Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add a brief supporting detail. Avoid redundant phrasing (e.g., “15 minutes to 30 minutes” can be “15–30 minutes”).

Exemplo: Yes, I do walk regularly in summer. I try to walk for about 15–30 minutes every morning because it helps me wake up and stay fit.

Sugestão: Clarify and correct meaning (likely meant ‘go out’ not ‘go to work’). Use one clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Avoid repeating phrases (“after the dinner” twice).

Exemplo: Yes. As a child I often went out with my parents after dinner to a lovely park next to our house, where we would walk and relax together.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence then two concise specific reasons with linking words. Remove repetitions and awkward phrases (“while walking over”).

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because of the peaceful atmosphere and greenery. In addition, parks offer fresh air and space for exercise, which benefits physical and mental health.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer and then give two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., “the lakeside path,” “trees”) and avoid redundancy about ‘freshness’.

Exemplo: I would like to walk along a lakeside path because I could enjoy the view of the water and the flowering trees. Also, the greenery would provide fresh air and a relaxing atmosphere.

Sugestão: Be precise and avoid hesitation. Correct factual and grammatical mistakes (place name likely wrong, ‘10-minute drive’, ‘for about 20–30 minutes’, ‘fed’). Use one clear topic sentence then one or two concise supporting details. Remove fillers like “uh”.

Exemplo: Last week I went to a local park called Professor's Lake, about a 10-minute drive from my house. I walked there with friends for about 20–30 minutes, and we enjoyed feeding the ducks and fish.

× Due to this cold weather, I avoid walking these days, but during the summer I try to walk at least 15 minutes to 30 minutes every morning.

✓ Because of this cold weather, I avoid walking these days, but in the summer I try to walk for at least 15 to 30 minutes every morning.

The preposition 'due to' is usually used to modify a noun; 'because of' is more natural to introduce a reason for the action. 'During the summer' is acceptable but 'in the summer' is more idiomatic here. Use 'for' with a duration (walk for 15 to 30 minutes). Also simplify '15 minutes to 30 minutes' to '15 to 30 minutes'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× When I was a child, I used to go to work with my parents after the dinner.

✓ When I was a child, I used to go to work with my parents after dinner.

Omit the definite article 'the' before 'dinner' in this general context. The structure 'used to' correctly expresses a past habitual action; the error is article usage rather than tense. Remove 'the' to sound natural. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× We had a very beautiful park just beside our house and we always used to go there after the dinner meal.

✓ We had a very beautiful park right beside our house and we always used to go there after dinner.

Use 'right beside' instead of 'just beside' for naturalness. 'After the dinner meal' is wordy and unnatural; use 'after dinner'. Also 'used to' is correct for past habitual action. The main problems are preposition/word choice and article use. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I think people like the atmosphere in the park and the greenery.

✓ I think people like the atmosphere of the park and the greenery.

Both 'in the park' and 'of the park' can work, but 'atmosphere of the park' is more natural. This is a minor preposition/noun choice issue rather than tense. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Moreover, it is also beneficial for our for our health because there we can get fresh air while walking over, while running.

✓ Moreover, it is also beneficial for our health because we can get fresh air there while walking or running.

Remove the repeated phrase 'for our'. Place 'there' after 'fresh air' or directly after 'because' for natural word order. Use 'walking or running' instead of 'walking over, while running'. The main issues are redundant pronoun/phrase and awkward word order. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× So that is why most of the people prefer walking in parks.

✓ So that is why most people prefer walking in parks.

Use 'most people' rather than 'most of the people' when speaking in general. 'Most of the people' implies a specific group previously mentioned. This is a quantifier usage issue. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× If I get a chance, I would like to walk around on the path of lakeside area because there I can enjoy the view of lake and beautiful flowers and tree.

✓ If I got the chance, I would like to walk along the lakeside path because there I could enjoy the view of the lake and the beautiful flowers and trees.

The conditional should match: use 'If I got the chance' with 'would' or 'If I get a chance, I would like' is acceptable, but mixing present simple and would is less natural; I changed to second conditional. Use 'along the lakeside path' instead of 'on the path of lakeside area'. Add articles 'the' before 'lake' and plural 'trees'. Also 'could' matches the hypothetical. Main issues: phrasing and article/number corrections (present participle form note relates to 'walking' placement but here structure needed conditional alignment). Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Apart from that I can also get the fresh air due to the freshness of the greenery and the plants.

✓ Besides that, I can also get fresh air because of the greenery and plants.

Use 'Besides that' or 'Apart from that' with a comma. Say 'because of the greenery and plants' rather than 'due to the freshness of the greenery' which is wordy. Also omit 'the' before 'fresh air'. This corrects preposition and article usage. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I went into Professors Flake which is 10 minute drive from my house.

✓ I went to Professor's Lake, which is a 10-minute drive from my house.

Use 'to' rather than 'into' for visiting a place. Correct the place name to 'Professor's Lake' (assuming that was intended) and add hyphen and article: 'a 10-minute drive'. Add a comma before the relative clause. This fixes preposition and article/compound adjective errors. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I went there last week with my friends and we were walking there for almost 2230 minutes and uh, we also feeded some ducks and fish there, which is allowed there and we enjoyed that part most.

✓ I went there last week with my friends and we walked there for almost 20–30 minutes, and we also fed some ducks and fish there, which is allowed, and we enjoyed that part the most.

Use simple past 'walked' instead of past continuous for a short completed action. '2230 minutes' seems to be a typo for '20–30 minutes' and should be corrected. Past participle of 'feed' is 'fed', not 'feeded'. Use 'the most' to express the superlative. Also remove redundant 'there' where unnecessary. Main errors: past tense and past participle misuse and a numeric typo. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× we also feeded some ducks and fish there, which is allowed there and we enjoyed that part most.

✓ We also fed some ducks and fish there, which is allowed, and we enjoyed that part the most.

The verb 'feed' has irregular past tense 'fed', not 'feeded'. Capitalize sentence start and use 'the most' for emphasis. This corrects irregular past tense and minor phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 5}]} (end)