Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy like repeating uncertainty. Use linking words such as “usually” or “sometimes” to structure the answer. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “pairs”, “occasionally”, “frequently”) and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy buying shoes, but I don't have a fixed routine. Usually I buy new pairs when I find styles I like; for example, some months I might buy two pairs, while other months I may not buy any.

Sugestão: Good clear reason and relevant detail. To improve, add a linking phrase and a brief example or consequence to make it more specific (e.g., mention a past sizing problem). Maintain natural phrasing and avoid repeating words like “before” unnecessarily.

Exemplo: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer trying them on to check fit and comfort. For example, once I ordered sneakers that turned out too narrow, so now I try shoes in-store to avoid that problem.

Sugestão: Clarify amounts and correct phrasing. Start with a concise topic sentence stating your current typical spend, then contrast briefly with the past. Avoid repetition and include currency consistently (e.g., “NT$1,000”). Use linking words like “previously” or “now”.

Exemplo: Nowadays I usually spend about NT$2,000 on a pair of shoes. Previously, when I was a child, my mother only allowed me to buy one pair costing around NT$1,000.

Sugestão: Good clear preference with reasons. To improve, use one linking word and add a brief specific example of the kind of shoes you choose (e.g., trainers or walking shoes) and a short consequence (e.g., less pain). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and exercise regularly. For example, I usually wear cushioned trainers that protect my feet, so I rarely get sore after long walks.

× Yes, I quite enjoy buying shoes, but I don't have a specific frequency for buying them.

✓ Yes, I quite enjoy buying shoes, but I don't have a specific frequency for doing so.

The original repeats 'buying' twice which is wordy; replacing the second with 'doing so' improves sentence structure and cohesion. Use noun phrase or pronoun to avoid repetition.

× I usually buy shoes when I see ones I like.

✓ I usually buy shoes when I see ones that I like.

Omitting 'that' is not strictly wrong in informal speech, but including the relative pronoun 'that' clarifies the noun clause and improves formality and clarity.

× Therefore I might buy 2 pairs of shoes in a month or not buy any at all.

✓ Therefore, I might buy two pairs of shoes in a month or not buy any at all.

Write out numbers under ten in formal writing and add a comma after 'Therefore' for correct punctuation. The tense is fine (modal 'might' expresses possibility).

× No, I have never bought shoes online before because I prefer to try them on to check the fit and comfort.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on to check the fit and comfort.

The word 'before' is redundant with 'have never' (present perfect). Removing 'before' makes the sentence more natural.

× I find the sizes vary between brands so I'd rather be sure before I buy.

✓ I find that sizes vary between brands, so I'd rather be sure before I buy.

Add 'that' after 'find' to introduce the subordinate clause and a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. This improves grammatical correctness and readability.

× When I was a child my mom only allowed me to buy one pair of shoes that cost around 1000 new $1000.

✓ When I was a child, my mom only allowed me to buy one pair of shoes that cost around NT$1,000.

Add a comma after the introductory clause. Use correct currency format ('NT$1,000') and remove the duplicate '1000 new $1000'. This fixes wording and format errors.

× After I became a college student I tend to buy a pair of shoes that cost around 2000 New Taiwan dollars.

✓ After I became a college student, I tended to buy pairs of shoes that cost around NT$2,000.

The sequence-of-time indicates a past habit after becoming a student, so use past tense 'tended'. Also pluralize 'pairs' to match general habit and format currency as 'NT$2,000'. Add comma after introductory clause.

× I totally prefer wearing comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day and usually exercise.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day and usually exercise.

Use 'prefer' followed directly by a noun ('comfortable shoes') rather than the gerund 'wearing' here. 'Definitely' is a better collocation than 'totally' in this context.

× Therefore I always choose a pair of shoes that won't hurt my feet rather than look nice.

✓ Therefore, I always choose shoes that won't hurt my feet rather than ones that just look nice.

Add a comma after 'Therefore' and include 'ones that just' to clarify the contrast. Using 'a pair of shoes' then 'look nice' is awkward; restructure to parallel phrases for clarity.