Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, use correct grammar and clear vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetition. Correct common errors (e.g., 'photograph' → 'photography'; 'for 10 table tennis' unclear).

Exemplo: I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing table tennis because it’s fast-paced and helps me stay fit. I also like photography; I can shoot from different angles indoors, which lets me experiment with composition and lighting.

Sugestão: Clarify the hobby and use past tense consistently. Give specific examples and logical linking to explain why you enjoyed it. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., 'drawing baths', 'drop the left side') with accurate descriptions.

Exemplo: Yes. As a child I loved drawing. I often drew scenes I saw from the bus because I took the bus a lot; I remember sketching the street views and posters on the bus stops, which inspired my imagination.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. Explain the hobby precisely (e.g., interest in cars) and give a specific reason or memory. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep sentences short and natural.

Exemplo: Yes. I have been interested in cars since childhood. My family didn’t own a car, so I used to watch the small private cars on the street and study their shapes and colours, which sparked my curiosity about vehicles.

Sugestão: Answer directly and contrast your hobbies with your family’s using clear language and correct grammar. Use linking words like 'whereas' or 'while' and avoid hesitation. Be specific about your hobbies and your family’s interests.

Exemplo: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. I like observing cars and travelling both domestically and abroad, whereas my family members prefer reading books at home.

× I enjoy playing table tennis and photograph uh, for 10 table tennis, I can enjoy in the inside of the room.

✓ I enjoy playing table tennis and taking photographs. For table tennis, I can enjoy playing inside a room.

The student incorrectly used the noun 'photograph' where the gerund 'taking photographs' is needed (verb + -ing). Also 'enjoy in the inside of the room' is ungrammatical; use 'enjoy playing inside a room'. Use gerund after 'enjoy' and a clear prepositional phrase for location.

× Also, I I don't need to move around as a photograph, I can take different angles of photos, so I very enjoy it.

✓ Also, I don't need to move around as a photographer; I can take photos from different angles, so I enjoy it very much.

The speaker used 'photograph' (a noun for the picture) incorrectly instead of 'photographer' (the person). Pronoun and noun choice is incorrect. 'Very enjoy it' is wrong word order; use 'enjoy it very much'.

× Yes, when I was child I have a hobby to have stories about the drawing I enjoy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a hobby of creating stories about drawings I enjoyed.

The context is past, so 'have' should be past 'had' (past tense issue). Also 'when I was child' needs the article 'a child', and 'hobby to have stories about the drawing I enjoy' is awkward; use 'hobby of creating stories about drawings I enjoyed'.

× I enjoy drawing baths when I was young.

✓ I enjoyed drawing buses when I was young.

Likely mispronunciation produced 'baths' instead of 'buses'. In context earlier the student mentions buses. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'when I was young'. This corrects noun and tense.

× As I really like bus, I take a bus for many times.

✓ Because I really liked buses, I took buses many times.

Prepositions and articles are incorrect: 'like bus' should be 'liked buses' and 'take a bus for many times' should be 'took buses many times' or 'took the bus many times'. Use past tense and plural where appropriate.

× So I usually should drop the left side and the right side of the bus.

✓ So I usually sat on the left or right side of the bus.

'Should drop the left side' is incorrect. The intended meaning is sitting position: use 'sat on the left or right side'. Use past tense 'sat' to match context.

× And also mentioned about the poster.

✓ I also remember a poster.

The fragment 'mentioned about the poster' is ungrammatical. Provide a full clause: 'I also remember a poster' or 'I also mentioned a poster' depending on intent.

× Yes, I have a holiday since the childhood is about it's about a private car as many of the as some of the private cars appear to my eyes.

✓ Yes, a hobby I have had since childhood is looking at private cars because many private cars caught my eye.

The original mixes tenses and has redundant phrases. Use present perfect 'have had since childhood' to express a hobby continuing from childhood. Simplify 'as many of the as some of the private cars appear to my eyes' to 'because many private cars caught my eye'.

× So I'm very interested in the small card as my family don't didn't really have a car there at the time so I like to observe it.

✓ So I'm very interested in small cars because my family didn't really have a car at that time, so I liked to observe them.

Pronouns and noun forms are wrong: 'small card' should be 'small cars'; 'don't didn't' is a conflict; use past 'didn't' for a past situation. Match plural 'cars' with plural pronoun 'them'.

× No, I think I I think I don't have anything hobbies as my family members.

✓ No, I don't think I have the same hobbies as my family members.

'Anything hobbies' is incorrect; use 'the same hobbies'. Remove extra 'I think' duplication. Use comparative structure 'the same ... as'.

× For example, I ush I enjoy too observing the card and travel around the world, no matter inland or abroad or while my fam my family members just love enjoy reading books.

✓ For example, I also enjoy observing cars and traveling around the world, whether domestically or abroad, while my family members just love reading books.

Use gerunds after 'enjoy': 'observing' and 'traveling'. 'Card' should be 'cars'. 'No matter inland or abroad' should be 'whether domestically or abroad'. Remove extra words and correct word order 'love enjoy' to 'love'.