Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting reasons, and avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") appropriately and keep responses to under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk almost every evening. I find it a great way to relieve stress after work and to stay fit, because it helps my circulation and clears my mind. So I usually walk for 30–45 minutes around my neighbourhood.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation words, and give a specific example or detail (where, with whom, or a memory) to make the answer more vivid. Use one linking phrase to connect reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. As a child I often walked around my village with my best friend in the evenings; we would explore the fields and stop by a small shop for snacks, which made those walks really memorable.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a strong topic sentence, then give two clear, specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because" and "also"). Avoid vague phrases like "and so on."

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because they are peaceful and safer than busy streets. Also, parks offer fresh air and pleasant scenery, such as trees and ponds, which makes walking more relaxing.

Sugestão: Be specific about the location (name the city), give a concise reason, and describe what you would do there. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use one or two supporting details to enrich the answer.

Exemplo: I would love to take a long walk in Seoul, South Korea, because I’m fascinated by its mix of modern streets and traditional neighbourhoods. I would wake early to walk along the Han River and explore historic areas like Bukchon to enjoy the morning atmosphere.

Sugestão: Use past tense for a recent activity, give one clear specific detail (which route or landmark), and avoid filler words and repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence and follow with a brief reason.

Exemplo: Lately I walked along the main path in my community park after work. The route passes a small lake and tree-lined streets, so it’s pleasant and helps me relax while getting fresh air.

× I like to walk a lot in the evening as the exercise after work.

✓ I like to walk a lot in the evening as exercise after work.

Using the definite article 'the' before 'exercise' is incorrect here because 'exercise' is used in a general, uncountable sense. Remove 'the' to say 'as exercise' or rephrase 'as a form of exercise'. Suggestion: say 'as exercise after work' or 'as a form of exercise after work.'

× It's really good because I allow my body to move and we should like get to move our bodies sometime after work.

✓ It's really good because it allows my body to move, and we should get to move our bodies sometime after work.

The subject reference is inconsistent: 'I allow my body' sounds odd; use 'it allows' referring to walking, or 'walking allows me'. 'We should like get to' is ungrammatical: 'like' is unnecessary and 'get to' should not be split. Suggestion: 'walking allows me to move' and 'we should get to move our bodies.'

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The phrase 'have a walk' is uncommon in this context; native speakers say 'go for a walk.' Also 'Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?' mixes infinitive purpose with past simple question—use 'go for a walk.' Suggestion: use 'go for a walk.'

× I usually went for walk in the evening as I do right now because I really enjoy, uh, walking, uh, around, uh, the village with my friend at that time to have fun.

✓ I usually went for a walk in the evening as I do now because I really enjoy walking around the village with my friend at that time to have fun.

Missing indefinite article before 'walk'—it should be 'a walk.' Also 'as I do right now' is wordy and can be 'as I do now.' Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: include 'a' before 'walk' and simplify time expressions.

× I guess the reason why people like to walk in the park because in the park is very safe, there's no traffic, so they also can get the fresh air in the park and also get to see the view of the park like scenery and people and so on.

✓ I guess people like to walk in the park because it is very safe, there is no traffic, they can get fresh air, and they can see scenery and people.

The original sentence has a faulty clause structure: 'I guess the reason why people like to walk in the park because' duplicates 'reason' and 'because.' Use 'I guess people like to walk in the park because...' Also avoid repeating 'in the park' and 'get the fresh air'—use 'get fresh air.' List items should use parallel structure ('they can...'). Suggestion: streamline and use parallel verbs.

× If I've got the chance to take a long walk, the place I would like to walk would be the city in South Korea.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, the place I would like to walk is a city in South Korea.

Conditional form is mixed: 'If I've got the chance' (present perfect) conflicts with hypothetical 'would.' For a hypothetical, use past simple 'If I had the chance.' Also 'the city in South Korea' is vague; use 'a city in South Korea' or name the city. Maintain consistent tense: 'would like' pairs with 'If I had...' Suggestion: use proper second conditional: 'If I had the chance, I would like to walk in a city in South Korea.'

× That's That city has always been my dream city, so I would get up really early to go for a long walk along the way on the.

✓ That city has always been my dream city, so I would get up really early to go for a long walk along the streets there.

Redundant 'That's That' and incomplete ending 'on the.' Replace with 'That city' and complete the phrase with 'along the streets there' or 'along the waterfront' as appropriate. Ensure sentence ends with a complete prepositional phrase. Suggestion: remove repetition and finish the thought.

× Uh, lately I go for a walk along the way in my community so I can get to see the view and the environment is also really good for me to get some fresh air after work.

✓ Lately I have been going for walks along the path in my community so I can see the scenery, and the environment is good for me to get some fresh air after work.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been going' (or present perfect) for recent repeated actions. 'Along the way' is vague—use 'along the path.' 'Get to see the view' can be simplified to 'see the scenery.' Maintain parallel structure and tense. Suggestion: use 'I have been going for walks' for recent habitual actions.

× So I love, I really love that.

✓ So I really love that.

Repetition 'I love, I really love' is redundant and awkward; 'really' is an adverb modifying 'love.' Combine into one smooth phrase. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same verb immediately; use one clear emphasis.