Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Сократите заполнители (uh, umm, like) и используйте более точные глаголы и времена. Начните с чёткой тематической фразы, затем добавьте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с причинами и примером. Следите за согласованием времен (present simple/continuous) и избегайте повторов.

Exemplo: Yes, I have been walking a lot recently because I hadn’t been going outside much. I usually walk while listening to music, which helps me relax and clear my mind. For example, I often walk for 30–45 minutes in the evenings.

Sugestão: Уберите неформальные конструкции («like») и повторения. Дайте короткое обобщающее утверждение, затем добавьте конкретный пример времени/деятельности и одну деталь, используя связку (for example, in the summer, usually).

Exemplo: Yes, I often played outside as a child. For example, during summer I would leave in the morning and return in the evening after playing games and walking around the neighbourhood with friends.

Sugestão: Избегайте слов-паразитов («like», «uh») и повторов («quiet and peaceful place» — можно сказать одним словом). Дайте причину и добавьте краткий пример или эффект (e.g. stress relief), используя связочные слова (because, so, for example).

Exemplo: In my opinion, parks are ideal for walking because they are peaceful and green, which helps people relax. For example, many people go there to reduce stress or exercise without traffic noise.

Sugestão: Упростите и упорядочьте предложение: начните с прямого ответа, затем опишите место и объясните причину. Уберите повторяющиеся фразы и исправьте грамматику (it makes me).

Exemplo: I would choose a quiet green area by a river, with plenty of trees. The natural surroundings would help me feel calm and relaxed during a long walk.

Sugestão: Используйте правильные глаголы (went to work? walked to work?), исправьте формы (sat, not seated) и уберите лишние вставки. Дайте короткую хронологию действий с одной деталью о разговоре или месте.

Exemplo: Today I went out with a friend. We walked around my street, sat on a bench and talked, and later went to a café where we continued our conversation.

× Uh, yes, nowadays I tried to walk a lot because umm, the last days I didn't go outside at all.

✓ Uh, yes, nowadays I try to walk a lot because in the last few days I haven't gone outside at all.

The student used 'tried' (past) with 'nowadays', which creates a tense mismatch; 'nowadays' requires present simple or present perfect. Also 'the last days' is non-native; use 'the last few days' and present perfect 'haven't gone' to indicate a period up to now. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions (I try) or present perfect for recent experiences (I haven't gone).

× So umm, I just go and like listen to music and it makes me uh, feel more, it makes me feel more like uh.

✓ So umm, I just go and listen to music and it makes me feel more relaxed.

Redundant fillers and incorrect fragment 'it makes me uh, feel more, it makes me feel more like uh' should be simplified. 'Go and listen' is correct; use a clear adjective 'relaxed' rather than incomplete phrase. Suggestion: Remove fillers and complete the adjective after 'feel'.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The original is understandable but 'go outside for a walk' is the more natural collocation in English. The question uses past tense correctly ('did' + base verb). Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'for a walk'.

× Yes, when I was a kid I used to go outside very often and for example in summer I went outside in the morning and came back like in the evening and the whole day I was outside and I was playing with my friends and walking.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I used to go outside very often. For example, in summer I would go out in the morning and come back in the evening; I spent the whole day outside playing with my friends and walking.

Sentence run-on and inconsistent tense forms. 'Used to' is fine for past habits; then maintain past narrative with 'would go', 'came back', and 'spent'. Replace repetitive 'I was outside and I was playing' with 'I spent the whole day outside playing'. Suggestion: Break into shorter sentences and keep past tense consistent.

× In my opinion, it's like the most suitable place to walk because it's a quiet and peaceful place and it's just, uh.

✓ In my opinion, it's the most suitable place to walk because it's quiet and peaceful.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'most suitable' is acceptable but phrase 'like' and trailing 'it's just, uh' are filler. Also use 'quiet and peaceful' without extra 'place'. Suggestion: Remove fillers and redundant words for clarity.

× If I had a chance to take a long walk I would definitely choose somewhere with a green space with trees and river around me and I think something somewhere quiet and peaceful because it make it makes me more relaxed.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would definitely choose somewhere with green spaces, trees and a river around me. I think somewhere quiet and peaceful would make me more relaxed.

Use 'the chance' (common collocation). 'Green space' plural 'green spaces' or 'a green space' is better; add article before 'river' ('a river'). Also fix redundant 'make it makes' to 'would make'. Suggestion: Use conditional structure correctly and ensure articles for countable nouns.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

When using 'lately' (a period up to now), present perfect is preferred: 'have you gone' rather than simple past 'did you go'. Suggestion: Use present perfect with 'lately' or 'recently'.

× Today I just went outside to work with my friend.

✓ Today I just went outside to work with my friend.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in context; 'today' with simple past is common in spoken English when specifying a completed action. No change necessary. Suggestion: Keep as is or use present perfect for recent events (I have just been outside) depending on style.

× Uh, we walked around my street and just seated on a bench and talked about everything, umm, apart from this, uh, we went to the cafe and and talked there.

✓ Uh, we walked around my street and just sat on a bench and talked about everything. After that, we went to a cafe and talked there.

'Seated on a bench' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'sat' (past of sit). 'The cafe' vs 'a cafe': use 'a cafe' unless a specific one was mentioned. Remove duplicate 'and' and fillers. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms ('sat') and choose appropriate articles ('a cafe'), and break into shorter sentences.