Reading— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and fluency: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, and use one or two supporting details. For example, replace "And whenever I get free time" with "Yes, I do" then give reasons. Also correct minor grammar ("visit the library", "read books"). Try to keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I usually go to the library when I have free time because it's quieter than home and my children often distract me there, so I can concentrate and read books peacefully.

Sugestão: Clarify and eliminate filler words; use precise vocabulary and a clear contrast. Begin with a direct preference sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid repeating words ("burns my burn out my eyes").

Exemplo: I prefer reading on paper because screens strain my eyes, and I find printed books more comfortable and engaging than reading on a phone.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize contrasting ideas with linking words. Remove irrelevant words like "independence" and reduce hesitations. Be specific about what "reading carefully" means and give an example of leisure reading.

Exemplo: I read carefully when I'm studying for exams because I need to understand details and remember facts. In contrast, during leisure reading, I skim or read more casually to enjoy the story without worrying about every detail.

Sugestão: Finish your sentences and avoid trailing off. Start with a clear statement of preference depending on purpose, and use linking phrases like "however" or "in contrast". Correct minor grammar ("build a time management" → "manage my time"). Give a complete final clause for the second part.

Exemplo: When preparing for an exam, I prefer scanning because I need to find answers quickly and manage my time. However, for an interesting novel I prefer detailed reading to enjoy the language and the plot.

× 'And whenever I get free time, I visit library to do some reading because I can't read at home due to my kids.'

✓ 'And whenever I have free time, I visit the library to do some reading because I can't read at home because of my kids.'

'visit library' is missing the definite article 'the' before a singular, specific place; 'get free time' is less natural than 'have free time'; 'due to my kids' is better expressed as 'because of my kids' in this context. Suggestion: use 'have free time', include 'the' before 'library', and use 'because of' for reason.'

× 'They won't let me read anything.'

✓ 'They won't let me read anything.'

'They won't let me read anything.' is grammatically correct; no article error. No change needed.

× 'So I prefer visiting library and read some books.'

✓ 'So I prefer visiting the library and reading some books.'

'visiting library' requires the definite article 'the'; parallel structure requires 'visiting' and 'reading' both in -ing (gerund) form. Suggestion: use 'the library' and make verbs parallel.'

× 'The screen burns my burn out my eyes so I prefer reading on paper because uh, it uh, keeps my eyes safe and also uh, I want to get connected with paper rather than phone.'

✓ 'The screen burns my eyes out, so I prefer reading on paper because it protects my eyes, and I prefer to connect with paper rather than with my phone.'

'burns my burn out my eyes' is a confused phrase; 'burns my eyes out' or better 'hurts my eyes' is appropriate; 'keeps my eyes safe' is awkward, 'protects my eyes' is natural; 'get connected with paper' should be 'connect with paper'; include 'with' before 'my phone' and maintain parallel structure. Suggestion: simplify to 'hurts my eyes' or 'burns my eyes out', use 'protects', and include preposition 'with' where needed.'

× 'When do you need to read carefully, and when not?'

✓ 'When do you need to read carefully, and when do you not?'

Question inversion requires auxiliary 'do' in both clauses for parallelism. Suggestion: use 'when do you not' or rephrase 'and when not' to 'and when do you not.'

× 'Uh, independence.'

✓ 'Uh, for example, when I need to study independently.'

'Independence.' is a fragment and does not answer the question clearly. It should be a full clause explaining when: e.g., 'when I need to study independently.' Suggestion: provide a complete sentence.'

× 'If I'm preparing for any exam, then I would definitely read carefully.'

✓ 'If I'm preparing for an exam, then I will definitely read carefully.'

The conditional mixes present progressive with 'would' (second conditional) incorrectly. For a real conditional about a future or typical action, use 'will' or simple present. Suggestion: use 'will' for future intention or 'I definitely read carefully when preparing for an exam.'

× 'Uh, on the other hand, if I'm uh, doing a leisure activity, so I just relax my mind and want to do some.'

✓ 'On the other hand, if I'm doing a leisure activity, I just relax and read for pleasure.'

'so I just relax my mind and want to do some' is ungrammatical and incomplete ('do some' what?). The sentence should state the activity: 'relax and read for pleasure.' Suggestion: remove filler words and complete the idea.'

× 'If I am preparing for an exam and I have to build a time management, then I do scanning to find the answers.'

✓ 'If I am preparing for an exam and I need to manage my time, then I do scanning to find the answers.'

'have to build a time management' is awkward; 'manage my time' or 'build a time-management plan' is preferred. Suggestion: use 'manage my time' and keep verb forms natural.'

× 'On the other hand, if I am reading a an interesting book then I do.'

✓ 'On the other hand, if I am reading an interesting book, then I do detailed reading.'

There is a duplicated article 'a an' and missing object for 'do'. Also need comma before 'then'. Specify 'detailed reading' to answer the question. Suggestion: remove duplicate article and complete the sentence.'