Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar: start with a direct topic sentence, correct pronunciation and word choice (e.g., 'own a dog', 'in the morning and evening'), remove redundancy, and limit to 2–4 clear sentences. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and avoid filler sounds. Provide a brief specific detail about duration or routine.

Exemplo: Yes. I walk every day because I own a very active dog. I usually take him for a 30–40 minute walk in the morning and again in the evening, so we both get enough exercise and fresh air.

Sugestão: Organize into a clear past-tense response: give a topic sentence about childhood walking, then one or two supporting details with correct verb forms and linking words (for example, 'when I was a child', 'we used to'). Avoid repetition and filler. Be specific about activities and frequency.

Exemplo: When I was a child, I often played outside with my friends. For example, we usually ran around the playground and played baseball during break time, so I spent a lot of time outdoors.

Sugestão: Begin with a general reason, then give personal specifics. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'it gives me a sense of relaxation and peace') and linking words ('because', 'also'). Keep to 2–3 concise sentences and include a specific outcome of walking in parks (socialising, exercise).

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because it is relaxing and peaceful. I enjoy taking my dog there because he can socialise with other dogs and I get regular exercise, which helps me stay healthy.

Sugestão: Use a clear conditional structure and concise vocabulary: state the place first, then give reasons. Correct collocations ('go hiking', 'a healthy, active lifestyle'). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition. Mention a specific location or trail to be more vivid.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would go hiking in the mountains with my dog. I think he would enjoy the trails and the fresh air, and it would help both of us stay fit.

Sugestão: Answer directly with past simple tense and specific details: state when and for how long, avoid hesitation and repetition, and use correct time expressions ('15–20 minutes'). Keep to 2–3 sentences and include the purpose or feeling about the walk.

Exemplo: I walked my dog to the park yesterday for about 15–20 minutes. We both enjoy the short walk because it helps us stay active and it's a nice break from the day.

× I do work a lot in my everyday life seeing I owe a dog.

✓ I do work a lot in my everyday life since I own a dog.

Incorrect word forms: 'seeing' should be 'since' to show reason, and 'owe' (possess verb) is wrong; correct verb is 'own'. Use 'since' for causal connection and 'own' for possession.

× Uh, I often go for a walk in the boat in the morning and evening because he and very active dog and he needs a lot of sex exercise, so I need to spend the quality time with him and make my life more productive.

✓ Uh, I often go for a walk in the park in the morning and evening because he is a very active dog and he needs a lot of exercise, so I need to spend quality time with him and make my life more productive.

Multiple errors: 'boat' likely intended 'park' (vocabulary), 'he and very active dog' has wrong pronoun/verb — use 'he is a very active dog' (verb 'is' required). 'sex exercise' is wrong word; 'exercise' is correct. Remove 'the' before 'quality time' in this context. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× Uh, when I wanna try, I don't usually go out for work, uh, that often, but I used to play along with my friend in school because we do, we did uh, do a lot of outside activity, umm, and baseball during, uh, the break period.

✓ Uh, when I was younger, I didn't usually go out for work that often, but I used to play along with my friends at school because we did a lot of outdoor activities and played baseball during the break periods.

Tense and word choice: 'wanna try' is incorrect for past reference — use 'was younger'. 'don't usually go out for work' should be past 'didn't usually go out for work'. 'friend' plural 'friends' fits. 'outside activity' should be 'outdoor activities'. Ensure consistent past tense (used to / did).

× So when I was child, I didn't work a lot.

✓ So when I was a child, I didn't walk a lot.

'When I was child' requires article 'a child'. Likely intended 'walk' not 'work' given context; correct verb to 'walk'. Maintain past tense 'didn't walk'.

× So personally I really enjoy walking to the park with my dog because I feel it give me the senses of relaxes and peaceful umm, seeing people uh, exercise with their dog and let my dog uh, interact and socialize with the other dog which is help me stay active and healthy.

✓ So personally I really enjoy walking to the park with my dog because I feel it gives me a sense of relaxation and peace, seeing people exercise with their dogs and letting my dog interact and socialize with other dogs, which helps me stay active and healthy.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'it give' should be 'it gives' (third person singular). 'senses of relaxes and peaceful' is incorrect; use 'a sense of relaxation and peace'. 'people exercise with their dog' -> 'their dogs' (plural). Use gerund 'letting' after 'seeing' to express allowing. 'which is help me' -> 'which helps me' for correct subject-verb agreement.

× I would like to go for hiking in the future if I do have lots of free time, uh, with my dog, uh, I, I'm, I'm pretty sure he will love go hiking since he active, uh, dog and it keep us uh, umm, having healthy lifestyle and active.

✓ I would like to go hiking in the future if I have lots of free time with my dog. I'm pretty sure he will love going hiking since he is an active dog and it will help us have a healthy and active lifestyle.

Use 'go hiking' or 'go for a hike'—not 'go for hiking'. 'If I do have' is wordy; 'if I have' is fine. 'will love go hiking' should be 'will love going hiking' (gerund after 'love' when followed by activity). 'he active' needs 'he is an active dog'. 'it keep us having' should be 'it will help us have' to fix tense and verb form.

× I really, I recently did walk my dog to the park, umm, for 1520 minute to the park and then come back home.

✓ I recently walked my dog to the park for about 15–20 minutes and then came back home.

Incorrect auxiliary and tense: 'did walk' is unnecessary; simple past 'walked' is correct. Use 'for about 15–20 minutes' for time expression. Maintain past tense 'came back' rather than 'come back'.

× Uh, we really enjoy walking to the park and back 'cause it's half a stay in a healthy and active lifestyle. We both love exercise.

✓ We really enjoy walking to the park and back because it helps us stay healthy and active. We both love exercising.

Phrase 'it's half a stay in a healthy and active lifestyle' is incorrect and unclear; use 'it helps us stay healthy and active'. 'We both love exercise' is acceptable but 'love exercising' fits better stylistically. Ensure correct verb forms and clearer phrasing.