Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 발음·중복·문법 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 질문에 바로 답하는 주제문을 명확히 하고, 중복된 단어를 제거하세요. 연결어구로 이유를 덧붙이고 구체적인 상황(언제, 어디에서, 얼마나 자주)을 추가하면 더 설득력있습니다. 예시 문장을 소리내어 여러 번 연습하고, 문장을 2~3개로 간결하게 유지하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I do walk a lot, especially at night. When I walk, I feel refreshed and free because the streets are quiet and I can clear my mind.

Sugestão: 의미 전달이 불명확하고 반복(중복)과 문법 오류가 많습니다. 우선 간단한 부정 응답(예/아니오)으로 시작한 뒤 이유와 구체적 활동을 연결어로 설명하세요. 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하고 불필요한 단어 반복을 피하세요.

Exemplo: Not really. I was quite introverted as a child, so I preferred playing indoors with my friends, such as playing board games or video games.

Sugestão: 논리 전개가 혼란스럽고 반복이 많습니다. 먼저 일반적인 이유를 제시한 뒤 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 구체적 이유와 예를 덧붙이세요. 'stress' 같은 단어는 단수형이나 수식어를 정확히 사용하세요.

Exemplo: I think people walk in parks because it helps them relax after work. For example, the green space and fresh air reduce stress, so they can unwind and recharge.

Sugestão: 표현이 끊기고 구문 오류가 있습니다. 가정문 답변은 조건을 명확히 한 후 구체적 이유와 이미지를 제공하세요. 단어 선택( sandy → sand, walking )을 정확히 하고 문장을 완성형으로 말하세요.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach. I enjoy watching the water and feeling the sand under my feet because it is very calming.

Sugestão: 시제와 동사 선택이 틀렸고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 과거 시제로 간단히 장소와 활동을 밝히고, 그 경험의 결과를 연결어로 명확하게 설명하세요. 불필요한 단어를 제거하고 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

Exemplo: I went to the running track in my apartment complex yesterday. After running, I felt refreshed and enjoyed some fresh air.

× Yes, I enjoy working at night because if I when I walk walk I can feel free and refreshing.

✓ Yes, I enjoy walking at night because when I walk I feel free and refreshed.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (verb + -ing), so 'working' was possible but context requires 'walking' which matches the activity mentioned; repeated words 'if I when I walk walk' are redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'feel free and refreshed' with 'refreshed' (adjective) instead of 'refreshing' which describes something that causes refreshment. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use 'walking' after 'enjoy', and use 'refreshed' to describe the speaker's state.

× Actually not really I'm I'm ex integrated person. I usually play in in indoor with my friends and I'll.

✓ Actually, not really. I'm an introverted person. I usually play indoors with my friends.

'Ex integrated' is incorrect; likely intended 'introverted'. Use the article 'an' before a vowel-sound adjective phrase 'introverted person'. 'In in indoor' contains duplication and incorrect form: use 'indoors' (adverb) for activity location. The trailing 'and I'll' is incomplete; remove it or complete the clause. Suggestion: use 'I'm an introverted person' and 'I usually play indoors.'

× I think many people used to work in the park because that is because they can feel free and refreshing after work. Many people get many stressed at.

✓ I think many people like to walk in the park because they can feel free and refreshed after work. Many people get very stressed.

'Used to work in the park' conflicts with context; 'like to walk' fits the question. 'That is because' is redundant; simplify. 'Refreshing' should be 'refreshed' to describe people's feelings. 'Get many stressed at' is ungrammatical; use 'get very stressed' or 'feel very stressed.' Suggestion: use 'walk in the park', 'feel refreshed', and 'get very stressed.'

× I would like to enjoy sand along the sea because I like looking at the water and. Working on the Sandy.

✓ I would like to walk on the sand along the sea because I like looking at the water and walking on the sand.

Use 'walk on the sand' or 'on the beach' rather than 'enjoy sand along the sea.' 'Along the sea' is better phrased as 'along the sea' or 'along the shore.' The sentence was fragmented with 'and. Working on the Sandy.' Combine clauses and use 'walking on the sand' as a gerund phrase. Suggestion: use 'walk on the sand' or 'walk along the shore.'

× I worked my apartment running track yesterday. After that I feel the I feared refreshing and cut some fresh air.

✓ I ran on the running track around my apartment yesterday. After that I felt refreshed and got some fresh air.

'Worked my apartment running track' is incorrect word choice; use 'ran on the running track' for past activity. 'Feel' should be past 'felt' to match past tense 'yesterday.' 'I feared refreshing' is nonsensical; use 'felt refreshed.' 'Cut some fresh air' is wrong collocation; use 'got some fresh air.' Suggestion: use simple past for actions that happened yesterday and choose natural collocations: 'ran', 'felt refreshed', 'got some fresh air.'