Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more concise, correct grammar, and add a brief reason or example with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "playing tennis" repeated). Use a topic sentence then one supporting detail. Also correct verb forms and use commas appropriately.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. One of my main hobbies is playing tennis because it helps me relax and stay fit. For example, I play almost every day at a local club, which boosts my mood and improves my endurance.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning and fix word choice errors (e.g., 'hubby' is incorrect here), reduce fillers ('actually', 'uh'), and stick to one clear point. Start with a topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then add a specific supporting detail and a linking word to contrast with present day.

Exemplo: As a child I was quite introverted and often spent time reading and listening to music alone. However, I have become more outgoing now, so I enjoy going out with friends instead.

Sugestão: Good clear answer but reduce repetition and improve word order. Use linking words to explain why and give a short specific example of what you read recently. Keep it within 4–5 sentences maximum.

Exemplo: Yes — reading has been a lifelong hobby. I enjoy a wide range of books, from novels to encyclopedias and comics. For instance, recently I finished a historical novel that inspired me to learn more about that period.

Sugestão: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and verb forms) and be more specific about differences. Use linking words to contrast and give a short example of different genres within the family while concluding with the common interest.

Exemplo: Yes. My family all enjoy listening to music, although our preferred genres vary — for example, my mother likes classical, my brother prefers rock, and I enjoy pop. Nevertheless, we often agree on pop songs and listen to them together.

× I like playing tennis, it is one of my hobbies and it gives me such joy and relax my mind whenever I'm playing tennis.

✓ I like playing tennis; it is one of my hobbies and it gives me such joy and relaxes my mind whenever I play tennis.

Two issues: a) Parallel verb form and subject-verb agreement. 'Relax' should be third-person singular 'relaxes' because the subject is 'it' or the activity 'playing tennis' which requires singular agreement (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 can also apply but list focuses on -ing form). b) Repetition and tense consistency: use simple present 'whenever I play tennis' rather than present continuous 'I'm playing' to match habitual action. Also replace comma with semicolon to correctly join two independent clauses.

× When I was a child, actually, I was a very introvert child.

✓ When I was a child, actually, I was a very introverted child.

The adjective 'introvert' is a noun; the correct adjective form is 'introverted' or 'introvert' used attributively is less common. Use 'introverted' to describe a person's temperament. This fixes word-class misuse and yields natural English.

× Uh, so my hubby was reading and listening to music alone in my room.

✓ Uh, so I was reading and listening to music alone in my room.

The pronoun 'my hubby' (husband) is incorrect here because context indicates the speaker is describing their own childhood behavior, not someone else's. Use 'I' as the subject. Also 'hubby' is informal and likely unintended; replace with 'I' for clarity.

× But now I'm actually such an extrovert person, so I like going out of the house.

✓ But now I'm actually a very extroverted person, so I like going out of the house.

Use 'a' with the noun phrase and the adjective form 'extroverted' rather than 'extrovert' when used predicatively. 'Such an extrovert person' is awkward; 'a very extroverted person' is natural.

× Since I was a child, a hobby that has never changed is reading, because I like to read almost everything, like novels and encyclopedia and comic books.

✓ Since I was a child, a hobby that has never changed is reading, because I like to read almost everything, like novels, encyclopedias, and comic books.

List punctuation and plural form: 'encyclopedia' should be plural 'encyclopedias' when listing types. Also include commas between list items for clarity. Tense and structure are otherwise appropriate.

× So until now I like to read everything.

✓ So up until now I have liked to read everything.

This sentence describes an action continuing from past to present; the present perfect 'have liked' is more appropriate than simple present 'like' following 'until now.' Alternatively, 'I still like to read everything' is also natural. Use consistent tense for continuity.

× Yes I do. Everyone in my family like to listening to music even though our genre are different but we have the same taste of music that is pop music.

✓ Yes, I do. Everyone in my family likes listening to music even though our genres are different, but we have the same taste in music: pop music.

Multiple corrections: a) Subject-verb agreement: 'Everyone' is singular so use 'likes' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 27). b) Verb form: use 'listening' after 'likes' without 'to' ('likes listening to music') or use 'likes to listen to music.' c) 'Genre' should be plural 'genres' to match 'our.' d) Use 'taste in music' rather than 'taste of music.' e) Add commas to join clauses properly and colon to clarify 'pop music.'