -> 'when I travel'. Clarify ending: 'so I don't spend much otherwise.'

× For important events such as greetings or meetings, I prefer formal fashionable shoes because they look professional and suit for the red coat.

✓ For important events such as greetings or meetings, I prefer formal fashionable shoes because they look professional and suit the red coat.

The verb 'suit' does not require the preposition 'for' when indicating compatibility; use 'suit the red coat'. Alternatively, 'go well with the red coat' could be used. 'Formal fashionable' is acceptable though 'formal' alone may suffice.

× But for everyday use, I choose comfortable shoes so I can work and stand for a long time.

✓ But for everyday use, I choose comfortable shoes so I can work and stand for long periods.

'Stand for a long time' is understandable but 'stand for long periods' is a more natural collocation. Tense 'choose' is present simple and appropriate; only wording improved for naturalness.