Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Shorten and clarify your topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and add a linking phrase and one specific detail. For example, state your main hobby, then briefly mention badminton with a reason and a specific example of when you play.

Exemplo: I have been passionate about dancing since childhood. Recently, I also started playing badminton with friends for fitness and to meet people; we play twice a week at a local sports center.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, then use a linking word to add the piano detail and give a concise reason for stopping. Keep to two or three sentences and use past tense consistently.

Exemplo: Yes, dancing was my main hobby as a child. I also tried piano for a few months, but I stopped when my family relocated to another city.

Sugestão: Make the grammar natural: use present perfect for continuing hobbies and correct conditional phrasing for wishes. Add a specific example of another activity you wish you'd learned.

Exemplo: Yes, I have been dancing since childhood. I wish I had learned swimming as well, because it would be useful for health and travel.

Sugestão: Combine sentences to avoid repetition, correct verb forms, and add a concise example of shared activity. Mention how your mother's dancing influenced you with a linking phrase.

Exemplo: Yes, my mother also enjoys dancing, and watching her sparked my interest. She mainly dances for fitness and fun, and we sometimes practice simple routines together at home.

× Yes, dancing has been the only hobby since my childhood, but lately I've started to play badminton with my friends so that it helps for better socialization and for fitness.

✓ Yes, dancing has been my only hobby since childhood, but lately I've started playing badminton with my friends because it helps me socialize and stay fit.

Original issues: unnecessary 'the' with 'only hobby' and awkward phrase 'since my childhood'; use 'since childhood'. 'Started to play' is acceptable but 'started playing' is more natural with 'start' + -ing. 'So that it helps for better socialization and for fitness' is unidiomatic: use 'because it helps me socialize and stay fit'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles, use 'started playing', and use 'because' with direct objects 'helps me socialize' and 'stay fit'.

× Dancing has been the only hobby since I was a child and I tried playing a piano for a few months but I've stopped it.

✓ Dancing has been my only hobby since I was a child, and I tried playing the piano for a few months, but I stopped.

Errors: 'has been the only hobby since I was a child' better as 'has been my only hobby since I was a child' (article and possessive). 'playing a piano' is incorrect—use 'playing the piano' for the activity. 'I've stopped it' is unnecessary and awkward; use simple past 'I stopped' when referring to a finished action. Suggestions: use 'the piano' for the activity, prefer simple past for completed past actions, and clean up articles/possessives.

× I had to stop it just because my parents were relocating.

✓ I had to stop because my parents were relocating.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary after 'stop' when the context is clear; removing it makes the sentence more natural. Tense 'were relocating' is appropriate for background action, and 'had to stop' correctly shows obligation in the past. Suggestion: omit redundant pronouns when the object is already implied.

× Dancing has been the only hobby since I had from my childhood, but I wish I have learned some other activities as well.

✓ Dancing has been my only hobby since childhood, but I wish I had learned some other activities as well.

Original has awkward phrasing 'since I had from my childhood'—use 'since childhood' or 'since I was a child'. The second clause mixes tenses incorrectly: use past perfect 'I wish I had learned' to express regret about not learning earlier. Suggestions: simplify the time expression and use past perfect for unreal past wishes.

× Yes, my mom enjoys to dance also she's not a great dancer but I have started enjoying by just looking at her and maybe my interest started from that.

✓ Yes, my mom enjoys dancing. She's not a great dancer, but I began enjoying it just by watching her, and maybe my interest started from that.

Problems: 'enjoys to dance' should be 'enjoys dancing' (verb + -ing). Run-on sentence needs splitting. 'I have started enjoying by just looking at her' is awkward; use 'I began enjoying it just by watching her'. Use 'began' or 'started' in simple past for a habit formation. Replace 'looking at' with 'watching' and include object 'it' for clarity. Suggestions: use 'enjoys dancing', split sentences, and use natural verbs 'watch' and 'begin' plus appropriate tense.

× But she usually dances for fitness and for joy.

✓ She usually dances for fitness and for enjoyment.

Minor style: 'for joy' is grammatically possible but sounds awkward; 'for enjoyment' or 'for fun' is more natural in this context. 'Usually dances' is correct present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: prefer 'for enjoyment' or 'for fun' to sound natural.