Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Говорите более связно и естественно: начните с прямого ответа, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных деталей (когда, где, с кем и почему). Избегайте повторов (например, «in my spare time» и «all the time» повторяются). Используйте связки: "because", "for example", "usually".

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy several hobbies, but shopping is my favourite. I usually go shopping at the mall on weekends because I find it relaxing and I like looking for bargains. For example, last Saturday I spent a few hours comparing prices and buying gifts for friends.

Sugestão: Дайте краткий прямой ответ и используйте более корректную лексику: избегайте слов с негативной коннотацией ("fight"). Уточните детали (возраст, как часто, с кем) и используйте связки: "when I was young", "for example", "because".

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child I enjoyed martial arts such as karate and Taekwondo because they taught me discipline. I practised at a local club twice a week and often sparred with my brother at home, which helped me improve my skills.

Sugestão: Отвечайте яснее и стройнее: начинайте с "Yes" и конкретно назовите, что вы собираете, затем поясните почему и приведите один конкретный пример. Избегайте неопределённых фраз ("some", "things").

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I've collected vintage postcards since I was a child because they remind me of family trips. For example, I still have postcards from a holiday my parents took me to the seaside when I was eight.

Sugestão: Дайте чёткий ответ и приведите сравнение с конкретными примерами: кто чем занимается и почему ваши интересы отличаются. Избегайте заполнителей "uh" и общих слов без смысла ("playing", "listening"). Используйте связки: "however", "while", "because".

Exemplo: No, my hobbies are quite different from my family's. For example, my father enjoys saving and managing finances, while I like shopping and fashion. My sister prefers team sports, whereas I prefer quieter activities like reading or listening to music.

× Yes, I have many hobbies, favorite activities.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies and favorite activities.

The original sentence lacks a conjunction to connect the two noun phrases; also the comma alone creates a sentence fragment and unclear relation. Use 'and' to join coordinated items. Suggestion: use 'and' to connect related items.

× However, shopping is one of the best one to choose in my spare time to spend.

✓ However, shopping is one of the best things to do in my spare time.

'one of the best one' mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly; after 'one of the' you need a plural noun (things). 'to choose' and 'to spend' are unnecessary and awkward. Use the infinitive 'to do' for activities. Suggestion: use plural after 'one of the' and simplify phrase to 'things to do'.

× I go shopping often at the weekends in my spare time all the time.

✓ I often go shopping at the weekends in my spare time.

Redundant time expressions ('often' and 'all the time') create awkwardness; word order is better as 'I often go shopping'. 'At the weekends' and 'in my spare time' both acceptable but keep one or combine concisely. Suggestion: remove redundancy and place adverb before main verb.

× Yes, when I was a child I really loved doing sports like karate or Taekwondo and fight with someone else and often I fought with my brother at home and my parents always judge us.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really loved doing sports like karate or Taekwondo and fighting with others; I often fought with my brother at home and my parents always judged us.

Mixed verb forms and tenses: 'fight' should be the -ing form 'fighting' to coordinate with 'doing'; 'judge' should be past tense 'judged' to match 'was' and 'loved'. Also 'someone else' is unnatural; use 'others'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use gerund for parallel activities.

× Yes, I have one that is collecting things like old items or the things that remind me.

✓ Yes, I have one: collecting things like old items or things that remind me of past moments.

'that remind me' is missing an object ('of' what?). Better to say 'remind me of past moments' or 'remind me of memories'. Also use a colon or rephrase for clarity. Suggestion: include the preposition 'of' and specify what is being reminded.

× My unforgettable moments for example, I have been collecting some.

✓ For example, I have been collecting items that remind me of unforgettable moments.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear referent 'some'. Reorder sentence to place 'for example' at start and clarify what 'some' refers to. Suggestion: state the object clearly and place modifiers appropriately.

× No, actually I have nothing in common with my family members on hobbies.

✓ No, actually I don't have hobbies in common with my family members.

Phrase 'have nothing in common with my family members on hobbies' is awkward; more natural: 'don't have hobbies in common with'. Also contraction or negative form aligns with spoken English. Suggestion: use 'do not have ... in common' and place 'hobbies' before 'in common'.

× For example, my father loves to save money, although I love uh, shopping and uh, my sister loves playing and I love listening.

✓ For example, my father loves to save money, while I love shopping, and my sister loves playing while I enjoy listening.

'Although' is used incorrectly; 'while' or 'whereas' contrast activities. Remove filler 'uh'. 'Loves playing' needs an object or specify 'playing games' etc. 'I love listening' should be 'I enjoy listening' or 'I like listening to music.' Suggestion: use 'while' for contrast, remove fillers, and complete activities with objects when necessary.