Reading— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer shows enthusiasm and vivid imagination, which is good, but it lacks clarity and contains many hesitations and confusing phrases. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, reducing fillers (um, uh), and using coherent supporting details in 2–4 concise sentences. Also correct unclear phrases (e.g., 'cannot hear the sand', 'Brodin's Mind Horizon') and finish ideas (e.g., ‘go to the wizarding world’).

Exemplo: Yes, I love reading. I especially enjoy fantasy novels because they let me escape into imagined worlds; for example, when I read the Harry Potter series I feel like I am visiting the wizarding world. Reading relaxes me and sparks my imagination, so I often read when I want to unwind.

Sugestão: The response communicates a preference for paper but is unclear due to many hesitations and garbled phrases. State your preference directly, then provide 1–2 clear reasons with specific details (e.g., smell, texture, note-taking). Avoid repetition and keep sentences concise (max 5).

Exemplo: I prefer reading on paper because I enjoy the feel and smell of a physical book. For instance, I like turning real pages and writing notes in the margins, which helps me remember important points more easily than on a screen.

Sugestão: You have the right idea about careful reading for learning, but your answer is vague and contains fillers. Give a clear topic sentence, then explain two situations with linking words (e.g., 'when...; but when...'). Use precise verbs ('analyze', 'skim') and remove unclear phrases like 'scrutinize the wash'.

Exemplo: I need to read carefully when I am studying or researching because I want to understand details and remember facts. However, when I’m browsing for pleasure or looking for a specific fact, I usually skim the text to find what I need quickly.

Sugestão: Your answer attempts to contrast skimming for novels and detailed reading for study, which is good. Improve clarity by making a concise topic sentence, then giving two clear contrasting examples with linking words ('however', 'on the other hand'). Remove rambling and finish the second example (e.g., 'when reading investment books I read in detail to understand concepts').

Exemplo: It depends: for novels I often skim or skip ahead if I want to know the ending quickly. On the other hand, for non-fiction or investment books I read slowly and carefully so I can understand and apply the ideas.

× Either, umm, I would never put a book down when it comes to a bad downtime reading.

✓ Either, umm, I would never put a book down when I am reading in my downtime.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect phrase 'bad downtime reading'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Reorder the clause and use 'when I am reading in my downtime' to express the time context. Remove 'bad' unless intended; use present continuous for ongoing action 'am reading'.

× And with our book, I just cannot hear the sand and shut my eyes and drive off.

✓ And when I read a good book, I just close my eyes and drift off.

The original has unclear reference 'our book' and incorrect verbs 'hear the sand' and 'drive off'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use 'when I read a good book' to introduce condition, 'close my eyes and drift off' as natural collocations for falling asleep or daydreaming.

× Believe it or not, reading Brodin's Mind Horizon with the book in front of my eyes, I can actually let my hair down and go into any wildest dream.

✓ Believe it or not, when I read Brodin's Mind Horizon, I can let my hair down and slip into my wildest dreams.

The original mixes clauses awkwardly and uses 'any wildest dream' incorrectly. This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Use 'when I read' to link action, 'slip into my wildest dreams' is idiomatic, and remove 'any' which conflicts with 'wildest'.

× Let my imagination run wild.

✓ It lets my imagination run wild.

Original is a fragment lacking subject and verb agreement with previous statements, a sentence structure error (ID 26). Make it a complete sentence with subject 'It' referring to the book and verb 'lets'. Alternatively connect to previous sentence.

× With Harry Potter, I can go to the wizarding.

✓ With Harry Potter, I can enter the wizarding world.

Original ends abruptly with 'the wizarding' missing noun; this is sentence structure error (ID 26). Add 'world' to complete the noun phrase and use 'enter' for clarity.

× Me personally I gravitate towards and physical Bush umm.

✓ Personally, I gravitate towards physical books.

Original uses incorrect pronoun 'Me personally' and garbled words 'and physical Bush'. This is incorrect pronoun use and sentence structure (ID 12 and 26). Use subject 'I' and correct noun 'books'.

× The feelings are umm scrolling for pages and umm from smelling umm the really nice scent of umm.

✓ I enjoy the feeling of turning pages and the smell of a new book.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear ('scrolling for pages', incomplete phrase). This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Use clear verbs 'turning pages' and 'smell' with object 'a new book'.

× The new books umm have always been with me throughout the years umm.

✓ New books have always been with me throughout the years.

Remove filler sounds and unnecessary 'the'; sentence structure error (ID 26). The correction uses natural word order and article usage.

× I really love the sensual umm feelings of taking notes on umm physical pages like on heart back or on a paperback books making sure that umm I have.

✓ I really love the tactile feeling of taking notes on physical pages, like on hardbacks or paperbacks, and making sure that I have my notes.

Original misuses 'sensual' (wrong adjective) and has article and plural errors 'a paperback books' and incomplete clause. This is incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and article errors (IDs 13 and 22). Use 'tactile' or 'sensory' for physical touch, correct 'hardbacks or paperbacks', and complete the clause 'making sure that I have my notes'.

× Umm, well when umm, I really need to find information on umm to actually absorb knowledge and umm or glean insights into certain subjects, umm I need to slow down just a tiny bit and and scrutinize the wash.

✓ When I need to find information to absorb knowledge or glean insights into certain subjects, I need to slow down a bit and scrutinize the text.

Original has unnecessary fillers and the phrase 'scrutinize the wash' is incorrect. This is present tense issue and sentence structure error (ID 6 and 26). Use present simple 'need' for habitual or general truths, and correct noun 'text' for what is being scrutinized.

× But going through umm each and every single line or between the lines and not skimming through books umm in order to find the correct answers.

✓ I go through each line and read between the lines instead of skimming when I need to find correct answers.

Original is a fragment and unclear ('between the lines and not skimming through books umm in order to find the correct answers'). This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Provide a complete sentence, clarify contrast between thorough reading and skimming, and maintain logical word order.

× Me personally, it depends on the situation when it comes to the plot with really novels like Harry Potter to fight really the outcomes and the consequences and the endings of each and certain characters where they have to go through, I tend to well, skip pages and skip to the end.

✓ Personally, it depends on the situation: for plot-driven novels like Harry Potter, where I want to know outcomes and endings for characters, I tend to skip pages and jump to the end.

Original is wordy, contains fragments, and has poor word order ('to fight really the outcomes'). This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Streamline the sentence, use 'for' to introduce examples, and use natural verbs 'skip pages' and 'jump to the end'.

× But as far as knowledge is concerned when it comes to investing books.

✓ But when it comes to books about investing, I read more carefully.

Original is a fragment lacking main clause. This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Complete the thought by stating what you do with investing books (read carefully).