Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản và dùng từ đúng (ví dụ: 'walk to school' không phải 'work to school', 'near' cần 'near my house' là OK). Tránh lặp và tiếng ngập (umm, uh). Trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng với 2-3 câu: một câu chủ đề và một câu bổ sung chi tiết. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản như 'but' để nối ý.

Exemplo: I used to walk to school when I was in primary school because it was very near my house, but now I usually go by car because it is more convenient.

Sugestão: Cần sửa các lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp ('when I was so dry' không đúng; 'couldn't breathe' vs 'could breathe'). Nên nêu ý trực tiếp: thời gian, tần suất, với ai và lý do cụ thể. Dùng linking words như 'because' hợp lý và kiểm soát thì (past simple).

Exemplo: When I was a child, I often walked in the early morning with my father because the fresh air made me feel healthy and energetic.

Sugestão: Trả lời thiếu rõ ràng, nhiều lỗi từ và câu không hiểu được ('working in parks', 'working parks'). Cần tổ chức ý rõ ràng: đưa 2-3 lý do cụ thể (yên tĩnh, không khí trong lành, thiết bị thể dục). Dùng từ vựng phù hợp như 'walk in parks', 'avoid traffic', 'exercise equipment'. Tránh câu quá dài và lộn xộn; dùng liên từ như 'first', 'also'.

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because they can avoid traffic and enjoy a peaceful environment. Also, parks often have exercise equipment and open space, which makes it easier to keep fit.

Sugestão: Có lỗi từ vựng ('have a hiking' -> 'go hiking'; 'nuclear family' is okay but formal). Cần diễn đạt rõ lợi ích cụ thể bằng câu ngắn gọn: nâng sức khỏe, gắn kết gia đình. Tránh ngập, sửa thì và cấu trúc 'not only... but also...'.

Exemplo: I would like to go hiking in the mountains with my immediate family because it would improve our fitness and also provide a good opportunity for family bonding.

Sugestão: Cần dùng thì và cụm từ phù hợp ('near the beach', 'recently', 'when I don't have time' is confusing). Tránh mâu thuẫn: 'usually' và 'lately' cùng lúc. Nên nêu rõ thời gian gần nhất, an toàn khi đi cùng ai. Sửa 'work with me' -> 'walk with me'.

Exemplo: Recently I have been walking along the beach near my house, especially on days when I have time. I usually don't walk alone because it's unsafe, so I often walk with my parents.

× Well, in the past when I was in primary school, I used to work to school because it really near my house.

✓ Well, in the past when I was in primary school, I used to walk to school because it was really near my house.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' and omitted past tense forms. 'Used to' already indicates past habit; the verb should be 'walk'. Also 'near' describing past location needs past verb 'was'. Suggestion: use 'walk to school' and 'it was really near my house'. (Vietnamese) Trong câu này cần dùng 'walk' thay vì 'work' và động từ miêu tả tình trạng phải chia ở quá khứ 'was'.

× However now I'm used, uh, usually go to school by car.

✓ However, now I usually go to school by car.

The phrase 'I'm used' is incomplete and incorrect here. To express current habit, use present simple 'I usually go'. Remove 'I'm used' or say 'I'm used to going', but that requires 'to' plus gerund. Suggestion: 'Now I usually go to school by car.' (Vietnamese) Nên dùng thì hiện tại đơn 'I usually go' để diễn tả thói quen hiện tại; cụm 'I'm used' không đúng nếu không có 'to' và động từ -ing.

× Well, when I was so dry, I used to walk a lot in the early morning with my dad and I felt very good for health because I cannot breathe the fresh air.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I used to walk a lot in the early morning with my dad and I felt very healthy because I could breathe the fresh air.

'So dry' is incorrect for 'child'; use 'a child'. 'Felt very good for health' is unidiomatic; use 'felt very healthy'. Also 'cannot breathe' should be past ability 'could breathe'. Suggestion: correct nouns and verb forms to match past tense and natural expressions. (Vietnamese) Sửa 'so dry' thành 'a child', dùng 'felt very healthy' và 'could breathe' để phù hợp thì quá khứ và diễn đạt tự nhiên.

× Well, from my perspective, there's some reason that people enjoy working in parks.

✓ Well, from my perspective, there are some reasons that people enjoy walking in parks.

'There's some reason' should be plural 'there are some reasons' to match 'reasons'. 'Working in parks' is wrong; it should be 'walking in parks'. Suggestion: use plural verb 'are' and correct noun 'reasons' and 'walking'. (Vietnamese) Cần dùng 'there are' cho danh từ số nhiều 'reasons' và sửa 'working' thành 'walking'.

