Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答要更直接并修正语法错误，同时保持简洁并使用连接词使表达更流畅。可以先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持，避免重复表述。例如注意时态和代词使用（“When I’m at school” 等）。

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. For example, during holidays I usually go for walks with my family to relax and spend quality time together. Also, when I’m at school I often walk around the playground to clear my mind between classes.

Sugestão: 回答应更自然并给出更具体的细节，避免表达上的不自然或用词错误（如“could not bear with the loneliness”可以改为“I didn’t like being alone”）。使用一到两句补充具体活动或回忆以丰富内容。

Exemplo: Yes, I often went out with my friends when I was a child because I didn’t like being alone. We would play tag, ride bikes and explore nearby parks almost every afternoon.

Sugestão: 回答清晰但可以更有条理，使用连接词并提供具体理由和例子来支持观点。可以提到身体和心理上的好处以扩展内容。

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because of the fresh air and natural scenery, such as trees and birds. In addition, walking there reduces stress and is good exercise, so many people go to parks to relax and improve their mood.

Sugestão: 回答时要避免重复（如“parks always full of parks”）并更具体地描述想去的公园类型或活动。先给出简短直接的答案，然后用一两句说明喜欢的理由和计划活动。

Exemplo: I would definitely choose a large city park or botanical garden because of the fresh air and abundant greenery. I would take a long walk, sit and read under a tree, and maybe have a picnic with family.

Sugestão: 回答需要更流畅並避免重复短语（例如“Near my neighborhood”重复）。可以加入具体细节如公园名字的含义、景色或你做了什么來丰富答案。

Exemplo: I recently went for a walk with my family in a small park near my neighborhood called UMM Park. Although it’s not large, it has a pleasant walking path and benches, so we went there to exercise and enjoy a peaceful afternoon.

× When I go back home during holidays, I always go out with my family together.

✓ When I go back home during the holidays, I always go out with my family.

句中“during holidays”缺少定冠词，习惯用法为“during the holidays”。此外“go out with my family together”中“together”与“with my family”重复冗余，删除“together”更自然。建议：记住固定搭配“during the holidays/holidays”需加定冠词或改为“on holidays”。

× When I in school I always go hang out on the playground to relax and forget the worries.

✓ When I am in school, I always hang out on the playground to relax and forget my worries.

原句缺少系动词“am”，并且动词搭配错误，“go hang out”不自然，应使用单一动词“hang out”。“forget the worries”也不够具体，改为“forget my worries”。建议：完整从句要有主语+系动词，注意动词短语的正确搭配。

× Yes, I often went out with my friends together to play games when I was a child because I could not bear with the loneliness.

✓ Yes, I often went out with my friends to play games when I was a child because I could not bear the loneliness.

“went out with my friends together”中“together”多余，移除更自然。短语“bear with”与“忍受某人/某事”含义不同，此处应使用“bear the loneliness”或“bear loneliness”，不能加“with”。建议：辨别“bear”和“bear with”的区别，避免重复副词。

× Because parks are full of beautiful plants and cute animals, so the air is very fresh in this environment.

✓ Because parks are full of beautiful plants and cute animals, the air in such environments is very fresh.

句首使用“Because... , so ...”出现重复连词，应去掉其中一个。原句“in this environment”指代不明确，改为“in such environments”更准确。建议：避免同时使用Because和so；保持代词指代清晰。

× Definitely in parks because I think the air there is very fresh and parks always full of parks are always full of wildlife and greenery like beautiful trees, flowers and plants.

✓ Definitely in parks, because I think the air there is very fresh and parks are always full of wildlife and greenery like beautiful trees, flowers and plants.

原句有重复“parks always full of parks are always”显然有词序和重复错误，应删除多余部分并加入系动词“are”。建议：检查句子是否有重复词语，并确保每个名词短语有适当的动词。

× I went for a walk with my family in a park near my neighborhood. Near my neighborhood.

✓ I went for a walk with my family in a park near my neighborhood.

句子重复“Near my neighborhood.”导致冗余。只保留一次完整句子即可。建议：写作时检查是否无意复制了短语或句子。

× It was a UMM park which is not very big but enough for me.

✓ It was a UMM park, which was not very big but was enough for me.

叙述过去的经历，定从句中动词也应使用过去时，将“is”改为“was”。此外在“but enough for me”之前加“was”更完整。建议：注意主句和定语从句的时态一致。

× It's a good place to make people relax and feel peaceful.

✓ It's a good place to help people relax and feel peaceful.

短语“make people relax”在此语境不够自然，通常用“help people relax”更合适。原句时态可保留为一般现在时。建议：学习固定搭配，使用更自然的动词搭配。