Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct, avoid fillers and repetition, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Mention frequency and benefits specifically, and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot — usually around 10,000 steps a day. I walk every morning and sometimes in the evening, which helps me stay fit and reduces my stress. As a result, I often feel more energetic and relaxed during the day.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence about frequency, then give a concise example from childhood using past tense. Avoid filler words and repeated words.

Exemplo: Yes, I spent a lot of time outdoors as a child. I played with friends on the streets and in local parks after school, so most days were full of games and fresh air.

Sugestão: Start with a clear reason, then add one or two specific benefits (mental or physical). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid vague statements.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because it relaxes the mind and offers a break from busy city life. For example, being among trees and fresh air helps many people think more clearly and lowers stress, while easy paths provide gentle exercise.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer naming a place, then explain why and add one detail about companions or activities. Remove hesitations and be specific about the setting and mood.

Exemplo: I would like to take a long walk along a coastal path by the sea because I enjoy the fresh air and calming waves. I would go with close friends or my partner and listen to soft music while stopping to watch the sunset.

Sugestão: Use past tense and state a clear place and time, then give one or two specific details about the park and whom you went with. Avoid unclear phrases and filler words.

Exemplo: I went for a walk last weekend with my best friend to a new community park near my home. The park has wide paths, playgrounds for children, and plenty of benches, so it was pleasant to walk and chat there.

× I walk like 10,000 steps in a day and it makes me feel like I am really umm activate person umm.

✓ I walk about 10,000 steps in a day and it makes me feel like I am a very active person.

The original sentence uses 'like' informally for approximation and the adjective 'activate' is incorrect; it should be the adjective 'active' and requires the article 'a' before 'very active person'. Use 'about' or 'around' for approximations and place the article before a singular countable noun. Suggestions: replace 'like' with 'about', use 'a very active person', and remove fillers like 'umm'.

× It makes me feel really good and relaxed and good.

✓ It makes me feel really good and relaxed.

The phrase repeats 'good' redundantly. Use one appropriate adjective or combine adjectives without repetition. Suggestion: keep 'really good and relaxed' or 'very relaxed'. Remove duplicate words.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to take a walk when you were a child?

The verb collocation 'have a walk' is nonstandard in this context; native speakers usually say 'take a walk'. The question uses past simple correctly, so replace 'have' with 'take'.

× I think I was always outside because I was already activated person and umm my childhood childhood was full umm with the joy.

✓ I think I was always outside because I was already an active person and my childhood was full of joy.

Use 'an active person' instead of 'activated person'; 'activated' is incorrect form. 'Childhood childhood' is a repetition error. Use the preposition 'full of' not 'full with'. Also include the article 'an' before 'active person'.

× I spent my day some with my friends and we were playing on the streets and.

✓ I spent my days with my friends and we played in the streets.

The phrase 'my day some' is ungrammatical; use 'my days' to indicate habitual action. Use simple past 'played' to match 'spent' and 'in the streets' is more natural than 'on the streets' in this context. Remove trailing conjunction 'and'.

× I think walking in parks help person to think about life, think about how how how successful we are because we have opportunity to spend our day something in nature and work with our feet and.

✓ I think walking in parks helps a person to think about life and how successful we are because we have the opportunity to spend time in nature and exercise our bodies.

Subject-verb agreement: 'walking' (singular activity) requires 'helps' not 'help'. Use 'a person' to refer generally. 'Have opportunity' needs the article 'the' and 'spend time' is the correct collocation. 'Work with our feet' is unnatural; use 'exercise our bodies' or 'use our legs'. Remove repetitions and trailing 'and'.

× Umm I would like listen to music and The Walking in the park, said Umm.

✓ I would like to listen to music and walk in the park, said umm.

After 'would like' use the infinitive 'to listen'. 'The Walking in the park' is unclear; likely intended 'walk in the park'. Keep reporting phrase minimal. Also avoid unnecessary fillers. Use consistent verb forms.

× It would be great idea if I had a chance to umm take a long walk, umm especially with my loved ones, with my friends.

✓ It would be a great idea if I had the chance to take a long walk, especially with my loved ones or my friends.

Missing article: should be 'a great idea'. 'Had a chance' is acceptable but 'the chance' is more natural here; either works. Use 'or' rather than repeating commas between similar groups. Remove filler words.

× Umm also in a low noise of music that they really.

✓ Also, with soft background music that I really like.

Original phrase is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'soft background music' or 'low-volume music' and 'that I really like' clarifies the preference. Place modifiers in natural order.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

The adverb 'lately' pairs better with present perfect to ask about recent experiences. Use present perfect 'have you gone' rather than simple past 'did you go'.

× I work with my greatest friend only I need the economy park and it's new park here and there are a lot of babies on old uh, people and this is really nice park and I would like to go there.

✓ I went for a walk with my best friend to the new Economy Park nearby; there were many babies and older people, and it is a really nice park that I would like to visit again.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('I work' should be past 'I went' for a recent walk), 'greatest friend' is unnatural—use 'best friend', 'only I need' is incorrect—likely 'and', 'economy park' should be 'Economy Park' as a name and 'it's new park' should be 'it's a new park' or 'the new park'. Use 'many babies and older people' instead of 'a lot of babies on old people'. Break into clearer clauses and correct articles and verb tenses.