× First, they can avoid traffic jams, so they can have a peaceful tour, relax and also working in parks help the working parks and a lot of equipments that which is very easier for them to do exercise.

✓ First, they can avoid traffic jams, so they can have a peaceful time, relax, and walking in parks is helped by many facilities and equipments that make it easier for them to exercise.

The original sentence has run-on and incorrect structures. 'Peaceful tour' should be 'peaceful time'. 'Working in parks help the working parks' is confusing; intended meaning likely 'walking in parks is supported by many facilities'. Use 'make it easier' not 'is very easier'. Suggestion: split ideas, use parallel structure and correct verbs. (Vietnamese) Câu gốc lủng củng, cần chia thành các mệnh đề rõ ràng, dùng 'peaceful time', 'walking in parks', 'many facilities' và 'make it easier'.

× First, they can avoid traffic jams, so they can have a peaceful tour, relax and also working in parks help the working parks and a lot of equipments that which is very easier for them to do exercise.

✓ First, they can avoid traffic jams, so they can have a peaceful time, relax, and walking in parks is supported by many facilities and equipments that make it easier for them to exercise.

After conjunctions in a list maintain parallelism: 'have', 'relax', and 'walk' (or 'walking') should align. 'Working' was incorrectly used; use 'walking' and make sure verbs agree with subjects. Suggestion: keep parallel verb forms and correct -ing usage. (Vietnamese) Dùng dạng -ing phải nhất quán trong danh sách; sửa 'working' thành 'walking' và đảm bảo song song.

× Well, I hope to have a hiking to a mountain with my nuclear family.

✓ Well, I hope to go hiking on a mountain with my nuclear family.

'Have a hiking' is incorrect; use 'go hiking' or 'have a hike'. Also preposition should be 'on' or 'in' a mountain: 'go hiking on a mountain' or 'in the mountains'. Suggestion: use 'go hiking' and correct preposition. (Vietnamese) 'Have a hiking' sai ngữ pháp; nên dùng 'go hiking' và sửa giới từ thành 'on' hoặc 'in the mountains'.

× I think this activity is not only helps umm our books, our strength, but also this is a time for family gathering.

✓ I think this activity not only helps build our bodies and strength, but also provides time for family gathering.

'Is not only helps' mixes auxiliary 'is' with verb 'helps' incorrectly. Remove 'is'. 'Our books' is wrong meaning; likely 'bodies'. Use parallel structure 'not only... but also...' and adjust nouns. Suggestion: rephrase to 'not only helps build our bodies and strength, but also provides time for family gathering.' (Vietnamese) Tránh dùng 'is' trước 'helps'; sửa 'books' thành 'bodies' và giữ cấu trúc song song 'not only... but also...'.

× Well, my house is near beach so I usually walk along the beach lately when the day I have no time.

✓ Well, my house is near the beach so I usually walk along the beach lately when I have free time.

'Near beach' needs article 'the beach'. 'Lately when the day I have no time' is contradictory and ungrammatical; likely meant 'when I have free time' or 'when I have time'. Also 'lately' with 'usually' is odd; keep 'lately' or 'usually'. Suggestion: use 'the beach' and 'when I have free time'. (Vietnamese) Thêm mạo từ 'the' trước 'beach', sửa cụm 'when the day I have no time' thành 'when I have free time' và cân nhắc dùng 'lately' hay 'usually'.

× And moreover I never walk alone lately because it's very dangerous.

✓ Moreover, I never walk alone lately because it's very dangerous.

This sentence is mostly correct, but placement of 'and' is unnecessary; start with 'Moreover'. 'Never walk alone lately' combines 'never' and 'lately' awkwardly — better 'I haven't been walking alone lately' if using present perfect. Suggestion: use 'I haven't been walking alone lately' to indicate recent habitual change. (Vietnamese) Tránh dùng 'and moreover'; dùng 'Moreover'. Nếu muốn nhấn sự thay đổi gần đây, dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành 'I haven't been walking alone lately'.

× So I always uh talk to my parents to work with me.

✓ So I always ask my parents to walk with me.

'Talk to my parents to work with me' is incorrect verb choice and structure. Likely meant 'ask my parents to walk with me'. Use 'ask' + object + infinitive and 'walk' not 'work'. Suggestion: 'I always ask my parents to walk with me.' (Vietnamese) Sửa 'talk to' thành 'ask' và 'work' thành 'walk', dùng cấu trúc 'ask someone to do something'.