Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. 'keep time' → 'make time'), and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail about frequency or routine using a linking word (e.g. 'usually' or 'sometimes').

Exemplo: Yes, I walk regularly because I think walking is the best form of exercise. Usually I walk on a treadmill at home for about 30 minutes, but I also walk to my baby's school a few times a week when the weather is nice.

Sugestão: Be clearer and correct sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence about childhood, then contrast with present using a linking word like 'however' or 'nowadays'. Use specific examples and avoid confusing phrases like 'so busy in many walks.'

Exemplo: Yes, I used to go walking a lot as a child with my uncle and my father's sister. However, nowadays I am very busy with work and childcare, so I mostly walk on a treadmill at home rather than going outside.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with logical, specific reasons linked by words like 'because' and 'also'. Correct grammar (e.g. 'suitable place', 'work-ing' wrong) and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and greener than busy streets. Also, parks have trees, birds and cleaner air, which makes walks more relaxing and pleasant.

Sugestão: Use a clear conditional opening and precise, natural vocabulary (e.g. 'If I had the chance' and 'the beach is cool and calm'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' and give a brief specific reason for relaxation.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on the beach because the sea breeze and the sound of the waves are very calming. Also, walking on sand is good exercise and helps me clear my mind.

Sugestão: Answer directly with past simple, give a clear duration and a specific effect, and correct grammar ('I walked there for about one hour' and 'it made my mind feel fresh'). Use linking word 'so' or 'which' to connect details.

Exemplo: I went for a walk in a nearby park last weekend and walked for about an hour. It made me feel refreshed because the air was fresh and the surroundings were peaceful.

× Yes, I try to walk a lot because I believe that walking is the best exercise and everyone should keep sometimes for walking.

✓ Yes, I try to walk a lot because I believe that walking is the best exercise and everyone should set aside time for walking.

The original uses 'keep sometimes for walking' which is ungrammatical. This is an issue with verb + -ing phrase and word choice. Use 'set aside time for walking' to express allocating time; 'for walking' correctly uses the -ing noun form to indicate purpose.

× Generally I walk in a treadmill, but when I have to go my baby's school that time I try to walk.

✓ Generally I walk on a treadmill, but when I have to go to my baby's school I try to walk then.

Preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'treadmill' — use 'on a treadmill'. Also 'go my baby's school' lacks the preposition 'to'. The phrase 'that time' is unnecessary; reposition 'then' for clarity.

× Yes, when I was a child I often went for a walk outside with my father's aunt with my uncle.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often went for walks outside with my uncle and my father's aunt.

The tense 'went' is fine, but wording/order is awkward. Use plural 'walks' for habitual past action and correct the order and conjunction 'and' instead of repeating 'with'. This improves fluency while keeping past tense.

× But nowadays I'm so busy in many walks.

✓ But nowadays I'm very busy and don't have time to go on many walks.

Original misuses 'busy in many walks'. This is a present tense/state issue and preposition/phrase choice. Use 'I'm very busy' and 'don't have time to go on many walks' to convey current inability clearly.

× That's why I can't manage so much time for going outside and make a walk, but I manage it at home.

✓ That's why I can't find much time to go outside for a walk, but I manage to walk at home.

'Manage so much time for going outside' is incorrect. Use 'find much time to go outside for a walk'. 'Make a walk' is nonstandard; use 'go for a walk' or 'walk'. Also add 'manage to walk' to indicate ability.

× Parks are the beautiful place suitable place for walking.

✓ Parks are beautiful and suitable places for walking.

Redundant words and article misuse: 'the beautiful place suitable place' is incorrect. Use plural 'places' to agree with 'Parks', and adjectives 'beautiful' and 'suitable' should precede 'places'.

× That is because most of the roads become so busy in all the time and it is not suitable for working place.

✓ That is because most roads are busy all the time and they are not suitable for walking.

'Become so busy in all the time' is awkward; use 'are busy all the time'. 'Working place' is incorrect in context — likely 'walking place' or 'for walking'. Adjust subject agreement 'they are'.

× On the other hand, park is a place where there are so many trees and birds there.

✓ On the other hand, a park is a place where there are many trees and birds.

Missing/article and redundant 'there': 'park' needs an article 'a park'. Remove the final redundant 'there'. 'So many' can be simplified to 'many'.

× If I get a chance to walk in a long road, then I will choose a beach, because in a beach the environment become cool and calm.

✓ If I get a chance to walk along a long road, I would choose a beach, because at a beach the environment becomes cool and calm.

Several issues: 'walk in a long road' should be 'walk along a long road' (preposition). Conditional form: 'If I get a chance... I would choose' is more natural for hypothetical preference. Use 'at a beach' (preposition) and 'becomes' for subject-verb agreement.

× In addition, with the sound of the wave, all the things will make my brain relaxing.

✓ In addition, the sound of the waves helps my mind relax.

'Make my brain relaxing' is ungrammatical: 'make' + adjective is wrong here. Use 'helps my mind relax' or 'relaxes my mind'. Also plural 'waves' is more natural and 'mind' preferred over 'brain'.

× Last time I went in a park for a walk and at about one hour I walked there.

✓ Last time I went to a park for a walk and walked there for about an hour.

Use 'went to a park' (preposition) and 'walked there for about an hour' for correct past tense phrasing and natural time expression.

× It makes it made my mind fresh and the environment was.

✓ It made my mind feel refreshed and the environment was pleasant.

Original is ungrammatical: 'It makes it made' mixes tenses and words. Use past simple 'It made my mind feel refreshed' and complete the second clause 'the environment was pleasant' to express result clearly.