Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific hobbies with brief details. Avoid repetition of linking words like "also" and incomplete endings. Use linking words like "and" or "besides" once to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I have several hobbies. I especially enjoy reading novels — recently I’ve been into historical fiction — and I like exploring new places in my city on weekend walks. I also relax by listening to jazz or watching independent films.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and add specific, concise supporting details. Fix tense and phrasing errors ("I loved" or "I have continued"). Mention a reason or a short memory to make it more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I loved riding bikes as a child and I still enjoy it today. I used to explore the neighborhood with my friends after school, which is why cycling remains one of my favourite ways to relax.

Sugestão: Keep sentences complete and avoid redundancy. Start with a direct answer, give a specific age and one brief detail (why you like it or how often you ride). Remove trailing fragments.

Exemplo: Yes, I’ve had cycling since I was seven — I learned on my father’s mountain bike and I still have and use it for weekend rides around the park.

Sugestão: Answer directly and complete the thought. State whether your hobbies match and give a reason and an example. Avoid vague endings and phrasing like "I always look up to" without finishing the idea.

Exemplo: Mostly our hobbies are different, but we both enjoy reading. My mother loves historical novels, which inspired me to read more, and we often recommend books to each other.

× Of course I do have plenty of hobbies which I love to do in my free time, especially reading books and also going for sightseeing sometimes.

✓ Of course I have plenty of hobbies that I love to do in my free time, especially reading books and sometimes sightseeing.

The original sentence used redundant auxiliary 'do' ('do have') which is unnecessary in a simple present affirmative sentence (use 'have'). 'Which' is better replaced with 'that' in defining relative clauses for clarity. 'Going for sightseeing' is unnatural in English; the noun 'sightseeing' is used without 'going for'. Also 'also' and 'sometimes' were repetitive; reorder to 'sometimes sightseeing' for natural flow. Suggestion: use simple present without unnecessary 'do', use 'that' for defining clauses, and use the noun 'sightseeing'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I also tend to listen to music and also watch movies as.

✓ I also tend to listen to music and watch movies.

The sentence has redundant 'also' and an incomplete ending with 'as' which makes the sentence ungrammatical. Removing the second 'also' and the final 'as' produces a complete coordinated verb phrase 'listen to music and watch movies'. Suggestion: avoid redundant adverbs and ensure sentences end with a complete clause or phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I remember riding bikes when I was a child and up to this day this hobby has been something which I have been continuing and I love to buy a bike one day as well.

✓ I remember riding bikes when I was a child, and to this day I have continued this hobby and would love to buy a bike one day.

The original mixes present perfect continuous ('has been something which I have been continuing') awkwardly. Use present perfect simple 'have continued' to show continuation up to now. 'Up to this day' should be 'to this day'. 'I love to buy a bike one day' is unnatural; use 'would love to buy a bike one day' to express future desire. Suggestion: simplify continuous constructions and use 'would love' for wishes about the future. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I have really enjoyed riding my father's mountain bike bicycle since I was 7 years old and I have still got it at home even up to this day.

✓ I have really enjoyed riding my father's mountain bike since I was seven years old, and I still have it at home to this day.

Redundancy: 'mountain bike bicycle' repeats meaning; 'mountain bike' suffices. Use 'seven' in words for formality. 'Have still got' is informal and awkward; 'still have' is clearer. 'Even up to this day' is redundant; 'to this day' is sufficient. Suggestion: remove redundant words, use consistent formality, and simplify expressions indicating continuation. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I still ride that bicycle and it's.

✓ I still ride that bicycle.

The clause ends with 'and it's' which is incomplete and leaves the sentence hanging. Remove the fragment to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: ensure coordinated clauses have complete predicates; if an additional idea was intended, complete it (for example, 'and it's very reliable'). Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Well, it's different except for one hobby which I always look up to, That's reading books.

✓ Well, it's different except for one hobby that I always look up to: reading books.

Use 'that' rather than 'which' in a defining clause. Capitalization error: 'That's' after a comma should not be capitalized and is unnecessary; use a colon or rephrase. 'Look up to' usually means to admire a person, which is slightly odd with a hobby; better phrasing might be 'share' or 'admire'. Here I keep 'look up to' but fix punctuation. Suggestion: use correct relative pronoun, punctuation, and appropriate verb for the intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× My mother loved to read books and I have really admired.

✓ My mother loved to read books, and I have always admired her for that.

The sentence ends with 'I have really admired' which is incomplete because the object of admiration is missing. Add 'her for that' to complete the thought. Also maintain parallel tense and clarity: 'loved' (past) and 'have always admired' (present perfect) is acceptable if the admiration continues. Suggestion: always include the object when using 'admire' and ensure sentence completeness. Grammar problem type ID: 26