Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Keep answers concise and relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your hobbies, avoid filler words and repetitions, and give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., relax, learn, escape).

Exemplo: I have several hobbies, but my favourite is reading. For example, I usually read novels in the evenings because they help me relax and improve my vocabulary.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific details. Say which activities you did and give one or two concrete examples (what you cooked, who you cooked with). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'often' and avoid hesitations and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: When I was a child I loved cooking. For example, I often baked cookies and helped my mother make soup on weekends, usually while listening to cartoons.

Sugestão: Answer directly and neatly: name the hobby and explain continuity with a specific reason or example. Use a linking phrase (e.g., 'since childhood' or 'because') and avoid vague adjectives and fillers. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. Walking has been a hobby since my childhood because my family often took long nature walks. Even now I enjoy walking with friends every weekend to stay active and social.

Sugestão: Be specific and correct relationships (e.g., 'mother' not 'Barber'). Start with a clear statement about shared hobbies, then give a concise reason or example of a shared interest. Use precise language (e.g., 'immerse myself in stories') and avoid unnecessary words.

Exemplo: Yes, my mother and I share a love of reading. For instance, we both enjoy historical novels and often recommend books to each other because we like immersing ourselves in different stories.

× Thus, I have a lot of hobbies and it's really great to understand that you don't waste your time on something unimportant in this life.

✓ I have many hobbies, and I think it's great not to waste time on unimportant things in life.

The original sentence is wordy and contains unclear phrasing ('thus' and 'understand that you don't waste your time') creating a sentence structure problem. Simplify and reorder to make subject, verbs, and objects clear. Use 'many' for countable plural 'hobbies' and 'things in life' for general objects.

× And I'm really, I really like, for example, for instance, reading because it helps me, uh, relax and Alwa always, uh, and also.

✓ I really like reading because it helps me relax.

The original has redundant adverbs and filler words and a misspelled or misused word 'Alwa always'. Remove repetitions and fillers for clarity. Use the infinitive 'to relax' after 'helps me'.

× When I was a child, my passion was cooking and I can't live without cooking.

✓ When I was a child, my passion was cooking, and I couldn't live without cooking.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence begins in past ('When I was a child') so the second clause should also use past tense ('couldn't') rather than present 'can't'.

× I like doing a lot of cookies, plenty of soups, uh, on the weekends, uh, with me while we're and always and also, umm, I did it with my cartoons, yes.

✓ I used to like baking many cookies and making lots of soups on weekends, and I often watched cartoons while I cooked.

Original is ungrammatical and incoherent. Restructure to clear actions in past (childhood context): 'used to' indicates habitual past action. Use 'baking' and 'making' as gerunds for activities; place time expressions ('on weekends') appropriately; clarify 'watched cartoons while I cooked.'

× I have some hobby that I've had since childhood, for example, uh, nowadays, umm, I'm really keen on going for a walk with my friends because, uh, I, umm, I've always been an active and productive and energetic person.

✓ I have a hobby that I've had since childhood. For example, nowadays I'm keen on going for walks with my friends because I've always been an active, productive, and energetic person.

Use 'a hobby' rather than 'some hobby' (article error). 'Going for walks' is the natural plural collocation when referring to a habitual activity. Also improve punctuation and remove filler words; list adjectives with commas and no repeated conjunctions.

× Yes, I presume, uh, we have the same hobbies with my Barber because my mother is a big fan of reading books and, uh, as I am, so I'm a big fan of reading novels and uh, I want to say thank you that I can just fully emerge, uh, in the adventuries, but I'm reading books. It's so gathering.

✓ Yes, I think I share hobbies with my mother because she is a big fan of reading books, and I am too. Reading allows me to immerse myself fully in the adventures of the stories.

Multiple errors: incorrect preposition 'with my Barber' (probably meant 'my mother'; 'with' after 'have the same hobbies' should be 'have the same hobbies as'). Replace 'presume' with 'I think' for naturalness. 'Thank you that I can just fully emerge in the adventuries' is ungrammatical: use 'immerse myself in the adventures' and correct spelling. Remove filler words and awkward phrase 'It's so gathering.'