Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be slightly more concise and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example and a brief reason. Avoid small redundancy (e.g., "after a tired day" → "after a long day"). Use one linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I have two main hobbies: reading and drawing. For example, I enjoy contemporary fiction because it helps me unwind after a long day at work, and I often meet new people when I share book recommendations or my sketches online.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and be a bit more specific about examples. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concrete examples (what you made) and a short reason using a linking word.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved drawing and making handicrafts as a child. For instance, I often made paper models and painted animals, and these activities helped me express my feelings and gave me a strong sense of achievement.

Sugestão: Good structure and clarity—only small improvements: use consistent tense and add a brief linking phrase to connect past and present. Mention a specific recent example to show continuity.

Exemplo: Yes, I have loved drawing since childhood and even took art classes when I was young. Consequently, I still sketch landscapes and portraits regularly; last weekend I sketched a nearby park to practice shading.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and clarity issues: answer directly with one topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific comparisons using linking words. Fix grammatical errors and avoid repeating words ("enjoy" twice).

Exemplo: No, we don't have the same hobbies. For example, I prefer reading and sketching, whereas my family likes watching different films, so although we usually spend free time differently, we often talk about our interests when we meet.

× Yes, I love the drawing and making handicrafts as a child because those creative activities helped me express my feelings and ideas.

✓ Yes, I loved drawing and making handicrafts as a child because those creative activities helped me express my feelings and ideas.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence refers to childhood (past) so verbs describing habitual past actions should be in the past tense. 'Love' (present) is incorrect; change to 'loved'. Also 'the drawing' is unnatural with 'the' before a general hobby; use the noun without article ('drawing'). Suggestion: keep all childhood references in past tense for consistency.

× I enjoy reading and enjoying various.

✓ I enjoy reading and enjoying various activities.

The word 'various' is a determiner that requires a noun to complete the idea. The sentence ends abruptly without specifying what is 'various'. Add a noun such as 'activities' to clarify. Also the repetition 'enjoy reading and enjoying' is redundant; consider 'I enjoy reading and a variety of other activities' for smoother phrasing.

× My families prefers alternate movies so our leisure activities are usually different and we often discuss our hobbies when we get together.

✓ My family prefers alternate movies, so our leisure activities are usually different and we often discuss our hobbies when we get together.

Pluralization and subject-verb agreement: 'families' (plural) is incorrect if referring to one family; use 'family' (singular). The verb 'prefers' must match the singular subject 'family' (which it does). Also 'alternate movies' is awkward—likely meant 'different movies' or 'alternating movies' if family members take turns choosing films. Suggest using 'different movies' or 'take turns choosing movies' for clarity. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.