Part 1
Examinador
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Candidato
There are divorce rules in my school. For instance, my school has a strict smoking rule. UMM students are not allowed to smoke on campus or in UH dormitories.
Examinador
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Candidato
Yes, I think just like I mentioned, the smoking rules is one of the, it's one of the examples. Umm, it's protect the students from, uh, the second hand smoke and protect the environment.
Examinador
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Candidato
When I was a junior student, I have I had a delicate teacher, UMM who is who was very warm hearted. For instance, she always did after the lessons to help us correct character our English mistakes.
Examinador
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Candidato
I prefer to have more rules at school, umm, because it can uh, establish a more, more, a better learning environment and uh, help and protect students more.
Examinador
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Candidato
Yes, umm, it's same as I was a junior student, I have a very strict math teacher. Umm he was very strict about our homeworks and the the behaviors in classes.
Examinador
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Candidato
No, I wouldn't, because in a rough race school it means students can freely do what they want to do, and it's not convenient for for teachers to, uh, regulate the.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 明确直接回答问题并使用自然表达;纠正词汇错误(“divorce rules”应为“diverse/various rules”或直接说“many rules”)并减少犹豫语气。可以先给出总体陈述,然后举一两个具体例子,句子不宜过多重复。
Exemplo: Yes, there are many rules at my school. For example, smoking is strictly prohibited on campus and in student dormitories to protect health and maintain cleanliness.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: 回答要更直接并使用连贯衔接词;注意语法(主谓一致,时态和冠词)。减少填充词(umm, uh),并给出具体原因或例子支持观点。
Exemplo: Yes, I do. For instance, a stricter smoking policy protects students from second-hand smoke and helps keep campus grounds clean.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: 用正确词汇表达(“delicate”错误,应为“dedicated”或“caring”);句子结构要清晰,先给主题句再举具体例子;避免重复并注意动词时态一致。
Exemplo: Yes, when I was in junior high I had a very dedicated teacher. She often stayed after class to help us correct our English mistakes and gave personalized feedback.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: 回答要更简洁有力,减少重复和犹豫词;使用连词(because, so)来组织理由,并给出具体例子说明规则如何改善学习环境。
Exemplo: I prefer more rules because they create a calmer atmosphere for studying and can prevent disruptions, such as rules about punctuality and classroom behavior.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: 回答要更流畅并修正语法(过去时一致,homeworks→homework);减少重复词并用连词扩展细节,例如说明严格的影响或结果。
Exemplo: Yes, I had a very strict math teacher in junior high. He enforced homework deadlines and classroom discipline, which actually helped me improve my study habits.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 表达要准确清晰,避免使用模糊或错误短语(如“rough race school”);完整说明原因并给出一两点支持。注意句子完整性,避免句子突然中断。
Exemplo: No, I wouldn't. In a school without rules students might behave unpredictably, making it difficult for teachers to maintain order and teach effectively.
× There are divorce rules in my school.
✓ There are diverse rules in my school.
原句中的“divorce”拼写与语境不符,应为“diverse”(各种各样的)。这是词汇拼写错误导致的文章/词选择问题,中文建议:注意区分近似拼写单词,写作时多检查拼写。
× Umm students are not allowed to smoke on campus or in UH dormitories.
✓ Students are not allowed to smoke on campus or in UH dormitories.
句首的“Umm”是口语填充词,不影响语法,但书面答案中应去除。主语“Students”与被动结构“are not allowed”一致。中文建议:口语填充词可在书面表达中省略以保证句子简洁。
× Yes, I think just like I mentioned, the smoking rules is one of the, it's one of the examples.
✓ Yes, I think, just like I mentioned, the smoking rules are one of the examples.
主语“the smoking rules”为复数,谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”而不是“is”。中文建议:主谓一致时,复数主语要用复数动词,注意复数标记和动词形式。
× Umm, it's protect the students from, uh, the second hand smoke and protect the environment.
✓ Umm, it protects the students from second-hand smoke and protects the environment.
此处主语为“it”(指“the smoking rule”),应使用第三人称单数现在时“protects”。另外“second hand smoke”应连字符或作为固定词组“second-hand smoke”。中文建议:当主语为第三人称单数时,动词需加-s;注意复合词和固定搭配的写法。
× When I was a junior student, I have I had a delicate teacher, UMM who is who was very warm hearted.
✓ When I was a junior student, I had a dedicated teacher who was very warm-hearted.
句中时态应统一为过去时,“have I had”是重复且错误,改为“had”;“delicate”用词不当,应为“dedicated(敬业的)”;“is who was”也重复,应仅用过去时“was”。中文建议:叙述过去经历时使用过去时,避免重复助动词并注意词汇选择(delicate与dedicated区分)。
× For instance, she always did after the lessons to help us correct character our English mistakes.
✓ For instance, she always stayed after the lessons to help us correct our English mistakes.
原句结构混乱。“did after the lessons”不合适,正确表达为“stayed after the lessons”;“correct character our English mistakes”词序错误,应为“correct our English mistakes”。中文建议:注意动词搭配(stay after)和英语正常词序(correct + 宾语),不要在名词前插入多余词。
× I prefer to have more rules at school, umm, because it can uh, establish a more, more, a better learning environment and uh, help and protect students more.
✓ I prefer to have more rules at school because they can help establish a better learning environment and better protect students.
原句中代词和结构重复、词序不当。主语“rules”为复数,后文应用“they can”而不是“it can”;“help establish”是固定搭配;“help and protect students more”表达笨拙,改为“help... and better protect students”。中文建议:注意代词指代一致(复数用they),避免重复词汇,使用常见搭配(help establish)。
× Yes, umm, it's same as I was a junior student, I have a very strict math teacher.
✓ Yes, when I was a junior student, I had a very strict math teacher.
句子时态和结构错误。应以过去时“had”;“it's same as I was a junior student”不自然,改为“When I was a junior student”。中文建议:叙述过去经历用过去时,使用自然的时间状语从句结构。
× Umm he was very strict about our homeworks and the the behaviors in classes.
✓ He was very strict about our homework and the behaviors in class.
“homework”不可数,不能加复数-s;“behaviors”在此语境多用不可数或复数“behavior”也可,但更自然为“the behavior in class”或“in classes”。去掉重复的“the”。中文建议:注意不可数名词(homework)不加-s,避免冠词重复并使用自然短语“in class”。
× No, I wouldn't, because in a rough race school it means students can freely do what they want to do, and it's not convenient for for teachers to, uh, regulate the.
✓ No, I wouldn't, because in a rule-free school it would mean students could freely do what they want, and it would not be convenient for teachers to regulate them.
原句多个拼写与结构错误: “rough race”应为“rule-free”;时态与情态应与“wouldn't”匹配,使用“would/ could”;结尾缺宾语,应为“regulate them”。中文建议:注意词汇拼写(rule-free)和句子完整性,虚拟语气中保持时态一致并补充必要宾语。