Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “it takes 15–20 minutes” not “it took”).

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to university because buses are expensive, and the journey takes about 15 to 20 minutes. Although the walk can be tiring sometimes, I prefer it because it saves money.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence and provide specific details. Reduce filler words and use linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”). Use correct collocations (say “rural” or “the countryside”).

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked when I was a child. My hometown was quite rural, so I usually walked to the supermarket and to school because there was little public transport.

Sugestão: Good content and clear reasons; reduce hesitation and combine ideas using linking words. Use slightly richer vocabulary (e.g., “peaceful”, “green space”).

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and pleasant. For example, parks provide green space where people can relax and escape city noise and stress.

Sugestão: Be specific and grammatically accurate. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give concrete reasons and a brief example. Correct errors (say “northern Italy” not “the northern Italy”; “I’ve heard it’s beautiful”).

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in northern Italy. I’ve heard the region is very beautiful, with snowy mountains and scenic trails, which would make for a memorable long walk.

Sugestão: Use clear past-tense statements and avoid repetition. Provide one or two concise specific details (how often, how you felt). Correct grammar and awkward phrasing (e.g., “it takes 15–20 minutes to walk there” and “it is hard for me”).

Exemplo: I walked to the university yesterday; it takes about 15 to 20 minutes on foot. I find the walk tiring when I have a busy day, but it helps me save money on transport.

× Usually when I go to the university, I have to walk uh, instead of using bus because it's very expensive.

✓ Usually when I go to university, I have to walk instead of taking the bus because it's very expensive.

Use of article: In English, 'go to university' (no article) is common when referring to attending university in general. Also 'taking the bus' is the correct collocation for using public transport; 'using bus' is ungrammatical because 'bus' needs an article or determiner and the verb 'take' is commonly used with bus. Suggestion: say 'go to university' and 'take the bus'.

× It took 15 to 20 minutes, so it was, it's a little bit hard for me.

✓ It takes 15 to 20 minutes, so it's a little bit hard for me.

Present-tense consistency: The speaker is describing a habitual present situation (the regular walk to university), so present simple 'takes' and 'it's' should be used rather than past 'took'. Also remove the redundant 'was'. Suggestion: maintain present simple for routines: 'It takes 15 to 20 minutes, so it's a little bit hard for me.'

× my hometown was, uh, very countryside, so I had to walk to go to the supermarket or schools instead of using public transportation.

✓ my hometown was very rural, so I had to walk to the supermarket or to school instead of using public transportation.

Word choice and countables: 'countryside' is a noun, not an adjective; the correct adjective is 'rural'. 'Supermarket' is singular when speaking generally; 'schools' should be 'school' when referring to the concept or each trip. Also add 'to' before 'school' for parallel structure. Suggestion: use appropriate adjective ('rural') and match singular/plural as intended.

× I think people like to walk in parks because, uh, it's uh, very comfortable and pleasant and, uh, relaxing.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because they are very comfortable, pleasant, and relaxing.

Pronoun reference and agreement: The original mixes 'people' (plural) with 'it's' (singular). Use 'they are' to agree with plural 'people' or rephrase to refer to 'parks' specifically. Suggestion: ensure subject and pronoun number agree: 'people... they are' or 'parks are'.

× They can escape from the noises and the stresses of the city by walking in the parks.

✓ They can escape the noise and stress of the city by walking in the park.

Countable/uncountable and article usage: 'noise' and 'stress' are usually uncountable in this context (not 'noises'/'stresses'). Also 'in the park' works better when speaking generally about parks; choose singular or plural consistently. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns for general concepts and keep number consistent: 'escape the noise and stress... by walking in the park.'

× Well, if I had a chance I would like to walk in the northern Italy because they are very beautiful since I heard it and there are many beautiful mountains with the snow in the winter, so I'd like to go there by walking.

✓ Well, if I had a chance, I would like to walk in northern Italy because it is very beautiful from what I have heard, and there are many beautiful mountains with snow in the winter, so I'd like to go there and walk.

Article and pronoun errors: 'the northern Italy' is incorrect; use 'northern Italy' without 'the'. Pronoun agreement: 'they are very beautiful' incorrectly refers to a region — use 'it is very beautiful'. 'Since I heard it' is unidiomatic; use 'from what I have heard'. 'Mountains with the snow' should be 'mountains with snow'. Also 'go there by walking' is awkward; say 'go there and walk'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'the', fix pronoun agreement, and use idiomatic expressions.

× Uh, I walked to the university yesterday. As I said, it took, uh, 15 to 20 minutes by walking and, uh, it every day is a very hard for me to work there.

✓ I walked to the university yesterday. As I said, it took 15 to 20 minutes to walk, and every day it is very hard for me to work there.

Word order and tense/structure: 'it took 15 to 20 minutes by walking' is awkward; use 'it took 15 to 20 minutes to walk'. The clause 'it every day is a very hard for me to work there' has incorrect word order and an extra article 'a'; correct order is 'every day it is very hard for me to work there.' Maintain past tense for the specific yesterday action ('I walked') and present simple to describe the regular difficulty if that is intended; here combining past event with general statement is acceptable if phrased correctly. Suggestion: fix infinitive phrase and word order, remove extra article.