Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words smoothly. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., 'helps with digestion', 'warm up on the treadmill') and limit to maximum five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk regularly. I usually take a short walk after breakfast or lunch because it helps with digestion, and I also warm up on the treadmill before lifting weights at the gym, which improves my performance.

Sugestão: Use a clear past-time topic sentence and simplify phrasing. Fix grammar ('when I was a child', 'after dinner', 'to help digestion', 'on alternate days') and avoid redundant phrases. Use one linking word to clarify frequency.

Exemplo: Yes, when I was a child I often joined my parents for a walk after dinner to help with digestion. However, we didn't go every night; usually we walked on alternate days.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitations and reduce repetition. Start with a concise main idea, then add specific reasons using linking words. Use accurate vocabulary ('greener', 'quiet', 'yoga') and smoother connectors ('because', 'also').

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because they are greener and quieter than streets. In addition, parks offer opportunities to socialize or join group activities like yoga, which makes walkers feel refreshed and relaxed.

Sugestão: Use conditional form correctly and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear conditional sentence ('If I had the chance') then explain reasons with linking words. Correct grammar ('go hiking', 'it's challenging', 'offers spectacular views', 'pushes me to work harder').

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would go hiking in the mountains because I enjoy physical challenges and the spectacular views motivate me to keep going.

Sugestão: Provide a clear, complete answer with correct conditionals and fix unclear phrases. Start with a topic sentence like 'It depends on the weather', then give two clear alternatives with correct vocabulary ('on the street', 'indoors', 'treadmill' rather than 'feed me'). Avoid fragmented clauses.

Exemplo: It depends on the weather. If it's warm, I prefer walking on the street nearby; otherwise I either walk around my living room or use the treadmill at the gym.

× On top of that, whenever I go to gym I do a warm up on treadmill.

✓ On top of that, whenever I go to the gym I do a warm-up on the treadmill.

Missing definite articles and hyphenation: 'go to gym' needs 'the gym' (article error, ID 22/17) and 'warm up' as a noun should be 'warm-up'. Also 'on treadmill' needs 'the treadmill' (article error). Use of present simple is correct for routine actions.

× That often helps me a lot to lift heavyweight.

✓ That often helps me a lot to lift heavy weights.

'heavyweight' used as a noun is incorrect here; 'heavy weights' (plural) matches meaning and collocates with 'lift'. Also plural 'weights' corrects count usage (singular/plural issue). Use of present simple is appropriate.

× Yes, when I was in my childhood at that time my parents used to go for the walk after every night dinner so that they can adjust their food and along with them I used to accompany them, not on regular basis but I would say alternative days.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my parents used to go for a walk after dinner every night so that they could digest their food and I used to accompany them, not regularly but on alternate days.

Several issues: 'was in my childhood' is awkward; use 'was a child'. 'go for the walk' should be 'go for a walk' (article). 'every night dinner' -> 'dinner every night' or 'every night after dinner'. 'can adjust their food' should be 'could digest their food' (past tense/modal and correct verb). 'not on regular basis' -> 'not regularly' (adverb form). 'alternative days' -> 'alternate days' (word choice). Past tense should be consistent (used to/could).

× People like to walk in parks because they prefer to umm. They prefer to walk in the area that is more greener or a quiet place.

✓ People like to walk in parks because they prefer to walk in areas that are greener or quieter.

Do not use comparative 'more greener' (redundant); use 'greener'. 'a quiet place' should be plural 'quieter' to match 'areas' and parallel structure. Also avoid filler 'umm'.

× On top of that, many people like to socialize because there are a lot of groups who do yogas or exercise in the park so that they can join them and feel more refreshed and relaxed.

✓ On top of that, many people like to socialize because there are many groups that do yoga or exercise in the park, so they can join and feel more refreshed and relaxed.

'do yogas' is incorrect; use uncountable 'yoga'. 'a lot of groups who' -> 'many groups that' is more natural. 'join them' -> 'join (them)' can be simplified to 'join' or 'join those groups'. Pronoun clarity improved.

× If I have to go for a long walk, I will definitely go for hiking in the mountains because it's a challenging and I love physical challenges and top of that it also offer a spectacular view that motivates me for and it's even push me more harder.

✓ If I were to go for a long walk, I would definitely go hiking in the mountains because it's challenging and I love physical challenges. On top of that, it also offers a spectacular view that motivates me and pushes me harder.

Conditional requires 'If I were to... I would...' for hypothetical. 'go for hiking' -> 'go hiking'. 'it's a challenging' -> 'it's challenging' (adjective without article). 'offer' should be 'offers' (subject-verb agreement). 'motivates me for' -> 'motivates me' and 'it's even push me more harder' -> 'pushes me harder' (avoid double comparative 'more harder').

× Generally depends upon the weather condition.

✓ It generally depends on the weather conditions.

Sentence lacks subject; add 'It'. Use 'depends on' not 'depends upon' (both possible but 'depends on' more natural). 'weather condition' -> plural 'weather conditions' or 'the weather'.

× If the weather is favorable, it's not chilly outside at that time, I prefer to go for a walk on street.

✓ If the weather is favorable and it's not chilly outside, I prefer to go for a walk on the street.

Add conjunction to combine clauses. 'on street' needs 'on the street' (definite article). Comma splice fixed by joining phrases correctly.

× If not, then I prefer to stay home or and do some walking inside the living room or even not that I prefer to go to gym and walk on feed me.

✓ If not, I prefer to stay at home and walk inside the living room, or I prefer to go to the gym and walk on the treadmill.

Original has multiple problems: 'or and' is redundant, 'stay home' -> 'stay at home' more natural, 'walk on feed me' appears to be garbled; likely 'walk on the treadmill'. 'go to gym' -> 'go to the gym' (article). Sentence structure simplified for clarity.