Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và phát âm: sửa lỗi thì và cấu trúc (ví dụ: 'I walk every day from my home to my school'), tránh từ thừa và lặp lại. Nên nói rõ số lần hoặc khoảng cách để cụ thể hơn. Dùng tối đa 3–4 câu tự nhiên và mạch lạc.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk to school every day because I live nearby. It usually takes about 20 minutes, and I enjoy the fresh air, although sometimes I feel tired after a long day.

Sugestão: Giảm các tiếng ngập ngừng và sắp xếp câu rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lý do với chi tiết cụ thể và tránh lặp. Chú ý ngữ pháp quá khứ (e.g., 'I walked a lot when I was a child') và dùng liên từ để liên kết ý.

Exemplo: Yes, I walked a lot as a child. In my country, parents often encouraged kids to play and walk outside for exercise, so I spent many afternoons walking with friends and family.

Sugestão: Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc mạch lạc: tránh lỗi từ (Park, not Parker), dùng linking words như 'because', 'for example' để mở rộng ý. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể hoặc lợi ích để chi tiết hơn.

Exemplo: I think people like walking in parks because they can relax and enjoy nature. For example, parks offer green spaces, fresh air and pleasant views, which help reduce stress.

Sugestão: Cần giữ thì nhất quán và trả lời trực tiếp theo giả định 'if you had the chance': bắt đầu bằng câu rõ ràng nêu nơi bạn muốn đi, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể. Tránh nhầm lẫn 'work' vs 'walk' và chỉnh sửa cấu trúc câu rối.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk down the charming street near my childhood home. It was a beautiful tree-lined street with small shops and cafes, and I would love to revisit it to relive those memories.

Sugestão: Sửa thì và độ rõ ràng: dùng thì quá khứ đơn khi trả lời 'lately' (I walked) hoặc present perfect (I've walked). Tránh lặp và hoàn thành câu; thêm chi tiết thời gian hoặc lí do để cụ thể hơn.

Exemplo: Lately I've been walking from school to home every day, because I don't have time to go out for other activities. The walk takes about 20 minutes and helps me unwind after classes.

× Yes, I work every day from my home to my school and I still enjoy that, although sometimes it's make me feel tired.

✓ Yes, I walk every day from my home to my school and I still enjoy that, although sometimes it makes me feel tired.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk' which changes meaning; also 'it's make' is ungrammatical. The verb must agree with third person singular: 'it makes'. Suggestion: use the correct verb 'walk' for the activity and ensure subject-verb agreement by using 'makes' for 'it'.

× Yes umm in my country, not just my family, umm, most of parents spend time to teach their children walking and it and that's why and me too and that's why I walk a lot when I was a child.

✓ Yes, umm, in my country, not just my family, most parents spent time teaching their children to walk, and that's why I walked a lot when I was a child.

Errors: tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms. 'Most of parents' should be 'most parents'. Use past tense 'spent' and gerund/infinitive forms: 'teaching ... to walk'. The clause 'I walk a lot when I was a child' needs past tense 'I walked'. Suggestion: simplify and keep past tense for childhood actions and use correct noun phrase 'most parents'.

× I think because, uh, working in Parker, people feel relaxed and they can see beautiful sceneries and umm, umm, feel the fresh air in the park.

✓ I think that because they work in parks, people feel relaxed and can see beautiful scenery and enjoy the fresh air in the park.

Problems: preposition and noun form errors. 'Working in Parker' should be 'work in parks' (place and plural). 'Beautiful sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. Use 'enjoy the fresh air' rather than 'feel the fresh air'. Suggestion: use 'work in parks', 'scenery', and 'enjoy' for natural expressions.

× Umm when I was a child I used to work in a street near my house. It is a real It was a beautiful St. that had I have ever seen and I really like that now Umm now my family moved to other place so I really want to go back and have a long walk.

✓ When I was a child I used to walk on a street near my house. It was the most beautiful street I had ever seen and I really liked it. Now my family has moved to another place, so I really want to go back and take a long walk.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'used to work' should be 'used to walk' for walking. 'It is a real It was a beautiful St.' is jumbled; use 'It was the most beautiful street I had ever seen'. For recent change, use present perfect 'has moved'. Use 'another place' not 'other place'. Use 'take a long walk' as idiomatic. Suggestion: keep past tenses for childhood memories and use present perfect for recent moves.

× Lately I I walk from my school to my home. Actually I do it every day and lately I do not go somewhere to play, so I just go from school to home and home to.

✓ Lately I walk from my school to my home. Actually I do it every day, and lately I do not go anywhere to play, so I just go from school to home and back.

Minor issues: double 'I', awkward phrase 'go somewhere to play' should be 'go anywhere to play'. 'Home to' is incomplete; use 'back' to indicate returning home. Suggestion: remove repetition, use 'anywhere' for negatives, and finish the sentence with 'and back'.