Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. 'to attend lessons'), avoid repetition, and limit to up to 4–5 sentences. Add one specific detail about distance or frequency and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk daily between my dormitory and the teaching building to attend lessons, which takes about 15 minutes each way. Also, I usually go hiking on weekends for exercise, so I feel relaxed and refreshed after those longer walks.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details and fix small errors (remove duplicate words, use 'nature' without article when general). Use a linking word like 'because' appropriately and mention a specific memory to be more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My parents often took me to the local nature park for short hikes because they wanted me to enjoy the fresh air and learn about plants and animals. For example, I remember feeding ducks at a small pond near the park entrance.

Sugestão: Correct collocations and grammar (use 'walk' not 'work'), avoid repetition, and structure answer with topic sentence plus two specific reasons linked with transition words like 'first' and 'also'. Use more precise vocabulary ('relaxing', 'reduce stress').

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because the atmosphere is relaxing and the air is usually cleaner than in the city. First, parks offer quiet scenery and greenery that help people unwind; also, walking there is a low‑intensity exercise that reduces stress and improves mood.

Sugestão: Use correct conditionals ('If I had the chance') and improve clarity. Name the place clearly and give specific reasons without vague phrases like 'trace molecules'. Mention what you expect to see and how it would affect you, using linking words ('because', 'for example').

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would hike Dengue Mountain in Jiaoqing, Guangdong Province because it is famous for diverse wildlife and forest trails. For example, I would enjoy birdwatching and the quiet forest atmosphere, which I expect would help me relax and forget daily worries.

Sugestão: Fix verb choice ('walked' not 'worked') and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add one or two specific sensory details (what you saw or did) and a linking word like 'because' to explain why you liked it.

Exemplo: I recently walked in 7 Star Park, which is lovely for wandering. The atmosphere was very tranquil and I enjoyed the breathtaking limestone scenery and clear streams, so it felt very relaxing.

× Yes I do. I work a lot. I work daily between my dormitory and the teaching building for attend lessons and I usually go hiking on weekends for exercise which make me feel very relaxed and comfortable.

✓ Yes, I do. I work a lot. I walk daily between my dormitory and the teaching building to attend lessons, and I usually go hiking on weekends for exercise, which makes me feel very relaxed and comfortable.

Errors: incorrect verb choice and verb form after 'for' and subject-verb agreement in relative clause. 'for attend lessons' is incorrect; use 'to attend lessons' (infinitive after purpose). 'which make me' should be 'which makes me' because the relative clause refers to 'exercise' (singular). Also add commas for clarity and use 'walk' rather than 'work' to match meaning. Suggestion: Use correct infinitive for purpose and ensure verb agrees with its subject. Put commas to separate clauses.

× Yes, I still remember that when I was a child my my parents often took me to the local nature park for walks or short hikes because they wanted me to enjoy the fresh air and experience the nature.

✓ Yes, I still remember that when I was a child my parents often took me to the local nature park for walks or short hikes because they wanted me to enjoy the fresh air and experience nature.

Errors: repeated word 'my my' (typo) and incorrect article 'the' before 'nature'. 'Experience the nature' is unnatural; use 'experience nature' or 'experience the natural surroundings'. Suggestion: Remove duplicate word and avoid unnecessary definite article before uncountable noun 'nature'.

× Well, I suppose that people like work in parks because the environment there is very tranquil and the the air there was fresher than in the city. Also, work in the working in the park can make them relieve the stress from daily life.

✓ Well, I suppose that people like to walk in parks because the environment there is very tranquil and the air there is fresher than in the city. Also, walking in the park can help them relieve stress from daily life.

Errors: missing 'to' before verb ('like work' should be 'like to walk' or 'like walking'); repeated 'the the'; incorrect tense 'was' vs present 'is' when making general statements; awkward phrasing 'work in the working in the park' and incorrect verb 'work' instead of 'walk' or 'walking'. Use 'help them relieve stress' rather than 'make them relieve the stress'. Suggestion: Use 'like to + verb' or gerund, keep present tense for general truths, and use 'walking' as a gerund subject.

× If I have the chance, I may choose to go to the Dengue Mountain which is located in Jiaoqing, Guangdong Province to have a long hike because I think there have many wildlife which can relieve my stress and the trace molecules there is really.

✓ If I had the chance, I would choose to go to Dengue Mountain, which is located in Jiaoqing, Guangdong Province, to take a long hike because I think there is a lot of wildlife there that can relieve my stress.

Errors: conditional structure mismatch ('If I have the chance' with 'may' is less appropriate; use second conditional 'If I had... I would...'). 'There have many wildlife' is incorrect: use 'there is a lot of wildlife' or 'there are many wild animals'. 'Which can relieve my stress' should be 'that can relieve my stress'. The phrase 'the trace molecules there is really' is unclear and ungrammatical; it was omitted in the correction. Suggestion: Use correct conditional forms, use 'there is/are' appropriately with uncountable/ plural nouns, and use 'that' for essential relative clauses. Remove unclear fragments.

× I recently worked in the nature surf course 7 Star Park. It is lovely to wander there because the environment there was very relaxing and very trapped in. The atmosphere is very tranquil and you also have breathtaking scenery.

✓ I recently walked in the Nature Surf Course at 7 Star Park. It is lovely to wander there because the environment is very relaxing and peaceful. The atmosphere is very tranquil, and there is also breathtaking scenery.

Errors: 'worked' is incorrect verb; use 'walked' or 'was' for visiting a park. 'the environment there was' should be present 'is' when describing a place generally. 'very trapped in' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'peaceful' or 'enclosed' — use 'peaceful'. 'you also have breathtaking scenery' is acceptable but better as 'there is also breathtaking scenery'. Suggestion: Use verbs that match the action (walk/visit), maintain present tense when describing general characteristics, and replace unclear phrases with appropriate adjectives.