Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법과 문장구조를 바로잡아 간결하고 자연스럽게 말하세요. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 빈도와 이유를 구체적으로 덧붙이되, 중복 표현과 어색한 구문(예: 'made by made by', 'my shoes is very various')을 피하세요. 또한 최대 4문장 이내로 유지하고 주제문(topic sentence) → 빈도(frequency) → 이유(reason) 순으로 논리적으로 연결어를 사용해 말하세요. 예: 'I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them a few times a year because I like updating my wardrobe.'

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them a few times a year because I like updating my wardrobe and trying new styles. For example, I buy sneakers for casual wear and dress shoes for special occasions.

Sugestão: 응답을 명확하게 정리하고 구체적인 상황을 제시하세요. 'Yes'로 시작해 얼마나 자주, 어떤 상황에서 온라인으로 구입하는지 구체적으로 설명하세요. 어색한 표현('use usual', 'buy my shoes or crosses in a line')을 자연스러운 문장으로 바꾸고 연결어(for example, because, when)를 적절히 사용하세요. 예: 'Yes, I often buy shoes online because it's convenient when I'm busy.'

Exemplo: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it's very convenient. For example, when I have a busy week or can't visit stores, I order sneakers from a website and have them delivered to my home.

Sugestão: 숫자와 단위, 이유를 정확히 표현하세요. '40,001'처럼 불분명한 금액 대신 실제 통화와 범위를 말하고(예: "+$40" or "around $40"), 비싼 신발에 투자하는 이유를 간결하게 설명하세요. 문장은 2~3문장으로 제한하고 중복 표현('long time long time')을 제거하세요. 예: 'I spend around $40 on a pair because higher-quality shoes last longer.'

Exemplo: I usually spend around $40 to $60 on a pair of shoes. I prefer paying a bit more for better quality because durable shoes last longer and are more comfortable.

Sugestão: 선호를 먼저 분명히 말한 뒤 이유와 구체적인 예를 하나 덧붙이세요. 'comfortable'와 'convenient'의 의미를 구분하고 자연스러운 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용하세요. 문장 구조를 단순화하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요. 예: 'I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot, so I usually choose sneakers.'

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot during the day. Therefore I usually choose sneakers or cushioned walking shoes that provide good support and comfort.

× I usually buy my shoes because my shoes is very various and fashion is made by made by shoes.

✓ I usually buy shoes because my shoes are very varied and fashionable.

Subject 'my shoes' is plural so verb should be 'are' (subject-verb agreement). 'Various' as used is incorrect; use 'varied' or 'different'. 'Fashion is made by made by shoes' is unclear; change to 'fashionable' to describe shoes. Suggestion: Use plural verb forms with plural nouns and use appropriate adjective forms (e.g., 'varied', 'fashionable').

× Therefore I usually buy it.

✓ Therefore I usually buy them.

Refers to plural 'shoes' so pronoun must be plural 'them'. 'It' is singular and creates pronoun reference error. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× Yes, nowadays online shopping mall is convenient.

✓ Yes, online shopping malls are convenient nowadays.

Missing plural and natural word order: 'shopping mall' as a general concept should be plural 'shopping malls' and use 'are' for plural. Also 'nowadays' normally appears at end or start; placing it at end is more natural. Suggestion: Match 'there be' sense by using appropriate article/number and verb: 'are convenient'.

× Therefore I use usual.

✓ Therefore I usually use it.

Incorrect word order: 'use usual' is ungrammatical. 'Usually' is the adverb that should modify the verb: 'I usually use it.' Also include object 'it' referring to online shopping. Suggestion: Place adverbs of frequency before the main verb.

× I usually use it for example, when I visit I I'm busy all night, then I buy my shoes or crosses in a line.

✓ For example, when I am very busy, I buy shoes online.

Original sentence has redundant words and incorrect phrases ('visit I I'm busy all night', 'crosses in a line'). Simplify and use correct tense: 'when I am very busy' (present state) and 'buy shoes online' expresses the intended meaning. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and remove unnecessary repetition; ensure correct verb forms and vocabulary ('buy shoes online').

× I usually spend 40,001 in one shoes because a little bit expensive shoes will keep long time long time.

✓ I usually spend 40,001 on a pair of shoes because slightly expensive shoes last a long time.

'one shoes' is wrong; use 'a pair of shoes' or 'one pair of shoes'. Preposition should be 'on'. 'a little bit expensive' should be 'slightly expensive'. 'will keep long time long time' is ungrammatical; use 'last a long time'. Suggestion: Use correct countable expressions ('a pair of'), correct prepositions ('spend on'), and correct collocations ('last a long time').

× Therefore I usually spend expense more insurance.

✓ Therefore I usually spend more on quality or insurance.

Original is jumbled: 'spend expense more insurance' is not grammatical. Clarify what is meant: likely 'spend more on quality or insurance' or 'spend more to ensure durability'. Suggestion: Express purpose and object of spending clearly: 'spend more on X'.

× I like comfortable shoes, like very convenient and I like working around.

✓ I like comfortable shoes because they are very convenient for walking around.

Use 'because' for reason. 'like very convenient' is incorrect structure; 'they are very convenient' is correct. 'walking around' is the correct verb phrase rather than 'working around'. Suggestion: Use full clauses for reasons and correct verb nouns: 'convenient for walking around'.

× Therefore I need convenient shoes to walk around and sneakers always I.

✓ Therefore I need comfortable shoes for walking around, and I always choose sneakers.

Word order 'sneakers always I' is wrong; place subject before verb: 'I always choose sneakers'. 'convenient shoes to walk around' is better as 'comfortable shoes for walking around'. Suggestion: Maintain natural English word order (subject-verb-object) and use appropriate prepositions ('for walking around').