Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, avoid hesitation words (uh, umm) and redundant phrases. Add one or two specific supporting details with a linking word to show contrast between past and present.

Exemplo: No, I don't walk much now. I used to walk regularly when I worked nearby, but because I'm very busy with work and commuting these days, I rarely have time for long walks.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, reduce repetition and filler words, and provide a specific example or reason using a linking word to support your statement.

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. For example, I used to walk with my friends around school and our neighborhood to play games, which kept me active and happy.

Sugestão: Give a concise main idea and support it with two clear, specific reasons connected by linking words. Avoid grammar mistakes (e.g., subject-verb agreement) and reduce fillers.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and less crowded. In addition, parks have greenery and fresh air, so walkers feel relaxed and refreshed.

Sugestão: Provide a clear answer and give specific reasons or feelings using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and fillers; be natural and focused in 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I would like to take a long walk along the beach. Walking by the sea helps me feel calm and reflective, and I enjoy listening to the waves while thinking quietly.

Sugestão: Answer the question clearly and give a specific recent example. Avoid unrelated or fanciful comments (like walking on the moon) and remove fillers. Use one linking word to add a short supporting detail.

Exemplo: I recently went for a walk at the Stars Mall. I like walking there because it has wide, quiet walkways, and I usually listen to music on my headphones while I walk.

× Hmm, in the past, uh, I was working a lot, but nowadays I'm so busy so umm, I don't walk, uh, but I love walking.

✓ In the past I used to walk a lot, but nowadays I'm so busy that I don't walk much, although I love walking.

The original mixes past continuous 'was working' incorrectly with walking context and lacks correct connectors. Use 'used to' to express a habitual past action and 'don't walk much' to show reduced frequency. Add 'that' for a clear cause clause and 'although' to contrast with 'I love walking'. Use present simple for habitual present.

× Yes, and the best when I was young, I, I love to work with my, uh, friends, uh, around my school, uh, around my home, Uh, uh, I think, uh, walking was really good for me.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I loved to play with my friends around my school and near my home. I think walking was really good for me.

The sentence mixes tenses and has wrong verb choice 'work' for playing. Use past simple 'loved' to match 'when I was young'. Replace 'work' with 'play' or 'walk', and clarify locations with 'around' and 'near'. Keep 'walking was really good for me' in past simple.

× Uh, I think the parks is empty and you can walk easily, uh, not crowd, uh, the, the flowers, the, the everything is uh, satisfied and relaxed in it.

✓ I think the park is quiet and you can walk easily without crowds; the flowers and everything are pleasant and relaxing.

Use singular 'the park' to refer to parks in general, or say 'parks are' for generalization. 'Is empty' is awkward; 'quiet' or 'not crowded' is natural. 'Not crowd' is ungrammatical; use 'without crowds' or 'not crowded'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'flowers and everything are'.

× On the sea, I love walking on the beach, uh, actually, uh, with myself, uh, something uh, umm, God and relaxed. I think I would love uh, to talk on it.

✓ By the sea—I love walking on the beach alone because it helps me relax. I think I would love to meditate or reflect there.

Original misuses pronoun 'with myself' and odd phrase 'talk on it'. Replace with 'alone' and use clear verbs like 'relax', 'meditate', or 'reflect'. 'By the sea' or 'on the beach' are clearer than 'on the sea'.

× Answer the stars mall and this is, I think, the last, uh, place, uh, I walked. Uh, actually, I love walking, uh, on the moon, uh, watching my, uh, my headphones, listening to music and walked as much as I can and walk.

✓ I went to Stars Mall recently; I think it was the last place I walked. Actually, I love walking while listening to music with my headphones and I walk as much as I can.

'Answer the stars mall' is incorrect; use 'I went to Stars Mall recently'. Use past simple 'went' and 'was' for a past event. Maintain consistent tense: if describing a recent past visit, use past for the visit and present simple for habitual activities ('I love walking', 'I walk as much as I can'). Use 'while listening' instead of 'watching my headphones'.