Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two concise reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation and irrelevant words. Improve grammar (use 'I don't walk much' and 'I have a desk job').

Exemplo: No, I don't walk much. I have a full-time desk job in the government, so I spend most of the day sitting. As a result, I rarely have time or opportunity to walk during working hours.

Sugestão: Answer clearly and use past tense consistently. Give one specific detail about where or with whom you walked and a reason for change, using linking words like 'but' or 'however'. Reduce hesitations and incorrect phrases ('lost the scope' -> 'lost the chance').

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often walked to the nearby fields and played with friends. However, as I grew older I became busier with studies and work, so I had fewer opportunities to walk.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons and an example. Use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g. 'people generally like', 'space' not 'scope'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Exemplo: People generally like to walk in parks because parks provide green space and fresh air, which is relaxing. For example, many city parks have paved paths and benches, so people feel safer and more comfortable walking there.

Sugestão: Be specific and relevant to the question: say where you would go and why, using conditional phrasing correctly ('If I had the chance, I would...'). Avoid vague words like 'scope' and reduce hesitation. Provide one or two supporting details about the place and purpose of the walk.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the coast because I enjoy the sea breeze and open views. Walking there would help me relax and clear my mind after a busy period at work.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and add a specific recent example to make the answer more precise. Start with a clear topic sentence and add one detail (when or what you saw) using linking words like 'recently' or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Recently I walked in the small park near my home. For example, last Sunday I walked around the pond there and noticed new flower beds that had been planted.

× No, I don't worry. Work a lot in regular, uh, you know, I am a government job holder and it's a desk job, so I have to pay a lot of attention in my job.

✓ No, I don't walk a lot. I work a lot regularly, you know. I hold a government job and it's a desk job, so I have to pay a lot of attention to my work.

The original contains several sentence structure problems: incorrect verb use ('worry' instead of 'walk'), missing subjects in clauses ('Work a lot' should be 'I work a lot'), awkward word order ('in regular' should be 'regularly'), and incorrect preposition ('in my job' should be 'to my work'). Suggestions: use the correct verb 'walk', include the subject 'I' for each clause, use the adverb 'regularly' for frequency, and use the preposition 'to' with 'pay attention' and 'work' as the noun meaning job.

× Yes, I did. When I was child. I uh, used to uh, go outside to work, uh, in often uh, but uh, as I am growing up, with time, I lost the scope uh, to uh, go out for walking.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I used to go outside often, but as I grew up, over time I lost the opportunity to go out for walks.

Errors: missing article ('a child'), fragmented sentence ('When I was child.'), incorrect adverb placement ('in often' should be 'often'), incorrect tense consistency ('as I am growing up' should be past tense 'as I grew up'), and awkward noun choice ('scope' is incorrect; use 'opportunity'). Suggestions: include articles, keep past tense for past habits, place adverbs next to verbs, and use appropriate nouns like 'opportunity' or 'chance' and pluralize 'walks' for habitual action.

× People generally likes to walk in parks because in the busy cities we have to know such a scope to walk in the road.

✓ People generally like to walk in parks because in busy cities we need places where we can walk safely off the road.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('People generally likes' should be 'People generally like'), incorrect word choice ('know such a scope' is ungrammatical), and incorrect preposition/phrase ('walk in the road' should be 'off the road' or 'on the road' depending on meaning; here 'off the road' and 'places' convey safety). Suggestions: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, choose natural collocations like 'places' or 'areas' and 'walk safely', and use correct prepositions.

× Yeah, definitely I will. I will take the scope in so glad if I, uh, get a chance to, uh, work, uh, so long.

✓ Yeah, definitely I will. I would be so glad if I got a chance to take a long walk.

Errors: incorrect modal and conditional mix ('I will' with 'if I get' is awkward for hypothetical; better 'I would be so glad if I got'), incorrect noun 'scope' instead of 'walk' or 'opportunity', and wrong word order ('take the scope in so glad' is ungrammatical). Suggestions: use conditional form 'would be' for hypothetical willingness, use 'take a long walk' for natural phrasing, and keep clause order clear.

× Generally I go for a walk in a park nearby of my residence.

✓ Generally I go for a walk in a park near my residence.

Errors: awkward preposition usage ('nearby of' is incorrect; use 'near' or 'nearby'), and article omissions can be acceptable but 'a park near my residence' is natural. Suggestions: use 'near' with a location or 'nearby' as an adverb (e.g., 'a nearby park'), and keep the noun phrase concise.