Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give 1–2 brief supporting details with correct grammar. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' if adding contrast, and give specific numbers naturally.

Exemplo: No, I don't walk a lot. I usually use an electric bike to travel to school, so I only walk when I move between floors at home or school. My phone shows I walk about two to three thousand steps a day.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Connect ideas with 'so' or 'and' and include a brief reason or memory to be more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I often went outside as a child. I spent a lot of time at the playground with my friends, where we would walk, run and play games after school, which kept me active and happy.

Sugestão: Give a concise topic sentence, then two clear specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Use appropriate nouns (atmosphere, scenery) and avoid filler words. Keep sentences natural and grammatical.

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because the air is fresh and the scenery is pleasant. Also, parks are peaceful places where you can see trees and flowers, relax and reduce stress.

Sugestão: Answer directly naming a place, then give one clear reason. Use correct verb forms and avoid confusing phrasing. For hypothetical questions use 'would' and clear structure: 'I would like to... because...'. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

Exemplo: I would like to take a long walk abroad, for example along a coastal path in Spain, because when I travel I enjoy exploring new places on foot and it helps me discover sights I would miss otherwise.

Sugestão: Use the past simple or present perfect consistently and be specific about time. Start with a direct answer, then add one specific detail about what you do while walking. Avoid repeating words and correct verb choice (walk, not work).

Exemplo: Lately I've been walking in my schoolyard. I usually walk there between classes to clear my mind and think about my homework and study plans.

× Are you electrical bike to travel to school everyday?

✓ Do you use an electric bike to travel to school every day?

The original sentence uses incorrect modal/auxiliary structure and wrong word form 'electrical bike'. Use 'Do you use' to ask about habitual action and 'electric bike' as the correct noun phrase. Also 'every day' should be two words. Suggestion: Use 'Do you use' + object for habits; use 'electric' not 'electrical' for this noun.

× So almost time I work it just when I work upstairs or downstairs on my school or my home.

✓ So most of the time I use it only when I travel between floors at school or at home.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses 'work' incorrectly instead of verbs like 'use' or 'travel'. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'I use it' and clearer phrases 'most of the time' and 'travel between floors' or 'go upstairs or downstairs'. Suggestion: Keep present simple for habitual patterns and use appropriate verbs ('use', 'travel').

× So, uh, additionally, uh, my phone count that I work up just about two or three thousand step a days is 2.

✓ Additionally, my phone shows that I walk about two or three thousand steps a day.

The original has incorrect quantifier forms ('step a days'), awkward passive phrasing, and number '2' misplaced. Use 'shows' for the phone's record and 'steps a day' as the correct quantifier phrase. Suggestion: Use 'about' + number + 'steps a day' and present simple for device readings.

× Umm yes, since I when I was a kid I usually hang out at the playground to play with all my friends so I just often go outside, just walk or even just run to play with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I often hung out at the playground and walked or ran to play with my friends.

The sentence incorrectly mixes 'since' and 'when' and uses present tense 'hang out' with the past time reference. Use past simple 'hung out', 'walked', 'ran' to match 'when I was a kid'. Suggestion: Use simple past for past habitual actions and avoid redundant words ('just', repeated 'just').

× Umm, I suppose that park is just a perfect place to work, umm, because it has a fresh atmosphere and umm, it has the work side so you can just walk and uh, saw the trees of flowers and everything around you.

✓ I suppose that a park is a perfect place to relax because it has fresh air and green areas where you can walk and see the trees and flowers around you.

Multiple issues: 'work' is the wrong word (should be 'walk' or 'relax'), 'fresh atmosphere' is awkward—use 'fresh air', 'saw' is past tense instead of 'see'. Also article use: 'a park' is more general. Use present simple for general statements. Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary ('relax', 'fresh air', 'green areas') and present simple 'see'.

× So it's kind of chilled and bring a sense of relaxation.

✓ So it's kind of calming and brings a sense of relaxation.

Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'it' requires singular verb 'brings', not 'bring'. 'Chilled' is not the correct adjective for describing feeling; use 'calming'. Suggestion: Use adjectives that describe the effect (calming) and ensure verb agrees with subject.

× Oh I absolutely want to choose to have take a long work on the overseas just because when I go travel to another country I usually just have to work for a lot of step a days till my leg is just hurt so I.

✓ Oh, I would absolutely choose to take a long walk overseas because when I travel to another country I usually walk a lot of steps every day until my legs hurt.

Many preposition and verb form errors: use 'take a long walk overseas', not 'have take a long work on the overseas'. Use 'when I travel' (not 'go travel'), 'walk a lot of steps every day' and 'legs hurt' plural. Use conditional 'would choose' for a hypothetical. Suggestion: Use 'would' for hypothetical choices, 'take a walk', 'overseas', and correct plural 'legs'.

× Lately I've frequently worked at my schoolyard.

✓ Lately I've frequently walked in my schoolyard.

The verb 'worked' is incorrect; context requires 'walked'. Use present perfect 'I've walked' for recent repeated actions, and preposition 'in' for 'in the schoolyard'. Suggestion: Use correct verb 'walk' and 'in the schoolyard'.

× I just walk around my schoolyard and think about what I had to study and if I have a homework or not.

✓ I just walk around my schoolyard and think about what I have to study and whether I have any homework or not.

Tense inconsistency: 'had to study' (past) should be 'have to study' (present) because thinking about current obligations uses present tense. Use 'whether' for alternatives and 'any homework' instead of 'a homework'. Suggestion: Keep present tense for current thoughts and use 'any' with uncountable nouns like 'homework'.