Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is natural, clear and relevant, with good vocabulary. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a brief specific example to make it more concrete. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. I'm passionate about reading and listening to music. For example, I usually read historical fiction on weekends and listen to classical playlists in the evening because they help me relax and expand my knowledge.

Sugestão: Strong response with clear structure and supporting details. To reach a higher score, replace vague words like "random things" with a specific example and use a linking word to improve cohesion.

Exemplo: Yes. I loved drawing and riding my bicycle. For instance, I often sketched animals and comic characters, and then cycled around the neighborhood with friends to explore local parks, which kept me creative and active.

Sugestão: Good content and personal meaning, but the answer has minor grammar issues and could be more specific. Fix the tense/phrasing (e.g., "I picked it up") and add a brief example of what you write to show range.

Exemplo: Yes. I've enjoyed writing since childhood; I picked it up when I was about eight. For example, I keep a daily journal and write short stories occasionally because writing helps me organize ideas and gain new perspectives.

Sugestão: The idea is good, but the answer has awkward phrasing and a sentence fragment ("From town to town."). Clarify the relationship between reading and writing, correct grammar, and give a concrete example of a recent family discussion to strengthen content and coherence.

Exemplo: To some extent, yes. My parents enjoy reading, so a love of books runs in the family and has inspired my writing. For instance, last month we discussed a novel we all read and exchanged recommendations during a family dinner, which brought us closer.

× Whenever I have some time, I tend to bury myself in a good book or immerse myself in music as it helps me unwind and broaden my horizons at the same time.

✓ Whenever I have some time, I tend to bury myself in a good book or immerse myself in music, as they help me unwind and broaden my horizons at the same time.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to two activities ('bury myself in a good book' and 'immerse myself in music'), so a plural pronoun 'they' is required for agreement. Use a comma before 'as' when introducing a reason clause. Suggestion: match pronoun number to its antecedent and punctuate the reason clause correctly.

× I picked up when I was quite young and over the years it has become an integral part of my daily routine because it helps me organize my thoughts and see things from new perspective.

✓ I picked it up when I was quite young, and over the years it has become an integral part of my daily routine because it helps me organize my thoughts and see things from a new perspective.

The verb phrase 'picked up' needs an object ('it') to be clear. Also the noun phrase 'new perspective' needs the article 'a'. Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' linking two independent clauses. Suggestion: include necessary objects for phrasal verbs and use articles with singular, countable nouns.

× My parents are also a bit readers, so writing seems to run in the family.

✓ My parents are also a bit readers -> My parents are also a bit of readers -> better: My parents are also readers to some extent, so writing seems to run in the family.

The phrase 'a bit readers' is ungrammatical. 'A bit' is an adverbial phrase and cannot directly modify a noun this way. Use 'readers to some extent' or 'a bit of readers' is still awkward. Best to say 'also readers' or 'readers to some extent'. Suggestion: rephrase using 'to some extent' or 'somewhat' when qualifying a noun.

× From town to town.

✓ We move from town to town. -> Or: From town to town, we exchange book recommendations or chat about what we're currently reading, which actually brings us together.

'From town to town.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and clear subject, making it incomplete. It should be integrated into the previous or next sentence with a verb, for example 'We move from town to town' or attach it to the following clause. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and verb; avoid standalone fragments.

× We exchange book recommendations or chat about what we're currently reading, which actually brings us together.

✓ We exchange book recommendations and chat about what we're currently reading, which actually brings us together.

Using 'or' suggests an exclusive choice, which slightly conflicts with the idea of activities that bring the family together; 'and' better matches the intended meaning. This is more of a word choice affecting meaning than strict agreement, but it ensures the subject's actions collectively cause the result. Suggestion: choose conjunctions that reflect the intended relationship between actions.