Reading— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 길이는 적절했지만 좀 더 자연스럽고 구체적인 표현을 사용하면 좋습니다. 예를 들어 ‘for instance’ 대신 ‘such as’를 쓰고, 관심 이유나 좋아하는 장르를 한 문장으로 덧붙이면 답변이 풍부해집니다. 또한 최대 5문장 규칙을 지키며 중복 표현을 피하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially novels and comic books such as graphic novels. I like stories that are character-driven because they make me feel connected to the plot. Reading helps me relax after a busy day.

Sugestão: 의도는 분명하지만 문법과 중복이 문제입니다(“easily more easily”, “on a paper”). 더 자연스럽게 이유를 연결하고 구체적인 이유를 하나 더 추가하세요. 예: 눈의 피로 감소, 책의 촉감 등 구체적 근거를 말하면 설득력이 높아집니다.

Exemplo: I prefer reading on paper to reading on a screen because I find it easier to concentrate and understand the text. Also, paper causes less eye strain and I enjoy the physical feel of turning pages.

Sugestão: 문장 구조가 혼란스럽고 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다(‘in the bed’ → ‘in bed’, 중복 표현과 시제 문제). 언제 주의 깊게 읽는지와 그렇지 않은 상황의 이유를 명확히 구분하여 말하세요. 예: 안전과 집중 문제, 주변 소음, 멀미 등 구체적 이유를 제시하세요.

Exemplo: I read carefully when I'm in bed because it's quiet and I can focus on the details. I avoid careful reading in the car since motion can cause dizziness or a headache and there are many distractions.

Sugestão: 의도는 좋지만 문장이 길게 끊기고 중복이 많습니다(‘so and’, ‘I have I don’t have’). 이유를 간결하게 정리하고 연결어를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요. 또한 상황(휴가 중)을 간단히 설명하면 문장이 더 자연스럽습니다.

Exemplo: I prefer scanning because I like to get the main ideas quickly and read several books during a short vacation. When I'm on holiday, I often skim chapters to decide which books I want to read in detail later.

× I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because I think I can understand the book easily more easily by reading a book on a paper.

✓ I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because I think I can understand the book more easily by reading it on paper.

The sentence has redundancy and incorrect word order: 'easily more easily' is duplicated and 'a paper' is incorrect; use 'paper' without article. Also replace the repeated noun 'a book' with the pronoun 'it' for clarity. Suggested improvement: simplify the phrase to 'understand the book more easily by reading it on paper.'

× I read carefully when I'm in the bed and I don't read carefully in the car because when you read the book in the car you get you have to get a headache.

✓ I read carefully when I'm in bed, and I don't read carefully in the car because reading in the car gives me a headache.

Use the idiom 'in bed' (no article). The original repeats and misorders phrases ('you get you have to get a headache'). Change to a clear subject 'reading in the car gives me a headache.' Improvement: avoid switching from 'I' to 'you' and remove redundant verbs.

× I prefer scanning because I want to read many books for short time so and I read books on vacation so I have I don't have much time.

✓ I prefer scanning because I want to read many books in a short time, and when I read books on vacation I don't have much time.

The original has sentence structure issues and redundant words ('for short time', extra 'so', 'I have I don't have much time'). Correct preposition is 'in a short time.' Combine clauses with 'and' and keep subject consistent. Improvement: remove extra fillers and reorder to 'I prefer scanning because I want to read many books in a short time, and when I read on vacation I don't have much time.'