Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating your current hobby, then briefly mention past hobbies if relevant. Avoid fillers (umm, uh) and grammatical errors (use correct tense and sentence structure). Use linking words (however, but, now) to connect ideas and provide one or two specific details about why you enjoy the hobby. Keep the answer within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy watching movies in my free time because they help me relax and learn about different cultures. When I was a child, I practiced Taekwondo for a few years, which helped me stay fit and disciplined. However, now I prefer quieter hobbies like watching films because they fit better with my schedule.

Sugestão: This answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by removing fillers and combining ideas more smoothly. Start with a topic sentence, then use a linking word to add a supporting detail. Provide one specific example (e.g., a competition, a training routine) to make the response more concrete. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I practiced Taekwondo as a child because a friend invited me to join. It kept me fit and disciplined, and I also met many friends during regular training sessions and local competitions.

Sugestão: The answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and vague expressions. Give a direct response (Yes or No), then explain briefly why with specific reasons. Use correct tense (present perfect or simple present) and avoid confusing phrases like 'lost myself a lot.' Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: No, my hobbies have changed since childhood because my interests evolved as I grew up. For example, I used to do Taekwondo, but now I prefer watching films and playing basketball because they suit my current lifestyle better.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give clear comparisons. Remove vague phrases and complete unfinished sentences. Use linking words (however, while) to contrast your hobbies with your family's. Add one specific detail about why you prefer your hobby (e.g., play position, frequency). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. While my sister and mother enjoy badminton, I prefer playing basketball because of my height and I find team play more exciting.

× Yes, back then when I was a child I used to do Taekwondo because my friend inviting me in and it's helped umm regulate my personal routine and make me healthier.

✓ Yes, back then when I was a child I used to do Taekwondo because my friend invited me to join, and it helped regulate my personal routine and make me healthier.

The original sentence contains a present participle 'inviting' where a simple past 'invited' is required to match the past context (Grammar problem type ID 8 and 5). Also 'it's helped' mixes present perfect with past narrative; 'it helped' is correct to maintain past tense consistency. Suggest using simple past verbs for actions that occurred in the past and combine clauses with correct connectors (use 'invited me to join' and 'it helped').

× Umm probably it would be umm watching movie to make me.

✓ Umm, now I probably watch movies to relax.

The original sentence uses conditional 'would be' and an incorrect infinitive structure 'watching movie to make me' which does not fit the present habitual meaning (Grammar problem type ID 7 and 5). Use present simple 'watch' for current habits and pluralize 'movies'; clarify purpose with 'to relax' or similar. Keep tense consistent with the question about current hobbies.

× No, it had changed a lot since I grow up because I'm not interested in the same nature's activity that I used to.

✓ No, it has changed a lot since I grew up because I'm not interested in the same kinds of activities I used to enjoy.

The sentence mixes past perfect 'had changed' with 'since I grow up' which is incorrect. Use present perfect 'has changed' to show change from past to present (Grammar problem type ID 5 and 6). 'Since I grew up' or 'since I grew up' uses past for the time clause; 'grow' is wrong form. Also 'nature's activity' is incorrect collocation; use 'kinds of activities' or 'types of activities' and remove redundant 'that I used to' into 'I used to enjoy.'

× So that I've I've lost myself a lot and I find it more interesting.

✓ So I feel like I've lost my sense of self a lot, and I find other activities more interesting.

'So that I've I've lost myself' is ungrammatical and pronoun/reflexive usage is wrong (Grammar problem type ID 12 and 15). 'Lost myself' can be used but needs context; better is 'lost my sense of self.' Also fix repetition 'I've I've' and clarify what 'more interesting' refers to by adding 'other activities.'

× No, it is absolutely different. My sister is interested in playing badminton, also my mom.

✓ No, they are completely different. My sister is interested in playing badminton, and so is my mom.

'It is absolutely different' incorrectly uses singular pronoun 'it' to refer to plural 'hobbies' (Grammar problem type ID 12 and 27). Use 'they are' for plural. Also improve coordination: 'and so is my mom' is a natural parallel structure.

× But on the other hand I prefer more in basketball due to my height and my.

✓ But on the other hand I prefer basketball because of my height.

'Prefer more in basketball' uses incorrect preposition and comparative construction; use 'prefer basketball' or 'prefer playing basketball' (Grammar problem type ID 11 and 13). 'Due to my height and my.' is incomplete and redundant; 'because of my height' is concise and correct. Remove trailing 'and my.'