Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then give one or two specific reasons or details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct simple grammar (e.g., I and plural/singular agreement). Keep answers under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I love buying shoes and I usually buy new ones twice a year. I collect special editions with my dad because we enjoy remembering where and when we bought them. For example, we keep each pair in a box with a note about the trip or event when we bought them.

Sugestão: Provide a clear past-tense response and describe the purchase with specific details. Use proper tense (simple past) and avoid repetition. Add one linking phrase to connect details (for example, It was, and because). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I bought a pair of slippers from the Nike website last month. They were bright red from a new collection, so I chose them because they look cheerful and are perfect for sunny weather.

Sugestão: Give a precise average and correct number usage. Avoid unclear or exaggerated figures. Use linking words to explain frequency and reasons. Keep sentences short and grammatical, and be specific about currency and units.

Exemplo: I usually spend about $100 to $115 on a pair of shoes. I buy around two pairs each year from brands like Adidas and Nike because I prefer good quality and style.

Sugestão: Answer directly with your preference and then explain with specific examples and linking words (for example, however, so). Use correct grammar and avoid filler words. Limit to three sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: I try to balance both: I usually buy one comfortable pair and one fashionable pair each season. However, if I'm going out for photos or a party, I prefer fashionable shoes, while for coffee or long walks I choose comfort.

× Well, actually every single series of you know, Nike shoes open is you know out Me and my dad really loved to have ones cause I have a dream that becomes a shoes collectors, you know, for a future when I'm see pack shoes bring up my memory.

✓ Actually, every new Nike series that comes out, my dad and I really like to buy some because I want to become a shoe collector; in the future, seeing my shoe collections will bring back memories.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure errors (ID 26). It mixes fragments, incorrect word order, and unclear references. Suggestions: break into clear clauses, use correct subject order ('my dad and I' not 'Me and my dad'), use correct verb forms ('comes out' for series appearing), use 'buy' instead of 'have ones', and use 'become a shoe collector' for intention. Use punctuation to separate ideas and keep tense consistent.

× Well, last month I have bought a new shoes on Nike website and actually that was a slippers Yeah, and that was a new series have a red color, a a a pride that flashy that's look flashy and you know, that's really bright to when you go out with the sun with the sunny season.

✓ Last month I bought a pair of slippers on the Nike website; they were from a new series and were bright red and very flashy, which is nice for sunny weather.

This sentence shows incorrect use of present perfect for a finished past time and other tense/form errors (ID 5). Use simple past 'bought' with a specified time ('last month'). Use 'a pair of slippers' not 'a new shoes' and maintain agreement in number ('they were'). Simplify adjectives ('bright red and very flashy') and clarify the context ('sunny weather').

× Last month I have bought a new shoes on Nike website and actually that was a slippers Yeah, and that was a new series have a red color, a a a pride that flashy that's look flashy and you know, that's really bright to when you go out with the sun with the sunny season.

✓ Last month I bought a pair of slippers on the Nike website; they were from a new series and were bright red and very flashy, which is nice for sunny weather.

This repeats singular/plural issues (ID 1). Use 'a pair of slippers' or 'a pair of shoes' instead of 'a new shoes', and match pronoun/verb number ('they were') with the plural noun 'pair' or 'slippers'.

× Well, it's around, you know, 100 to like 115 is the maximum. And every, every single years I gotta buy, you know, 22 new shoes from Adidas and Nike. Yeah. And nowadays I'm looking for, you know, I'm actually accumulate.

✓ I usually spend around 100 to 115. Every year I have to buy about two new pairs of shoes from Adidas and Nike. Nowadays I'm actually saving up for more.

This has present tense and number agreement problems (ID 6 and ID 1). Use 'usually spend' for habitual present. 'Every year' (singular) not 'years', and 'two new pairs' instead of '22 new shoes'. 'Gotta' is informal; use 'have to'. 'I'm actually saving up' is a clear present continuous phrase for ongoing action.

× Well, I'm actually like buff, you know, every time I buy a shoes in the years I used to watch 1 by 1, like one for comfortable and one for fashionable.

✓ I actually try to balance my purchases: each time I buy shoes I get one for comfort and one for fashion.

This includes incorrect gerund/participle usage (ID 8) and awkward phrasing. Replace 'like buff' and 'buy a shoes in the years I used to watch 1 by 1' with clearer structure. Use 'each time I buy shoes' and 'I get one for comfort and one for fashion'.

× Well, I'm actually like buff, you know, every time I buy a shoes in the years I used to watch 1 by 1, like one for comfortable and one for fashionable.

✓ I actually try to balance my purchases: each time I buy shoes I get one for comfort and one for fashion.

Pronoun and determiner errors (ID 12): use 'shoes' without 'a' and avoid vague references like 'I used to watch 1 by 1'. Use precise expressions and correct determiners ('each time' instead of 'in the years').

× And when I'm need to, you know, hang out with you, like snapping a shot and running to Instagram. I would really like to wear a fashionable and when I'm just go to coffee, hang out my friend. So I choose all at once.

✓ When I need to hang out with friends and take photos for Instagram, I prefer to wear fashionable shoes. When I just go for coffee with a friend, I choose comfortable ones. Sometimes I want both qualities at once.

This contains pronoun and sentence structure errors (ID 12 and ID 26). Use 'when I need to' (add 'to'), 'hang out with friends' not 'hang out with you', and 'take photos' instead of 'snapping a shot and running to Instagram'. Use parallel structure and correct object forms ('with a friend'). Clarify final idea: 'both qualities at once'.