Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear, relevant and natural, with a good example. To improve, tighten phrasing to avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences: start with a topic sentence, then one or two supporting details using a linking word. Replace vague phrases like "quite relaxing" with slightly stronger vocabulary and avoid repeating ideas (e.g., "wakes me up" and "get ready" are similar).

Exemplo: Yes, I walk every day because it helps me relax and boosts my energy. For example, I walk about seven minutes from the parking lot to my office each morning, and that short stroll wakes me up and puts me in a productive mood.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but contains unclear or incorrect details ("the store took about 15 minutes") and minor grammar issues. Improve by giving a concise topic sentence, clarifying the extra detail, and using linking words. Provide specific, coherent information about frequency and reasons.

Exemplo: No, I didn't walk much as a child because I usually rode my bicycle. Occasionally I walked to school—it was only about a 15-minute walk—when my parents were busy, so walking was not my main mode of transport.

Sugestão: Good structure and relevant points, but avoid awkward phrasing ("comfortable to store") and be more specific with linking words. Use a clearer final clause that explains the benefit. Try to include one concise reason and one specific example or effect.

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because they offer dedicated trails and little traffic, so walks feel safer and more peaceful. Moreover, the trees provide shade and fresh air, which helps walkers feel refreshed and less stressed.

Sugestão: This is a vivid, well-developed answer with good imagery. Improve by correcting minor grammar (remove extra words like "roughly at the when" and capitalisation) and condensing slightly to avoid repetition. Use one linking word to connect reasons.

Exemplo: I'd love to take a long walk along the beach at sunset when the sunlight reflects off the sea and creates beautiful views. The rhythmic waves and salty breeze make the atmosphere peaceful, so I can relax and think more clearly.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but contains unnatural phrases ("clean my mind", "stall in the park") and redundant words ("usually" and "often"). Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, one linking word, and more precise verbs and reasons. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Exemplo: Lately I've been taking a short walk in the park near my house. I often go after work to clear my mind and get some exercise; the walks usually last about 30 minutes and I like watching people and the scenery.

× No, I didn't walk much when I was a child because I usually rode a bicycle.

✓ No, I didn't walk much when I was a child because I usually rode a bicycle.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable: past simple 'didn't walk' and 'rode' correctly describe habitual past actions. No change needed.

× I only walked to school occasionally when my parents were too busy to take me, and the school was quite close, so the store took about 15 minutes.

✓ I only walked to school occasionally when my parents were too busy to take me, and because the school was quite close, it only took about 15 minutes.

Original sentence has a sentence structure error: 'so the store took about 15 minutes' is illogical and likely a typo. Replace 'the store' with 'it' referring to the walk, and reorder with 'because' to show cause. Use 'only took about 15 minutes' to indicate duration of the walk.

× In addition, many trees in parks provide shade and fresh air, which help us feel more comfortable to store.

✓ In addition, many trees in parks provide shade and fresh air, which help us feel more comfortable and relaxed.

'Comfortable to store' is incorrect word choice and collocation. The correct idea is 'comfortable and relaxed.' This fixes the quantifier/collocation misuse and yields natural English.

× I would like to take a long walk along the beach roughly at the when the sunlight reflects on the sea surface, which creates A remarkably beautiful views.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the beach at a time when the sunlight reflects on the sea surface, which creates remarkably beautiful views.

Multiple article and determiner errors: remove the extra 'the' after 'at', change 'A remarkably beautiful views' to 'remarkably beautiful views' (no capital A and plural 'views' doesn't take 'a'). Also 'roughly' was misplaced; 'at a time' is clearer. These changes correct article usage and word order.

× Walking by the sea suits me because the rhythmic sound of waves and the salty breeze create a peaceful atmosphere and I often find it helps me think clearly and relax.

✓ Walking by the sea suits me because the rhythmic sound of the waves and the salty breeze create a peaceful atmosphere, and I often find they help me think clearly and relax.

Add 'the' before 'waves' for natural reference to a specific set of waves. Change 'it helps me' to 'they help me' to agree with the plural subject 'the rhythmic sound of the waves and the salty breeze.' This fixes article usage and subject-pronoun agreement.

× Yes, I walk every day because I find it quite relaxing and it doesn't make me feel tired.

✓ Yes, I walk every day because I find it quite relaxing and it doesn't make me feel tired.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple for habits and general truths. No correction needed.

× I would like to take a long walk along the beach roughly at the when the sunlight reflects on the sea surface, which creates A remarkably beautiful views.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the beach when the sunlight reflects on the sea surface, which creates remarkably beautiful views.

Also acceptable to remove 'at a time' and 'roughly' for conciseness. Fixes redundant/misplaced words and article errors as previously noted.

× Where did you go for a walk lately? Student: I usually go for a short walk in the park near my house. Lastly, I've often gone there after work to clean my mind and stay healthy, and it usually takes me about 30 minutes to stall in the park, look at people and surrounding areas.

✓ I usually go for a short walk in the park near my house. Recently, I've often gone there after work to clear my mind and stay healthy, and it usually takes me about 30 minutes to stroll in the park, looking at people and the surrounding area.

Mixed tense and word choice errors: 'lately' pairs with present perfect — use 'Recently' or change tense. 'Clean my mind' is incorrect collocation; 'clear my mind' is correct. 'Stall' is wrong word; use 'stroll.' Use 'looking at' for ongoing action during the stroll and 'the surrounding area' for correct singular reference. These changes correct tense usage and vocabulary errors.