Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Shorten and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then give one specific detail about your preferred hobby. Avoid redundancy and unnecessary words. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "but" or "however").

Exemplo: I have several hobbies, such as traveling, gardening and swimming. However, I enjoy traveling the most because I like exploring new places and experiencing different cultures with my friends.

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar: use "a hobby" not "an hobby" and avoid vague phrases like "so many others." Add one specific memory or detail to make the answer more vivid. Use a linking phrase to sequence ideas (e.g., "For example,").

Exemplo: Yes, I loved traveling as a child. For example, I often went on trips with my parents to places like Coxswanger and the Sundarbans, which I remember for their beautiful landscapes.

Sugestão: Trim repetition and fix grammar: say "favorite hobbies" or "my favourite hobby." Use present perfect or simple present to describe continuity (e.g., "I have enjoyed traveling since childhood"). Provide one contrasting detail to show change over time. Limit to two sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I have enjoyed traveling since childhood. I used to travel with my parents, but now I prefer going on trips with my friends to discover new places together.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and be clearer: avoid awkward phrasing like "hard to mention others hobbies." Use a clear topic sentence and give a specific example. Fix possessive: "one of my brothers." Use linking word "however" properly to contrast if needed.

Exemplo: Not really — my family members have different interests. However, one of my brothers also enjoys traveling, and we sometimes plan trips together.

× As far as I remember, during my childhood, I had an hobby which was traveling.

✓ As far as I remember, during my childhood, I had a hobby which was traveling.

The article 'a' is used before consonant sounds; 'an' is used before vowel sounds. 'Hobby' begins with a consonant sound /h/, so 'a hobby' is correct. Suggestion: use 'a' with singular nouns that begin with consonant sounds.

× Most of the time I traveled with my parents in different locations including Coxswanger, Sundarbans and so many others.

✓ Most of the time I traveled with my parents to different places, including Coxswanger and the Sundarbans.

Use 'to' for movement toward places: 'traveled to different places'. 'Locations' is formal; 'places' is more natural. 'Sundarbans' usually takes the definite article 'the'. Avoid 'and so many others'—use concise 'and others.' Suggestion: use 'traveled to' and include 'the' with known region names like 'the Sundarbans'.

× Absolutely, traveling is one of my most favorite hobby that I enjoy since my childhood and also in the past I enjoyed with my parents and right now I enjoy this hobby with my friends.

✓ Absolutely, traveling is one of my most favorite hobbies; I have enjoyed it since my childhood. In the past I traveled with my parents, and now I enjoy this hobby with my friends.

'One of my most favorite' requires a plural noun 'hobbies'. Also tense and phrasing needed correction: use present perfect 'have enjoyed' for actions continuing from past to present. 'Enjoyed with my parents' is awkward—use 'traveled with my parents'. Break long sentence into clearer sentences.

× Actually it is quite hard to mention others hobbies in my family members, however one of my brother's who has the same hobby and also he enjoyed traveling.

✓ Actually, it is quite hard to mention other people's hobbies in my family; however, one of my brothers has the same hobby and he also enjoys traveling.

Use 'other people's hobbies' or 'other family members' hobbies' instead of 'others hobbies'. 'Brother's' is possessive; for plural 'brothers' is correct. Tense: use present 'enjoys' for current habit. Remove unnecessary 'who' and fix sentence structure for clarity.