Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and use correct tense and word order. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Present habit), use simple linking phrase to add one or two supporting details, and avoid long, unstructured clauses. Correct common grammar errors: use present simple for habitual actions, use gerunds after 'like' (lying → lying is okay but native prefers 'lie in bed' or 'stay in bed'), and correct infinitive/participle forms (to cook, not to cooking). Keep answer to 2–3 concise sentences.

Exemplo: I don't walk much. I usually stay at home and lie in bed to watch Netflix or YouTube, and sometimes I cook, so I tend to be indoors most days.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words (because, so, and). Avoid filler words and keep sentences concise. Replace vague phrases ('a lot of tutorial classes') with specific examples and correct verb forms (needed, had).

Exemplo: When I was a child, I didn't walk much because I had to attend school and many extra classes. For example, I took cooking and baking lessons and sometimes Chinese tutoring, so I usually spent weekends studying instead of walking.

Sugestão: Start with a general statement and follow with 2–3 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, also). Use natural collocations (clear air → fresh air; play the swings → play on the swings). Be concise and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: People often walk in parks because it helps digestion after a meal and parks have fresh air and places to sit. Also, parks are family-friendly; parents can take children to play on the swings and enjoy outdoor time together.

Sugestão: Use conditional correctly (If I had the chance, I would...) and give a coherent reason for choosing a place. Keep the answer focused on walking rather than listing unrelated activities. Use precise vocabulary and avoid stereotypes (e.g. 'girls like shopping').

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along a shopping street because I enjoy browsing small shops and buying souvenirs. I could also stop at a café to chat with friends and then continue walking through the area.

Sugestão: Use past tense for a recent action (I walked recently to my company). Combine short fragments into one clear sentence and add a brief supporting detail (why or how often). Avoid repeating words.

Exemplo: Recently I walked to my company by myself. It is a short walk from my apartment, so I often go on foot when the weather is good.

× Actually I didn't walk a lot because I if the day is began I like to lying in the bed and watch Netflix, YouTube and sometimes I would like to cooking so I will stay at home a lot.

✓ Actually I didn't walk a lot because if the day has begun I like to lie in bed and watch Netflix and YouTube, and sometimes I like to cook so I stay at home a lot.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'if the day is began' mixes passive and incorrect past participle; correct is 'if the day has begun' (present perfect to indicate the day has started). 'like to lying' uses infinitive vs gerund incorrectly — after 'like to' use base verb 'lie' or 'like lying' so 'like to lie' is used. 'in the bed' should be 'in bed' (article error). 'watch Netflix, YouTube' needs 'and' between items. 'would like to cooking' mixes 'would like to' with gerund; use 'like to cook' or 'would like to cook.' Also 'I will stay at home a lot' implies future; present 'I stay at home a lot' fits context. Suggestion: simplify sentences, keep consistent present/past forms and correct verb forms.

× When I was chow, I didn't walk a lot because I need to go to school in the weekdays and weekends.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't walk a lot because I needed to go to school on weekdays and Saturdays.

'When I was chow' is a mispronunciation/word choice; correct noun is 'a child.' 'I didn't walk a lot' is past simple and must be matched by 'I needed' not 'I need'—use past tense 'needed.' 'in the weekdays and weekends' has wrong prepositions and redundancy; use 'on weekdays and weekends' or 'on weekdays and Saturdays' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past events and correct prepositions.

× I have a lot of tutorial classes like cooking, baking classes, umm during lesson and sometimes I need to learn Chinese for the tutorial.

✓ I had a lot of tutorial classes like cooking and baking during lessons, and sometimes I had to study Chinese in those tutorials.

Tense inconsistency: the speaker is referring to the past, so use past tense 'had' and 'had to' rather than present 'have' and 'need to.' 'like cooking, baking classes' is repetitive; use 'like cooking and baking.' 'during lesson' needs plural article: 'during lessons' or 'in lessons.' 'learn Chinese for the tutorial' is awkward; use 'study Chinese in those tutorials.' Suggestion: keep past tense and use clearer noun phrases.

× Because after the meal they would like to walk in the parks, like because parks have more clear, clear air and have some seats.

✓ Because after a meal they like to walk in parks, since parks have cleaner air and some benches.

'After the meal' better as 'after a meal' (article choice). 'They would like' is unnecessary conditional; simple 'they like' expresses general habit. 'walk in the parks' should be 'walk in parks' or 'walk in the park.' 'more clear, clear air' is incorrect comparative and repetition; use comparative 'cleaner air.' 'have some seats' is unnatural for parks; 'benches' is more natural. Suggestion: use appropriate comparatives and natural vocabulary.

× Sometimes if the family have child, they can go to a park, park with the child and play the swings, something like that.

✓ Sometimes if a family has a child, they can go to a park with the child and play on the swings, things like that.

'If the family have child' has number and article errors: use 'a family has a child' (singular subject takes 'has'). 'park, park with the child' is redundant; combine. 'play the swings' is incorrect verb-preposition; correct is 'play on the swings.' 'something like that' better as 'things like that.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and proper prepositions with play.

× If I have chance to take a long walk, I will go shopping because girls like shopping, like buy some souvenirs to their friends, like chit chat with their friends and go to karaoke, go singing and go buy some clothes like New Balance.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would go shopping because girls like shopping, buy souvenirs for their friends, chat with their friends, go to karaoke, sing, and buy clothes like New Balance.

The conditional 'If I have chance' should be 'If I had the chance' to match the hypothetical tone, and the result clause 'I would...' not 'I will...' Also 'have chance' needs article: 'have the chance.' Parallelism errors: use consistent verb forms in a list ('buy', 'chat', 'go', 'sing', 'buy'). 'buy some souvenirs to their friends' uses wrong preposition; 'buy...for their friends.' 'go to karaoke, go singing' streamline to 'go to karaoke' or 'sing.' Suggestion: use correct conditional forms and maintain parallel verb forms.

× Recently I just walk to my company. Just go for walk alone.

✓ Recently I just walked to my company. I just went for a walk alone.

'Recently' with past action requires past tense 'walked' not present 'walk.' 'Just go for walk alone' lacks articles and correct tense: use 'I just went for a walk alone.' Suggestion: use past simple for recent completed actions and include articles where needed.