Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two main hobbies, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition, fillers (umm, uh), and overly long lists. Also limit your answer to up to 5 sentences and use more natural phrasing (e.g., “I enjoy singing and socializing with friends”).

Exemplo: I enjoy singing and spending time with my friends. For example, I often practise songs at home and sometimes we go out together on weekends to watch live music. Because singing relaxes me and socialising helps me unwind, these activities are my main hobbies.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence about your childhood hobbies, then add one or two specific examples and a brief reason or contrast to the present. Use linking words (for example, however) and avoid repeating the same idea. Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

Exemplo: When I was a child I enjoyed several hobbies, especially reading books and performing. For example, I read many storybooks and took part in school dance shows. However, I don’t read as much now because I’m busier with studies.

Sugestão: Answer directly that singing has been a lifelong hobby and give concise supporting details: how you practise, any achievements, and a brief comment about future plans. Remove hesitation words and redundant phrases; use linking words (for example, although, so) to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, singing has been my hobby since childhood. I used to practise daily, entered local singing competitions, and although I haven’t performed on big stages, I continue to take lessons so I can improve and maybe perform publicly in the future.

Sugestão: State your answer clearly (yes/no) then give one or two specific supporting reasons or comparisons. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use linking words such as “however” or “unlike” to contrast your hobby with your family’s interests.

Exemplo: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. Unlike me, they prefer reading or playing sports; for instance, my father enjoys gardening and my sister likes football, while I focus on singing and music.

× Yes of course everyone has a hobby so same like others, I also have a hobby that I love singing song and I also love spending my time with the loved one that I like and also I love playing with my friends and gossiping with my friends and I also love umm uh going out with my friends and my.

✓ Yes, of course everyone has a hobby, so like others I also have a hobby: I love singing songs. I also love spending time with the people I care about, playing and gossiping with my friends, and going out with them.

The original sentence incorrectly uses singular nouns where plurals are needed (e.g., 'singing song' should be 'singing songs'; 'the loved one' should be 'the people I care about' or 'loved ones'). Using plural forms matches the general, non-specific groups mentioned and sounds natural. Also the sentence was run-on; I separated ideas into clearer phrases. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general groups and break long sentences into shorter clauses. Next steps: replace 'song' with 'songs' when speaking about the activity generally, and use 'people I care about' or 'loved ones' instead of 'the loved one'.

× When I was a child I had lot of hobbies but particularly I remember I love reading books.

✓ When I was a child I had a lot of hobbies, but particularly I remember that I loved reading books.

The sentence mixes past time markers ('When I was a child', 'I had') with a present tense verb 'I love'. For consistency with the past time frame, use past tense 'loved'. Also 'lot' needs the determiner 'a'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with time expressions (use past tense for past periods) and include 'a' before 'lot'.

× But now I don't enjoy reading books.

✓ But now I don't enjoy reading books anymore.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but adding 'anymore' clarifies the change from past to present. This uses the present simple correctly for a habitual or general state. Suggestion: include adverbs like 'anymore' when contrasting past and present states. (Note: no tense error beyond clarity.)

× But when I was child I always prefer to read books and also I sing a song and I remember dancing on the stage that.

✓ But when I was a child I always preferred to read books. I also used to sing songs and I remember dancing on stage.

The original mixes tenses and forms: 'when I was a child' requires past tense phrases such as 'preferred' or 'used to prefer' not present 'prefer'. 'I sing a song' should be past habitual 'I used to sing songs' or 'I sang songs'. 'Dancing on the stage that' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'dancing on stage' and place 'I remember' before the clause. Suggestion: for past habitual actions use 'used to' or past simple and simplify 'dancing on stage'. Next steps: ensure all verbs match the past time frame.

× Yes, since my childhood days I always wanted to be a singer but somehow I couldn't be on stage as I wish.

✓ Yes, since my childhood I have always wanted to be a singer, but somehow I couldn't be on stage as I wished.

The speaker uses 'since my childhood' which often calls for present perfect ('have always wanted') because the desire started in the past and continues. The clause 'couldn't be on stage as I wish' mixes tenses; change 'as I wish' to past 'as I wished' to match 'couldn't'. Suggestion: use present perfect for desires that started in the past and continue, and keep subordinate clauses in the same timeframe. (Note: 'childhood days' is wordy; 'childhood' suffices.)

× But still then the singing is, is still my passion.

✓ Even so, singing is still my passion.

Redundant words and hesitation ('is, is') should be removed. 'Still then' is awkward; use 'even so' or simply 'still'. Present simple 'singing is' correctly expresses a current, ongoing state. Suggestion: remove repetitions and choose concise linking words.

× But umm, but I couldn't uh, feel full the dream of being the uh, reputed singer.

✓ But I couldn't fully realize the dream of becoming a well-known singer.

The phrase 'feel full the dream' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'realize/fulfil a dream'. Use 'couldn't' with the base verb 'realize' and 'becoming' for the state. 'Reputed singer' is awkward; 'well-known singer' or 'reputable singer' is better. Also place adverb 'fully' before the verb. Suggestion: learn common collocations (realize/fulfil a dream) and order adverbs before verbs. Next steps: use 'becoming' rather than 'being' when referring to achieving a role.

× But I love singing.

✓ But I love singing.

This sentence is already correct. It expresses a present preference using the gerund 'singing'. No change needed.

× Well no, because I'm I am only the one who have the great hobby of of dreaming about singing the song and I'm only the one last piece so no one in my family is really a great fan of singing or being an artist.

✓ Well no, because I am the only one who has the strong hobby of dreaming about singing, and no one else in my family is really a fan of singing or being an artist.

The original has several singular/plural and agreement errors: 'I'm I am only the one who have' should be 'I am the only one who has' (subject 'one' requires singular verb 'has'). 'Dreaming about singing the song' should be 'dreaming about singing' or 'singing songs'. 'I'm only the one last piece' is unclear and unnecessary; remove it. Use 'no one else' instead of 'no one' to contrast. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with singular subjects and simplify awkward phrases.