Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Clarifiez et organisez votre réponse : commencez par une phrase directe qui répond à la question, puis donnez une ou deux raisons précises. Évitez les erreurs grammaticales (temps et choix de verbes) et la langue confuse. Utilisez des mots de liaison simples pour la cohérence.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot because I consider it important for my health. For example, I usually walk to nearby shops or to run errands instead of driving, which helps me stay active each day.

Sugestão: Bonne structure et exemples personnels. Améliorez la fluidité en utilisant un lien logique et un vocabulaire légèrement plus précis. Évitez répétitions simples et préférez un ou deux détails concrets.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to go for walks a lot as a child because I had lots of energy. For instance, my mother and I often walked to the park to play or to the local market to buy fresh food.

Sugestão: Réponse claire et pertinente. Pour encore plus d'efficacité, commencez par une phrase thème puis enchaînez avec une ou deux raisons liées à différents groupes (enfants, adultes) en utilisant des connecteurs comme 'Moreover' ou 'Additionally'.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because they offer safe, open spaces for relaxation. Moreover, parks allow children to run and play freely, while adults can enjoy fresh air and gentle exercise outdoors.

Sugestão: Bonne idée et vocabulaire descriptif, mais corrigez les erreurs de choix de mot (par ex. 'standing'/'stunning', 'last valleys'). Raccourcissez légèrement et utilisez des phrases cohérentes avec connecteurs pour éviter la redondance.

Exemplo: I would love to hike in Switzerland because of its stunning scenery and well-maintained trails. The clear lakes and dramatic mountains would make multi-day walks unforgettable, and I would enjoy visiting small villages to try local food.

Sugestão: Clarifiez le lieu et évitez hésitations. Donnez des détails précis et corrigez les erreurs de vocabulaire (ex : 'an application' ne convient pas) et la redondance. Utilisez une réponse concise en 2-3 phrases sans ‘uh’.

Exemplo: Last week I went for a short 30-minute walk to Summit, which is an office that helps students study abroad in Morocco. I walked there and back and it was a pleasant, refreshing break.

× Yes I will call out because of its very big importance to move.

✓ Yes, I will call it out because it is very important to move.

The student used 'because of its very big importance to move' which is awkward and ungrammatical for expressing reason. Replace 'because of its very big importance to move' with 'because it is very important to move' to form a correct clause. Also add 'it' as the object of 'call out' if intended; consider using 'point out' or 'say' depending on meaning.

× I don't do gym or I don't drink good but I work good for my health.

✓ I don't go to the gym and I don't drink alcohol, but I take good care of my health.

Multiple issues: 'do gym' is incorrect—English uses 'go to the gym' (verb + preposition). 'Drink good' is ungrammatical; likely means 'don't drink alcohol' or 'don't drink much' and requires noun/object. 'Work good for my health' is awkward; use 'take good care of my health' or 'exercise for my health'. Ensure proper verbs and objects and correct adverb/adjective usage.

× For example when I have something to do in a place I go walking.

✓ For example, when I have something to do in a place, I walk there.

'I go walking' is understandable but unnatural with 'in a place'; better use 'I walk there.' Also add commas for the adverbial clause. Use simple present to describe habitual actions.

× Yes, I used to go for walks a lot when I was a child because I was energetic.

✓ Yes, I used to go for walks a lot when I was a child because I was energetic.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Used to' correctly expresses a past habitual action. No change needed.

× For example, I often walked with my mother to the park or to the local market.

✓ For example, I often walked with my mother to the park or to the local market.

This sentence is correct for past habitual action when paired with previous context. No change required.

× Because parks are safe, open space when children can run around and play to burn off energy.

✓ Because parks are safe open spaces where children can run around and play to burn off energy.

'Open space' should be plural 'open spaces' to match 'parks.' Use 'where' to introduce a clause describing what children can do. This corrects noun number and connects the clause properly.

× Unlike adults who might exercise at a gym, young children need somewhere outdoors to climb, play games and socialize with other kids.

✓ Unlike adults who might exercise at a gym, young children need outdoor places to climb, play games, and socialize with other kids.

'Somewhere outdoors' is informal; 'outdoor places' is clearer. Add a comma before 'and' in a list for clarity. Structure revised for natural phrasing.

× I enjoy hiking and I would love to take a long walk in Switzerland because of its standing, open scenery and well maintained trails.

✓ I enjoy hiking and would love to take a long walk in Switzerland because of its stunning, open scenery and well-maintained trails.

'Standing' is incorrect word choice; use 'stunning.' Add hyphen in 'well-maintained.' Remove the second 'I' for smoother coordination. Maintain present tense preference and conditional 'would love' for hypothetical.

× The country's last valleys, crystal clear lakes and dramatic mountains views make it an ideal place for a multi day hike and I imagine shopping in small villages to sample local food along.

✓ The country's lush valleys, crystal-clear lakes, and dramatic mountain views make it an ideal place for a multi-day hike, and I imagine shopping in small villages to sample local food along the way.

'Last valleys' is incorrect; use descriptive adjective like 'lush.' Use hyphens in 'crystal-clear' and 'multi-day.' 'Mountains views' should be 'mountain views.' Add 'the way' to complete 'along.' Commas needed in list and before conjunction for clarity.

× Last week I went for a short walk to Summit, an application for studying abroad Morocco.

✓ Last week I went for a short walk to Summit, an organization that helps with studying abroad in Morocco.

The original phrase 'an application for studying abroad Morocco' is unclear and ungrammatical. Clarify whether 'Summit' is an organization or event. Use 'organization that helps with studying abroad in Morocco' or other accurate noun phrase. Maintain past tense 'went'.

× I walked there for about 30 minutes and came back, uh, at my home to my home.

✓ I walked there for about 30 minutes and then came back home.

'Came back, at my home to my home' is redundant and incorrect. Use 'came back home' or 'returned home.' Keep past tense consistent and remove filler 'uh' in formal responses.