Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation fillers, make one clear topic sentence, use linking words and give a specific example. Keep it under 3–4 sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “offer new perspectives to me” not “news perspective”).

Exemplo: I enjoy watching movies in my free time. Watching films gives me new perspectives and teaches me about different cultures, so I learn a lot from them. For example, last month I watched a documentary about Japanese food culture which changed how I think about cooking.

Sugestão: Remove fillers, use past tense consistently, and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example of what you drew and why it mattered. Use linking words like “because” or “so”.

Exemplo: When I was a child I enjoyed drawing. I liked drawing animals and family portraits because it helped me express my feelings. For instance, I often drew our cat and gave it a funny expression to make my parents laugh.

Sugestão: Be grammatically accurate (e.g., “Chinese books,” “I tend to read books in English now”), avoid hesitations, and structure answer with a topic sentence plus brief supporting detail and an example of a recent book.

Exemplo: Yes — I have loved reading since childhood. I used to read many Chinese books, and now I often read books in English to improve my language skills. For example, I recently finished a novel about friendship that taught me new vocabulary and gave me interesting ideas.

Sugestão: Answer directly and correct grammar (“my sister enjoys travelling,” “when I have free time”). Avoid negative self-labels like “lazy”; instead explain differences and offer a brief contrast with linking words such as “however” or “but”.

Exemplo: Not really. My sister enjoys travelling and exploring new places, but I prefer staying at home and watching movies. However, we sometimes go on short trips together when our schedules allow.

× Yes umm my hobbies are watching movies.

✓ Yes, my hobby is watching movies.

The student used plural 'hobbies are' but then mentions a single hobby activity; this is a singular/plural and quantifier mismatch. Use 'my hobby is' for a singular activity or keep 'my hobbies are' and list multiple activities. Also add a comma after 'Yes' and remove filler words for clarity.

× I think movies umm also always offer news perspective to me and I always learn a lot of things umm on watching movies.

✓ I think movies also always offer new perspectives to me, and I always learn a lot from watching movies.

Errors: 'news perspective' is incorrect — should be 'new perspectives' (adjective vs noun and pluralization). 'on watching movies' is wrong preposition; use 'from watching movies'. Also add a comma and make 'perspectives' plural to match 'a lot of things' or rephrase for clarity.

× So in my free time I like watching movies alone or sometimes with my friends.

✓ So in my free time I like watching movies alone or sometimes with my friends.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed except removing fillers. Included here only to indicate preposition is correct ('with my friends'). No further correction required.

× I think back then, uh, when I was a child, I enjoyed drawing.

✓ I think back then, when I was a child, I enjoyed drawing.

Grammar is acceptable; removed filler 'uh'. Past tense 'enjoyed' correctly matches 'when I was a child'. No tense correction necessary.

× Umm, I think drawing is a very good way to express my feelings.

✓ I think drawing is a very good way to express my feelings.

Sentence is correct; only filler removed. Pronoun 'my' is correctly used.

× So when I was, umm, free, I'll just take umm, a painter and a white A4 paper and then gesture.

✓ So when I was free, I would just take a paintbrush and a sheet of white A4 paper and then draw.

Errors: 'I'll' (future) is inconsistent with past context; use 'I would' or 'I used to'. 'a painter' is incorrect for a tool — use 'a paintbrush'. 'gesture' is wrong verb; use 'draw'. Also 'a white A4 paper' should be 'a sheet of white A4 paper'.

× I think that would be reading umm, when I was a child I read a lot of Chinese book, but now that I grow up I tends to read books and English and they're actually very fun and I'll always learn a lot from them.

✓ I think that would be reading. When I was a child, I read a lot of Chinese books, but now that I have grown up I tend to read books in English, and they're actually very enjoyable and I always learn a lot from them.

Multiple errors: 'Chinese book' should be plural 'Chinese books' (singular/plural). 'now that I grow up' incorrect tense/structure; use present perfect 'have grown up'. 'I tends' wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'I tend'. 'read books and English' is unclear; use 'read books in English'. 'very fun' is colloquial; 'very enjoyable' is better.

× Umm not really, my sister enjoy travelling umm but then for me I'm just a bit lazy and I tend to stay at home when I've got three times.

✓ Not really. My sister enjoys travelling, but I am a bit lazy and I tend to stay at home most of the time.

Errors: 'my sister enjoy' should be 'my sister enjoys' (third person singular). 'travelling' spelling acceptable but ensure consistency. 'when I've got three times' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely meant 'most of the time'. Also split into two sentences and use 'I am' instead of contraction for clarity.

× So umm we don't really have same hobbies.

✓ So we don't really have the same hobbies.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'same hobbies'. Also remove filler. 'have the same hobbies' is the correct collocation.