Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief supporting details using linking words. Correct verbs and noun phrases (e.g., “I’ve been swimming since I was a child”; “cooking lets me be creative”). Avoid unnecessary fillers and redundancy.

Exemplo: I have two main hobbies: swimming and cooking. I’ve been swimming since childhood because it helps me relax and keeps me fit. In addition, I enjoy cooking because it lets me be creative and try new cuisines.

Sugestão: Use past or past-continuous appropriately and combine ideas with linking words. Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like “and that's it.”

Exemplo: Yes. As a child I regularly swam in the small pool at our family farm with my siblings. Swimming helped me relax and clear my mind, and we often played games in the water together.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and repetition. Give a concise direct answer: state the hobby, say how long you’ve done it, and give frequency with linking words. Use correct tense and sentence structure.

Exemplo: Yes, I have — I’ve been swimming since childhood with my siblings. I still swim about twice a week because it relaxes me and keeps me healthy.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly. Begin with a topic sentence (Yes/No), then give specific contrasts using linking words (however, while, for example). Avoid filler words and incorrect grammar (e.g., “each of us has our own hobbies”).

Exemplo: Not really — each of us has different hobbies. For example, I enjoy swimming, while my siblings prefer cooking or reading in their free time.

× I'm swimming since I was a child because I feel it's relaxed and I can enjoy it.

✓ I have been swimming since I was a child because I feel relaxed and I enjoy it.

Use present perfect continuous or present perfect for actions that began in the past and continue now. 'I'm swimming since' is incorrect; 'have been swimming' shows continuity. 'I feel it's relaxed' is unnatural: 'I feel relaxed' is correct. 'I can enjoy it' is acceptable but 'I enjoy it' is more natural for a habitual action.

× Additionally, I like cooking because it's let me a big writing and I can cook a new cuisines and.

✓ Additionally, I like cooking because it allows me to be creative and I can cook new cuisines.

The original has multiple problems: 'it's let me a big writing' is ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'it lets me be creative' or 'it allows me to express myself'. 'a new cuisines' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'new cuisines' or 'a new cuisine'. Also remove trailing 'and'. Use 'allows' (verb) correctly.

× I have one hobbies that's swimming regularly in our farm that we have a small swimming pool and I swim with my siblings that lets me relax and avoid over thinking and that's it.

✓ I had one hobby: swimming regularly at our farm; we have a small swimming pool and I swim with my siblings, which lets me relax and avoid overthinking.

'one hobbies' mixes singular and plural; should be 'one hobby'. 'in our farm' should be 'at our farm'. 'that lets me' refers to swimming so use 'which lets me'. 'over thinking' should be one word 'overthinking'. Tense adjusted to past 'had' to answer 'Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?'. Punctuation and sentence structure improved for clarity.

× I have one hobbies that's swimming regularly in our farm that we have a small swimming pool and I swim with my siblings that lets me relax and avoid over thinking and that's it.

✓ I had one hobby: swimming regularly at our farm; we had a small swimming pool and I swam with my siblings, which let me relax and avoid overthinking.

Alternatively, because the question asks about childhood, past tense is appropriate: 'had', 'swam', 'let' and 'we had a small swimming pool'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct prepositions.

× Uh, well, as I said before, that's uh, one hobby is that I have it, uh, since I was childhood, uh, swimming with my siblings. Let me relax. I swim, uh, swim regularly, uh, maybe, uh, two times, uh, two times, uh, in the week. So I love.

✓ As I said, I have had one hobby since childhood: swimming with my siblings; it helps me relax. I swim regularly, maybe twice a week, so I love it.

The original is disfluent with fillers and fragments. Use clearer structure: 'I have had one hobby since childhood' or 'I have one hobby since childhood' with present perfect. 'Let me relax' should be 'it helps me relax' or 'it lets me relax'. 'two times in the week' is better as 'twice a week'. Add the object 'it' after 'love'.

× Well, uh, each one of our, uh, family members has uh, own hobbies as I'm swimming, uh, but uh, our, uh, my siblings like cooking or reading in their leisure times. Uh, also, umm, we have each one have his own uh, idea and his own.

✓ Each of our family members has their own hobbies; for example, I swim, while my siblings like cooking or reading in their leisure time. Also, each person has their own ideas and preferences.

Original has incorrect word order and agreement: 'has own hobbies' needs 'has their own hobbies'. 'I'm swimming' is incorrectly placed; better 'I swim'. 'leisure times' should be 'leisure time'. 'we have each one have his own' is ungrammatical; use 'each person has their own'. Use gender-neutral 'their' for singular.