Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds like “MMM” and correct tense/agreement (e.g., "after our classes finish" or "after class").

Exemplo: Yes. I enjoy playing basketball. Usually, after classes finish, my friends and I gather on the school court and play for an hour. I like it because it helps me stay fit and it’s a good way to relax after studying.

Sugestão: Use consistent past tense and complete the sentence. Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific details with linking words. Replace vague phrases like “and then” with a concrete result or habit. Correct grammar: “ride a bicycle” and “we usually did that.”

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child, I used to ride a bicycle with my brothers. Every evening we would cycle around the village and explore nearby fields, which was fun and helped us bond.

Sugestão: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use present perfect to show continuity ("I have enjoyed reading since childhood"). Follow with specific reasons and complete the thought. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so".

Exemplo: Yes. I have enjoyed reading since childhood. Because books give me new information and ideas, I often read history and science books to learn more and inspire my own projects.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, direct answer and explain briefly. Avoid repetition and filler. Use a single coherent sentence to say whether you share hobbies, then add one specific detail or example. For instance, start with "No, I don't" and then explain why or give an example of a family hobby if known.

Exemplo: No, I don’t share the same hobbies with my family. For example, my parents enjoy gardening while I prefer playing basketball, so we spend free time on different activities.

× We usually do that after our class finish.

✓ We usually do that after our classes finish.

Subject-verb agreement and plural noun: 'class' should be plural 'classes' if referring to multiple classes, or keep singular and add third-person singular verb 'finishes'. Since 'we' implies multiple people attending multiple classes, 'classes finish' is appropriate. Alternatively, 'after our class finishes' if referring to a single shared class.

× We will gather at school court before we play the game.

✓ We usually gather at the school court before we play the game.

Tense and article: The action is a habitual activity, so use simple present 'gather' instead of 'will gather'. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'school court' for a specific place.

× When I was a child, I used to ride bicycle.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride a bicycle.

Article usage with countable noun: 'bicycle' is a singular countable noun and requires an article 'a'.

× I usually do that with my brothers.

✓ I usually did that with my brothers.

Tense consistency: The sentence describes a past habit ('When I was a child') so use past habitual 'did' instead of present 'do' to match the time frame.

× Every evening we will go sightseeing around the village and then.

✓ Every evening we would go sightseeing around the village.

Tense and unnecessary word: For habitual past actions, use 'would' or 'used to'. 'Will' is inappropriate for past routines. Also remove trailing 'and then' which is incomplete.

× My hobby that I have had say childhood is read, reading, reading books.

✓ The hobby I have had since childhood is reading books.

Word choice and order: 'say' is incorrect and should be 'since' to indicate time. Use the gerund 'reading' as a noun to name the hobby, and simplify structure to 'The hobby I have had since childhood is reading books.'

× This is because it helped me to get lots of information and it helped me to get more ideas especially when I.

✓ This is because it helps me get lots of information and gives me more ideas, especially when I am studying.

Tense consistency and incomplete clause: Use present tense 'helps' and 'gives' to explain a general truth about the hobby. The sentence was incomplete; add a suitable ending like 'when I am studying' to complete the thought.

× I do not. I do not. I don't really. I don't. I don't. I don't know what my family's hobby, OK. So yeah, I don't.

✓ To be honest, I don't. I don't really know what my family's hobbies are.

Pronoun and noun agreement and sentence completeness: The original contains many fragmented repetitions. Combine into a clear sentence. Use 'hobbies' plural to refer to family members' varied interests and include the verb 'are' to complete the clause. Remove fillers like 'OK' and redundant negatives.