Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar errors, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas. Add one specific detail (e.g., a recent book or how often you read) and keep to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy reading, especially history and popular science, because I’m interested in archaeology. I usually visit the library twice a week and spend an hour there reading. Last month I read a book about ancient civilizations that inspired me to study archaeological sites further.

Sugestão: Make the answer more direct and natural. Use a clear topic sentence, vary vocabulary (e.g., “making friends” instead of “finding”), and include a brief specific detail or example. Use a linking word to connect cause and effect.

Exemplo: As a child, I loved going to the playground and making new friends. Because I enjoyed meeting people, I often went there with my parents on weekends. One time I met a friend who later moved to my school, which made me very happy.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and cohesion: use present perfect for a hobby continuing from childhood (e.g., “I have enjoyed sewing since childhood”). Keep sentences concise and include a specific recent example, but avoid repeating opinions. Add a linking phrase to show sequence.

Exemplo: I have enjoyed sewing since childhood because it lets me create useful items. For example, I recently finished a sweater I’d been knitting for weeks and gave it to my boyfriend. Sewing helps me relax and also saves money on clothing repairs.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and reduce repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating the similarity, fix verb agreement, and give a specific routine (how often, where, or for how long). Use a linking word to explain why you enjoy it together.

Exemplo: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family, especially my dad. He enjoys jogging and I like jogging too, so we usually run together on weekend mornings for about 30 minutes. Exercising together is a good way for us to catch up and stay healthy.

× I have a hobby of reading books.

✓ I enjoy reading books.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but stylistically better to use 'enjoy' to express a habitual activity in the present. Use present simple 'enjoy' for repeated actions. Suggestion: replace noun phrase 'have a hobby of' with the verb 'enjoy' for natural spoken English.

× I usually read books like history and science because I am interested in archaeology.

✓ I usually read books about history and science because I am interested in archaeology.

Use the preposition 'about' (not 'like') to indicate the subjects of the books. 'Like' would mean examples rather than topics. Use 'books about history and science' to show the topics.

× So I often go to the library and my free time to read books.

✓ So I often go to the library in my free time to read books.

The original word order is incorrect. The correct prepositional phrase is 'in my free time'. Place it after 'go to the library' or before the verb phrase: 'in my free time, I often go to the library to read books.'

× My hobby as a child was going to the playground and finding new friends.

✓ My hobby as a child was going to the playground and making new friends.

Use 'making new friends' instead of 'finding new friends'; 'making friends' is the natural collocation for forming friendships. 'Finding' is not grammatically wrong but sounds odd; use the gerund 'making' to parallel 'going'.

× I was really happy when I was with new friends because I love to meet new people.

✓ I was really happy when I was with new friends because I loved meeting new people.

Maintain tense consistency: the clause begins in past ('I was'), so the reason clause should also use past tense: 'loved meeting' not 'love to meet'. Also use 'meeting' (present participle/gerund) after 'loved' to express the activity.

× So I often went to the playground with my parents in the weekends to find friends.

✓ So I often went to the playground with my parents on weekends to make friends.

Use 'on weekends' (not 'in the weekends'). Also 'make friends' is the natural collocation. No article is needed before 'weekends'.

× Since childhood, I had a hobby of sewing.

✓ Since childhood, I have had a hobby of sewing.

Use present perfect 'have had' to express a situation that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Since' requires present perfect when the situation still holds.

× I think sewing is a pretty good hobby because I can make a variety of things from a single thread.

✓ I think sewing is a pretty good hobby because I can make a variety of things from a single thread.

Sentence is grammatically correct; keep as is. (No correction needed.)

× For example, last week I finished making a sweater that I've been working on for weeks and I gave it to my boyfriend.

✓ For example, last week I finished making a sweater that I had been working on for weeks and gave it to my boyfriend.

When describing a completed past action ('last week I finished'), the action of working on it earlier should use past perfect 'had been working' to show it occurred before the finishing. Also omit the second subject 'I' before 'gave' to avoid repetition.

× I do have the same hobbies as my family members, especially with my dad.

✓ I do have the same hobbies as some of my family members, especially my dad.

Use 'some of my family members' or 'my family members' without 'with'. 'Especially my dad' is the natural phrasing. 'Do have' is acceptable for emphasis but not necessary.

× I share similar hobbies.

✓ I share similar hobbies with him.

The original sentence is grammatical but lacks a clear object; adding 'with him' clarifies that the hobbies are shared with the dad. Alternatively, keep as 'I share similar hobbies.'

× For example, he likes jogging and I also looks like jogging.

✓ For example, he likes jogging and I also like jogging.

'I' takes the base form 'like' (not 'looks'). Also remove 'looks' which is incorrect here. Use parallel verbs 'likes' and 'like'.

× So in the weekends when I have time with my dad, we usually go jogging together.

✓ So on weekends, when I have time with my dad, we usually go jogging together.

Use 'on weekends' (not 'in the weekends'). Place the comma after the introductory phrase for clarity. The rest is fine.