Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản, phát âm và dùng từ cho tự nhiên. Tránh câu dài và lặp ý; trả lời trực tiếp rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (thể loại nhạc/ trò chơi, tần suất, lợi ích). Dùng liên từ như 'and', 'so', 'because' hợp lý và giới hạn trong tối đa 5 câu.

Exemplo: Yes, I have two main hobbies: listening to music and playing video games. I usually listen to pop and acoustic music in the evenings because it helps me relax after work. I play video games on weekends to unwind and connect with friends online. Both hobbies help me relieve stress and stay socially active.

Sugestão: Cần điều chỉnh thì và cấu trúc câu (quá khứ), dùng từ chính xác (planting trees/flowers, garden, park), và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ loại cây, tần suất, cảm xúc). Giữ giới hạn 2–4 câu, nối ý bằng 'because' hoặc 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, when I was a child I loved planting flowers and small trees in our garden. I often planted marigolds and herbs with my parents on weekends because I enjoyed watching them grow. It made me proud to show the flowers to my grandparents and friends.

Sugestão: Sửa ngữ pháp (keep tense consistent), dùng cụm từ tự nhiên ('play badminton with my friends', 'keep it up' hoặc 'continue'), và làm rõ tần suất. Loại bỏ câu không hoàn chỉnh (last sentence). Dùng liên từ để nối lý do và kết quả.

Exemplo: Definitely. I have played badminton since I was a child and used to practise with my friends after school. It improves my fitness and coordination, so I have continued playing regularly. Now I usually play badminton on weekends to stay healthy.

Sugestão: Cần sửa cấu trúc và từ vựng (watch TV shows, weekends), dùng thì đúng và câu rõ ràng. Tránh mơ hồ ('not always' khó hiểu); nêu lợi ích cụ thể (tạo gắn kết, trao đổi chuyện gia đình). Giữ 2–3 câu với liên từ như 'and' hoặc 'which' để nối ý.

Exemplo: Yes, my family and I enjoy watching TV shows together on weekend evenings. It helps us relax and gives us something to talk about, which strengthens our family bond. I feel nostalgic when I remember those happy times.

× Of course, I love to listening to music or watching video games whenever I have a free time.

✓ Of course, I love listening to music or watching videos whenever I have free time.

'love to listening' is incorrect because after 'love' we use the base verb or gerund: 'love listening' (rule for verb + -ing form). 'watching video games' is odd; use 'watching videos' or 'playing video games'. 'a free time' is incorrect article usage; say 'free time' without article.

× This is because when I listen to music I can try a new ties upbeat or watch video games.

✓ This is because when I listen to music I can try new upbeat styles or watch videos.

The original has several word choice errors: 'a new ties upbeat' is ungrammatical—use 'new upbeat styles' or 'new upbeat songs'. 'watch video games' should be 'watch videos' or 'play video games'. Use correct noun forms and word order.

× Play video games also have me connect with the Stringer on the Internet.

✓ Playing video games also helps me connect with strangers on the Internet.

Start with gerund 'Playing' to function as subject. 'have me connect' is incorrect phrasing; use 'helps me connect'. 'Stringer' is a misspelling of 'strangers'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct vocabulary.

× When I was younger, planting trees is my favorite hobby.

✓ When I was younger, planting trees was my favorite hobby.

The sentence refers to the past ('When I was younger'), so the verb should be in past tense: 'was' not 'is'.

× This is because when I planting some flowers in the garden or in the port, I can enjoy their beautiful or sometimes I can show it's for many people around me such as my parents or my grandparents too.

✓ This is because when I planted or planted some flowers in the garden or in the yard, I could enjoy their beauty and sometimes I could show them to many people around me, such as my parents or my grandparents.

Use correct tense and verb forms: after 'when I' use past simple 'planted'. 'in the port' is wrong context; likely 'in the yard' or 'on the porch'. 'their beautiful' should be 'their beauty'. 'show it's for many people' is incorrect: use 'show them to many people'. Also ensure past consistency ('could').

× Definitely yes. When I was a child I loved to play badminton with my friend after school and I think it's so healthy for me to improve my physical health, so I still remain them until now.

✓ Definitely yes. When I was a child I loved playing badminton with my friend after school and I think it was good for my physical health, so I have continued it until now.

After 'loved' use gerund 'playing' not 'to play'. 'It's so healthy for me to improve my physical health' is awkward; use 'it was good for my physical health'. 'I still remain them' is incorrect; use 'I have continued it' (continue the hobby). Ensure tense consistency.

× And sometimes on the weekend when I have free times, I will call.

✓ And sometimes on the weekend when I have free time, I call.

Use 'free time' (uncountable) not 'free times'. For habitual actions use present simple 'I call' rather than 'I will call'. If meaning to call friends, specify 'I call my friend(s)'.

× To be honest, my family members and I have the same hobby when we watching the television show at night on weekend.

✓ To be honest, my family members and I have the same hobby: we watch television shows at night on weekends.

After 'we' use base verb 'watch' not 'watching'. 'television show' should be plural 'television shows' or 'the television' and 'on weekend' should be 'on weekends'. Also improve sentence structure with a colon for clarity.

× It's not always enhance our family bonds but also make this like a hop happy times which make me feel nostalgic when I'm looking back on.

✓ It not only enhances our family bonds but also creates happy moments that make me feel nostalgic when I look back.

Use correct correlative structure 'not only... but also'. 'enhance' should be 'enhances' for subject-verb agreement with 'it'. 'make this like a hop happy times' is ungrammatical; replace with 'creates happy moments'. Use present simple 'look back' for general reflection.