Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “I have a lot of hobbies,” “I’ve been running on trails”). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I have several hobbies, but I mainly enjoy creative art and trail running. I often paint or draw in my free time, especially landscapes. Recently I’ve taken up trail running because it helps me stay fit and enjoy nature.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitations and redundant words. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence (“Yes, I used to play football”). Give one specific reason or detail and use a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (“when I was a child,” “my friends and I”).

Exemplo: Yes, I used to play football when I was a child. My friends and I played every day because we wanted to become better players. We also joined a local youth team and practiced on weekends.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and avoid choppy sentences. Use linking words to connect past and present (“and I still do”). Be specific about frequency and why you enjoy it. Use correct expressions: “I used to go swimming” and “I still swim every summer.”

Exemplo: Yes, I have swum since childhood and I still swim every summer. When I was young I went swimming every weekend, and now I usually swim several times a week during the summer because it helps me relax and stay fit.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer and then support with specific examples. Use linking words (“for example,” “also”) and correct grammar (“my family members,” “my sisters are”). Mention how you participate or share these hobbies. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, we share some hobbies as a family. For example, most of us enjoy singing and my father plays several instruments. We often sing together at family gatherings, which is something I really enjoy.

× As for Sunnyvale, yes I have lot of hobbies starting with art, I like creative arts and I love to do art during my free time.

✓ As for Sunnyvale, yes I have a lot of hobbies, starting with art. I like creative arts and I love to do art during my free time.

Missing article 'a' before 'lot' causes singular/plural article error; also run-on sentence fixed with punctuation for clarity. Use 'a lot of' for countable/uncountable nouns. Separate clauses to improve readability.

× And recently I've been working running while on trails lately.

✓ And recently I've been running on trails.

Incorrect combination 'working running' and redundant 'lately'. Use present perfect progressive 'I've been running' to show ongoing recent activity; preposition 'on' is correct with 'trails.'

× So running has been my hobby best hobby lately.

✓ So running has been my best hobby lately.

Word order is incorrect and 'hobby' repeated. Place modifiers in correct position: 'my best hobby.' This fixes awkward phrasing and duplication.

× Yes, when I was child, I, I, I really want use I, I always used to play football cause playing football was my hobby me and along with my friends because we wanted to become a good player, football player when we were kids.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I always used to play football with my friends because playing football was my hobby; we wanted to become good football players when we were kids.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'child'; repetition and filler words removed; incorrect tense 'want' replaced with past 'used to' for habitual past actions; 'me and along with my friends' corrected to 'with my friends'; word order and punctuation fixed; plural agreement for 'players.'

× Yes, and mostly during the summer I go swimming. These days.

✓ Yes, and mostly during the summer I go swimming these days.

Sentence was split awkwardly. 'These days' refers to present habitual action, so present simple 'I go' is correct. Combine fragments into one sentence.

× I really love to go swimming in the summer and when I was a child I used to go to swim every weekend and even these days I go to swimming during the summer time.

✓ I really love to go swimming in the summer, and when I was a child I used to swim every weekend; even these days I go swimming during the summer.

Incorrect infinitive 'go to swim' and 'go to swimming' — use 'swim' or 'go swimming.' Remove redundant 'time.' Use commas and semicolon to separate clauses.

× Yeah I can relate with my family members sharing some of the few common hobbies.

✓ Yeah, I can relate to my family members; we share a few common hobbies.

Use 'relate to' not 'relate with.' 'Sharing some of the few' is awkward — 'we share a few common hobbies' is natural; punctuation improves clarity.

× Like most of my family members love to sing, are very good at singing and even my father is very good at music and my sisters too.

✓ Most of my family members love to sing and are very good at it; even my father and my sisters are skilled musically.

Sentence had extra 'Like' and awkward repetition. Combine clauses and replace 'very good at music' with 'skilled musically' or 'good musicians' for stylistic correctness; ensure parallel structure.

× So yes we do have common hobbies as a family members.

✓ So yes, we do have common hobbies as a family.

'a family members' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'members.' Use 'as a family' or 'as family members.' Removed article error and adjusted phrase for correctness.