Rules— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers (uh), use past/present consistently, and include specific examples in one or two supporting sentences. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. There were many rules at my school. For example, we had to wear the school uniform every day, keep our hair short, and keep our nails and shoes clean. These rules were strictly enforced by teachers.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion followed by a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid repetition and hesitation. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I think more rules can help. Because following rules teaches students discipline and adaptability; for example, learning punctuality at school helps them meet deadlines at work later.

Sugestão: Use a clear topic sentence and correct verb forms. Add one specific detail to show dedication and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. My English teacher was very dedicated and experienced. He not only taught grammar but also gave me personal advice about studies and life, and he helped me correct mistakes after class.

Sugestão: State your preference clearly and follow with a concise reason and a concrete example. Remove redundant phrases and correct grammar (e.g., 'help children prepare for their futures').

Exemplo: I prefer more rules at school because they help students develop good habits. For instance, rules about punctuality and homework prepare students to meet responsibilities in future jobs.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid hesitation. Use correct tense and a linking phrase to explain the effect of strictness. Provide one specific example of how she enforced rules.

Exemplo: Yes. My social science teacher was very strict; she assigned homework every day and checked it the next morning. If a student did not complete the work, she would give a warning or detention.

Sugestão: Clarify your position and correct tense and redundancy. Explain why you would accept such a job and give a short example of how you would teach students without strict rules. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I would consider it. If I had the opportunity, I would teach in a rule-free school but focus on encouraging self-discipline by setting clear expectations and modeling good behavior.

× Yes, there are lots of rules in my school, uh, when I was in school, uh, we have two year uniform and cut hairs according to school, uh, and nails and polished your shoes when you are in school.

✓ Yes, there were lots of rules at my school. When I was in school, we had a two-year uniform policy, had to cut our hair according to school rules, keep our nails short, and polish our shoes while we were at school.

The speaker mixes present and past tenses. The context 'when I was in school' requires past tense. Change 'are' to 'were', 'have' to 'had', and convert other verbs to past forms or add appropriate modal constructions ('had to cut', 'keep', 'polish') to match past habitual rules. Use consistent past tense for clarity.

× Yes, uh, in their future life, they can adjust in any situation, uh, after living in, in those rules, uh, because rule, uh, rule taught us how to modify ourselves according to the nature.

✓ Yes. In their future life, they can adapt to any situation after living under those rules, because rules teach us how to adjust ourselves to circumstances.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb choices: 'adjust in' should be 'adapt to' or 'adjust to'; 'after living in those rules' should be 'living under those rules'; 'rule taught' should be 'rules teach' if stating a general truth, or 'rules taught us' if referring to past. Use present simple for general statements ('teach') and correct prepositions.

× Yes, my English teacher, he was very experienced and he taught me many lessons regarding my life and regarding my subject. So he always take care of me whenever I was wrong so.

✓ Yes, my English teacher was very experienced and taught me many lessons about my life and my subject. He always took care of me whenever I was wrong.

Redundant subject 'he' after noun is unnecessary. Use past tense 'took care' to agree with 'was' and 'taught'. Remove filler 'so' at the end. Also 'regarding' is better replaced with 'about' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer to have more rules in school because having more rules can help children to for their futures so that they can modify themselves according to the circumstances.

✓ I prefer more rules at school because having more rules can help children prepare for their futures so that they can adapt to different circumstances.

Awkward infinitive and word choice: remove 'to' after 'help' when followed by a verb meaning 'prepare' or use 'help children to prepare'. 'Modify themselves according to the circumstances' is unnatural; use 'adapt to different circumstances'. Ensure prepositions ('at school') are correct.

× Yes. Uh, my social science teacher was very strict and she always give homework and when, uh, next day she used to check that homework, if anybody, uh, anybody didn't uh, do that homework, then she punished them.

✓ Yes. My social science teacher was very strict and she always gave homework and the next day she used to check it. If anyone did not do the homework, she punished them.

Tense inconsistency: 'give' should be past 'gave' to match 'was' and 'used to check'. Use 'the next day' rather than 'when, next day'. Replace double 'anybody' with one 'anyone'. Use 'did not do' for past negative.

× Yes, I would. If I if I get an opportunity then I obviously try to work as a teacher in a rule free school and I taught them the children of that school how to walk on rules.

✓ Yes, I would. If I got the opportunity, I would try to work as a teacher in a rule-free school and teach the children of that school how to follow rules.

Mixed conditional forms: 'If I get an opportunity' with 'I would' is inconsistent — use 'If I got' with 'I would'. 'Try to work' should match conditional. 'I taught' is past tense and conflicts with conditional; use 'teach'. 'Walk on rules' is incorrect idiom; use 'follow rules'. Hyphenate 'rule-free' and correct noun order.