Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 응답이 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 있긴 하나 문법과 어휘 사용에 큰 오류가 있으며 문장이 불명확합니다. 구체적으로는 'walk'와 'work'를 혼동했고 수치 표현('more than thousands works')이 부정확합니다. 발음 망설임('uh')을 줄이고 단어 선택을 정확히 하세요. 답변 구조는 주제 문장(Do you walk a lot?에 대한 예/아니오), 짧은 이유, 구체적인 예 순으로 최대 3문장 이내로 구성하세요. 예를 들어 하루에 몇 분/몇 번 걷는지 등 구체적 수치와 활동을 연결해 말하면 점수가 오릅니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk for about 45 minutes every morning because it helps me stay healthy. For example, I walk to the park near my house most days.

Sugestão: 응답이 질문의 시제(과거)에 부적절하게 대응했고 의미 전달이 모호합니다('No idea on what I was younger' 등). 또한 'fat before' 같은 표현은 부정확하고 민감할 수 있습니다. 과거 습관을 말할 땐 'when I was a child, I used to...' 같은 표현을 사용하고, 지금과의 비교는 명확한 연결구(linking word)로 설명하세요. 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

Exemplo: When I was a child, I didn't walk outside very often because I preferred staying indoors. Now, however, I enjoy walking regularly and feel much fitter.

Sugestão: 답변이 문법적으로 틀리고 핵심 어휘를 잘못 사용했습니다('working' 대신 'walking'). 이유 제시가 단순 반복이고 구체성이 부족합니다. 이유를 말할 때는 결과(건강 증진), 활동(운동, 휴식), 환경(운치, 신선한 공기) 등 다양한 구체적 요소를 제시하고 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because it is good exercise and helps reduce stress. For example, parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery, which makes walking more enjoyable.

Sugestão: 질문에 대한 답은 있지만 단어 선택('rock about')과 표현 일부가 부자연스럽습니다. 'cozy'와 'love' 등 좋은 어휘를 사용했으나 이유가 더 구체적이어야 합니다. 가보고 싶은 장소를 말할 땐 구체적인 특징(풍경, 거리, 길의 길이 등)과 이유를 덧붙이고, 연결어를 사용해 2~3문장으로 구성하세요.

Exemplo: I would like to take a long walk in S Park near my apartment because it has tree-lined paths and a peaceful lake. I enjoy walking there since the scenery and quiet atmosphere help me relax.

Sugestão: 응답이 알아듣기 힘들고 장소 이름이 불분명합니다('Applies I. Lightly is Soursu'). 최근 활동을 말할 때는 장소 이름을 정확히 말하고, 누구와 갔는지, 무엇을 했는지 등의 구체적 정보로 문장을 확장하세요. 연결어를 사용해 경험을 설명하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk at S Park with some friends. We walked around the lake and chatted, which was really enjoyable.

× Yes, I like working because it makes me healthy. So I run around, uh, one day, uh, more than thousands works.

✓ Yes, I like walking because it keeps me healthy. So I run around, one day I walked more than a thousand steps.

The student used 'working' and 'works' incorrectly. 'Like' + verb should use gerund, but the correct activity is 'walking' not 'working' (word choice). 'Makes me healthy' is awkward; use 'keeps me healthy'. 'More than thousands works' is ungrammatical: use singular 'a thousand' and a noun like 'steps' or 'meters'. Ensure consistent tense and clear quantifier usage. Suggestions: replace 'working' with 'walking', use 'keeps me healthy', and express quantity as 'more than a thousand steps'.

× No idea on what I was younger. I don't like this because I'm fat before. However I like walking now so lighter than.

✓ I have no idea what I did when I was younger. I didn't like it because I used to be fat. However, I like walking now, so I am lighter.

Multiple tense and expression errors: 'No idea on what I was younger' should be 'I have no idea what I did when I was younger' (present perfect for current lack of knowledge about past behavior). 'I don't like this because I'm fat before' mixes present and past; use 'I didn't like it because I used to be fat' or 'I used to be fat'. 'so lighter than' is incomplete; say 'so I am lighter.' Suggestions: use 'used to' for past states, match past tense forms, and complete comparative expressions.

× Because working is. Useful to be healthy for people, so people like working.

✓ Because walking is useful for people's health, so people like walking.

The original is fragmented and contains awkward word order: 'Because working is. Useful to be healthy for people' is split sentence and incorrect word choice. Combine into one sentence with proper noun phrase: 'walking is useful for people's health.' Avoid starting clauses with 'Because' then following with 'so'—this is redundant. Use consistent vocabulary 'walking.'

× A place I'd like to rock about is my apartment, S Park, because it's very cozy for me and I love this place especially. It's very cool.

✓ A place I'd like to walk around is my apartment complex, S Park, because it's very cozy and I especially love it.

'rock about' is incorrect and likely intended 'walk around' — preposition 'about' can be used but verb 'rock' is wrong. 'Apartment, S Park' is unclear: 'apartment complex, S Park' clarifies. 'cozy for me' better as 'cozy' or 'cozy for me' is acceptable but streamline to 'very cozy'. 'I love this place especially' should be 'I especially love it.' Suggestions: use correct verb 'walk around', correct noun phrase, and place adverb 'especially' before verb/object.

× Applies I. Lightly is Soursu. I go there with my friends and that's so interesting for me.

✓ A place I like lately is Soursu. I go there with my friends and it's very interesting to me.

The original 'Applies I. Lightly is Soursu' is garbled—likely meant 'A place I like lately is Soursu.' 'Lightly' is wrong word choice. Use present simple 'I go there' for habitual actions. 'that's so interesting for me' is better as 'it's very interesting to me.' Suggestions: correct word choice, use proper sentence order, and choose appropriate adjectives ('very' instead of 'so' in this context).