Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần rút gọn và rõ ràng câu trả lời (tối đa 4-5 câu), sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'work' sai chỗ nên là 'walk' hoặc 'go for a walk'). Tránh tiếng ồn 'uh' và lặp từ; thêm liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc (e.g. 'However', 'so'). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, rồi bổ sung thời gian và thói quen cụ thể.

Exemplo: Not really. I spend most weekdays at school, so I usually don't have time to go for walks. However, on weekends I often wake up early and go for a walk or exercise with my parents, which helps me relax and stay active.

Sugestão: Cần dùng thì quá khứ và động từ đúng (wanted, walk, follow). Loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng và sửa cấu trúc câu để mạch lạc. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rồi nêu lý do và cảm xúc cụ thể.

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child my grandmother liked to go for walks because she thought it was good for her health. I often followed her to the park and I enjoyed those walks because we spent time together and I felt happy.

Sugestão: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (parks are, trees, fresh air) và cải thiện mạch lạc bằng các liên từ. Trả lời nên ngắn gọn, đưa ra 2–3 lý do cụ thể kèm ví dụ hoặc kết quả. Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g. 'pleasant environment', 'socialise').

Exemplo: Parks are a popular place to walk because they offer fresh air and a pleasant environment. Also, many people exercise there, so it's easy to meet others and find someone to walk with, which makes the activity more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Cần dùng cấu trúc điều kiện đúng (would like / would want) và sửa từ vựng sai (beach, coastline, feel the sea). Tránh câu dài rối; nên có câu chủ đề + chi tiết cụ thể về lý do và cảm xúc. Hạn chế lỗi phát âm viết thành chữ (C5).

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk on the beach along the coastline. I could watch the sunrise with my partner, feel the sea breeze, and relax, which would be a perfect break for me.

Sugestão: Trả lời dùng thì quá khứ nếu nói về việc gần đây (e.g. 'lately I went'), hoặc hiện tại hoàn thành ('I have been walking'). Sửa lỗi từ vựng (playground, time, go for a walk) và cấu trúc (sitting in class made me tired). Nên rõ ràng: nêu nơi, tần suất, lý do ngắn gọn.

Exemplo: Lately I have been taking walks on my school's playground. I usually go there during breaks to get some fresh air and change the atmosphere because sitting in class makes me feel tired.

× Not really, I have to go to school all day so I don't have too much time to work to go for work so.

✓ Not really; I have to go to school all day so I don't have much time to go for a walk.

The original sentence has repetition and wrong word choices ('work' instead of 'walk') and awkward structure. Use 'much' with uncountable 'time' and 'go for a walk' is the correct phrase. Also remove redundant phrases and connect clauses clearly.

× But in the weekend when I have the time, I often get up early and uh do exercise with my parents, so I work a lot in on the weekend.

✓ On weekends, when I have the time, I often get up early and do exercise with my parents, so I exercise a lot on the weekend.

Use 'on weekends' for habitual actions and 'do exercise' or 'exercise' (not 'work'). Remove filler 'uh' and correct preposition placement ('on the weekend'). Present simple is appropriate for routines.

× Yes, of course when I was a child, my grandma always want to wanted to work umm because it's good for her health.

✓ Yes, of course when I was a child, my grandma always wanted to walk because it was good for her health.

Use past tense 'wanted' to match 'when I was a child'. The verb should be 'walk' not 'work'. Also maintain past reference with 'it was good for her health.'

× So I always want to follow her to do to work together and I think is so happy.

✓ So I always wanted to follow her to walk together and I felt very happy.

Match past context: use 'wanted' and 'walk together'. 'I think is so happy' is ungrammatical and inconsistent in tense; use 'I felt very happy.'

× I think parks is the perfect place to do exercise.

✓ I think parks are the perfect places to exercise.

Subject-verb agreement: 'parks' is plural so use 'are' and plural 'places'. 'Exercise' is the noun/verb; 'to exercise' or 'to do exercise' both acceptable; the corrected form is more natural.

× This is because there are a lot of tree and the fresh air with a lot of people want to do exercise here so they can easy to make friends with someone and find a partner to exercise together.

✓ This is because there are a lot of trees and fresh air, and many people want to exercise here, so they can easily make friends and find a partner to exercise with.

Use plural 'trees', change 'a lot of people' to 'many people'. Use adverb 'easily' not 'easy'. 'Make friends with someone' simplified to 'make friends'. Add 'with' after 'exercise' to be idiomatic.

× If I had a chance, I want to take a long walk in the beach when I go for a break across the coastline, I can watch the sunshine with my partner and maybe I can feeling the C5 and this is the perfect time for me.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on the beach along the coastline during my break; I could watch the sunshine with my partner and maybe feel the sea breeze, which would be the perfect time for me.

Conditional needs 'would' for the result clause. Use 'on the beach' and 'along the coastline'. 'Could' fits ability in conditional. 'Feel the sea breeze' replaces unclear 'feeling the C5'. Use relative clause 'which would be...' for clarity.

× I often go for a walk in my school's playground.

✓ I often go for a walk in my school's playground.

Sentence is acceptable in present habitual tense; no change needed. (Kept as is to match habitual action.)

× This is because these are only time when I have a break.

✓ This is because that is the only time when I have a break.

Use singular 'that is the only time' to refer to a single break period. 'These' and plural 'are' are incorrect here.

× I often go for work to change the atmosphere because you know, sitting on the class made me feel so tired, so I want to go the outside to enjoy.

✓ I often go for a walk to change the atmosphere because, you know, sitting in class makes me feel tired, so I want to go outside to relax.

Use 'go for a walk' not 'go for work'. 'Sitting in class' is correct preposition. Present simple 'makes' matches habitual action. Use 'go outside' (no article) and 'relax' instead of 'enjoy' for natural phrasing.